Baldwin 1

Taylar Baldwin
Mr. Salow
English 11
Jan 5, 2017

Big Outline
*Make articles into groups the way they persuade you*
Thesis:
The thesis should be prominently displayed at the top. (do something to make it stand out
from the rest) Underneath the thesis you might give a couple sentences explaining context.
(This needs to be how all the groups connects to each other)
As I read through all of my research and articles I found most if not all were all
for the year round schooling system. Now going into the actual articles and reading them
the authors display both the negative and positive aspects of it, but to conclude in the end
the final result was always for the idea of the year round schooling calendar. I truly
believe that most authors that conducted their own research wanted to have an open
mind on whether YRS (year round schooling) was the best or not but in the end I believe
that all the information they found throughout their research they had no choice but to be
for YRS. The statistics and research about the idealization of YRS is always so convincing
for anyone to make them go for the concept of YRS.

First Point:

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This is a statement of your first point. It may be a couple of sentences or just one, but it is not
necessarily a topic sentence (that is for each paragraph; this introduces each section!)
To get across not just my main point but most everyone about YRS whether you
are for it or against is the look at the facts and statistics. With most everything you always
want to look deep and, not necessarily conduct research, but read the real, true facts.
Especially in todays modern world with so much technology. The majority of the articles
I found were written in the 90s or before and back then, yes they had internet, but they
didnt have such a broad browser that they had to evaluate whether a statistic was true or
not.

First sub-point:
This may be your paragraph level now, or it may still be an introduction for a sub-section. The
focus in either instance is to continue to work towards your evidence in a logical, step-by-step
manner.
Especially with the topic of YRS we need to be extra careful on
what we read and/or use in our own research and essays. Since YRS isnt that
popular of a schooling not a lot of people just know about it unless they have done
their research. Like myself. Before going into this I had the idea that YRS was
just like all year, you would get your normal breaks, (spring, christmas,
thanksgiving break etc..) and then you would hope that you got maybe a couple
days off here and there because it was a lot for the students and teachers. To get an
overview of all of what I just said really was to be careful on what you research
and the ways you use it yourself. Thats big when it comes to your own research
and essay. You cant use someone else's article that persuades you about the topic

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one way and you use that as a source but interpret it into persuading your
audience another way.

Evidence:
List quotes that you intend to use here that support the sub-point/topic sentence. Provide an
interpretation of the textwhat does it mean and why do you bring it up? Do this for each quote
you list, and remember to be specific!
The majority of the research concurred that year-round schools promote better
study habits and improved test scores while traditional schools were stagnant. Overall
findings in California public schools indicated that student in the year-round school had
higher scores in math, reading and science than those in schools with traditional
calendars (Dossett 2000).
I am using this quote from Leigh Anne Lyttles article (Year-Round
versus Traditional Schools) because hers has lots of good trustworthy
information that I know I can trust to further more backup my own points about
the subject.
The depression and Second World War brought a pressure for conformity that
ended most experiments in YRS, but by the late sixties, interest had been revived with a
steady move of schools to the year round schedule in a number of states across America
with various types of YRS calendar being implemented (Glines, 1996).
This quote comes from a very good collection of statistics on
whether YRS helps test scores or not. But towards the beginning I really love the
history aspect it gives us. That before the second world war YRS was an idea but
after all the chaos it dwindled down and then rose again eventually for it to
become not just an idea but a real thing in some places. I feel including the history

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background and not just piling the facts and beneficial statistics on the reader it
adds that extra boost that my essay can use to give it an extra interesting part of
my research.
Confronted by overcrowded schools and tight budgets, school districts in about
30 states are keeping schools open year round. (ERIC).
This is useful to my essay also sort of like the quote above because
it gives me the chance to give more of what I found instead of all the numbers,
and I think, it allows the reader to better understand and think more about the

concept of transitioning to YRS.

It was originally used in northern industrial cities to teach English to children

of immigrants. However, by the early 1900s, it was used to combat issues like
overcrowding and underfunding, two topics that are still relevant today.
This quote here to me is very big and important to my essay. It ties
the two quotes listed above together. This quote is fantastic for giving even more
information about the past two articles and their quotes from them even more of
the same relevant information but into one quote and its article it came from.
Although this article I got this quote from is from a website and not found on
ERIC, it provides along the same line of the same facts and statistics that the
articles from ERIC did. I am actually very happy I found this article and am
excited to see its beneficial influence it has for my own essay.