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successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school.
Discuss both views
ANSWER:
Graduating from high school, the young often wonder whether they ought to keep on
studying further or not. Many people suppose that continuing to study at university or
college can be the best way to guarantee their successful career, whereas others believe
working right after school is much better.
Working straight after graduation is beneficial in some ways. Firstly, young people are
able to earn money as soon as possible. If they finish high school, they will be mature
enough to live independently on their own income. It is common sense that having a job
can prove ones maturity. Secondly, a person who chooses to get a job instead of studying
higher is likely to progress rapidly in their career. This may bring about a good chance to
obtain a lot of real experience and skills for their chosen profession.
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why people have a tendency of choosing
to continue education after high school. First, a college education will provide young
people with more qualifications, which is what most employers expect these days.
University graduates will probably get a much higher salary than those without university
education. Furthermore, the job market is becoming more and more competitive. In fact,
people would be well-advised to get a degree, as hundreds of applicants often chase the
top jobs. It is an obvious advantage for university graduates. For example, graduate
engineers in Vietnam are highly paid and find it easy to get a top job
In conclusion, it seems evident that both working right after school and choosing to
continue higher study are advantageous in their own ways.
IELTS Marking
Criteria
Task Response
Cohesion and
coherence
Lexical resource
My comments
You wrote 274 words, which is enough! Aim for 260280 to be safe. Less than 250 will lose lots of marks.
Your first paragraph paraphrases the whole question .
Your points are all relevant and well supported with
examples and explanations
Band score
8.0
8.5~9.0
8.0
8.5~9.0
I hesitated over the score, whether the examiner would give 8.0 or 8.5 for this essay.
However, since I always try to follow the judgment of a strict examiner, I will score
8.0
+ Task response:
Cu hi ca bi a ra l: tho lun 2 quan im vi ngi tin rng nn tip tc i
hc, trong khi ngi khc tin rng nn i lm lun (mnh dch i cho nhanh) v bi
vit ca mnh tr li hon ton y cu hi ca bi.
Bi vit chia 4 kh: m bi, 2 kh thn bi, kt lun
-Intro: Gm 2 cu. Cu 1: paraphrase li cu ca bi 1 cch ngn gn. Cu 2: tr li
cu hi ca bi: rng bi vit ny s tho lun 2 quan im nu bi. Ch l mnh
nu c th, ko dng cc cu chung chung nh This essay examines both sides of views.
l cc cu dng c cho mi bi dng discussion s b nh gi l hc thuc lng -> ko
tt
-Thn bi : 2 kh thn bi mi kh mnh u bt u bng mt cu topic sentence vit
n gin, ngn gn
Thn bi 1: mnh tho lun quan im it is better to get a job straight after school. V
c 2 nh h tr cho idea ny. Th nht, Young people often need to earn money. Th
hai, if you start your career early you start to learn skills and gain experience right
away. Mnh gii thch v pht trin cc h tr trn y
Thn bi 2: tho lun quan im cn li v cng c 2 idea nh h tr cht ch nh kh
trn. Ch nh h tr th 2 competition for jobs is very fierce, and so qualifications
are vital mnh c a ra v d c th Vit Nam For example, graduate engineers in
Vietnam are highly paid and find it easy to get a top job. Cu rt n gin nhng gim
kho thch nhng cu nh vy
- Kt lun: mnh paraphrase ngn gn cc nu trn. ch : bi khng hi quan
im c nhn ca bn. tuyt i ko nu quan im c nhn kt lun v bt k phn no
trong essay.
V nhng l do trn -> im tiu ch hon thnh nhim v ca bi vit trn l band~8.0