Task 4: Mind Mapping

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Course: English Communication Skills (Intermediate Level)
Instructor: Sherri Wu
Directions
1. Copy and paste your original paragraph in Part A.
2. Draw a mind map based on your original paragraph in Part B (keywords).
3. Check your mind map for the followings:
a. Are there a topic sentence and concluding sentence(s)?
b. Are there at least two supporting sentences along with details (facts, examples,
evidences, etc.)?
c. Is there a hook?
d. Are there transitions to connect ideas? The transitions below is for your reference.
One Another Also, For example/instance,
First of all, In addition, Next,
Second,
4. Revise your mind map in Part C. Highlight changes in red. Use this new mind
map to help you revise your HW 2 (for extra credits).

Part A. Paste your paragraph in the box below.

Sydney is one of the symbolic city in Australia, and I want to introduce some aspects of this amazing place
When it comes to the tech startup about Australia , we may think of Sydney within a second . Because the
biggest tech startup ecosystem in Australia is in Sydney. The advantages of the tech startup are that it will
create more jobs, boost Sydneys economy, and also make the city a more desirable place to live,work and
visit. However,it is just a small part of Sydney. There is a famous festival, Vivid Sydney. It is an annual
festival with three simple element : light, music, creativity. It has been hold since 2009 until now, and the
festival is so popular that it appeals almost 200 million people to come and enjoy this beautiful scene and
music. Beside these cultures in Sydney, there are two must-visited symbol of Sydney, Sydney Opera House
and the Sydney Harbour Bridge. Sydney Opera House is the most famous and symbolic tourist attraction in
Australia. This facility features a modern expressionist design, with a series of large precast concrete shells.
In recent years, it attracted more than 2 million people to visit this gorgeous building and also the opera
hosted in there. The Sydney Harbour Bridge also has its glamor. Climbing the Sydney Harbour Bridge is at
top ten travel experience in the world. Sydney Harbour Bridge is next to the Sydney opera house. You can
choose to climb at morning, sunset, and also night to view the different scenes of Sydney. In the future, I
must visit to Sydney once to feel the glamorous place on my own.

Part B. Draw a mind map based on your original paragraph.

Hook:
 Topic sentence:

Support 2
Support 1

Details Details

Concluding sentence(s):
Part C. Revise your mind map. Highlight your revisions in red.
Hook:
How much do you know about Sydney?

Topic sentence:

Support 1 Support 2

Details
Details
(reasons / e.g.)
(reasons / e.g.)

Concluding sentence(s):