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Nowadays, voluntary work has become popular in almost all

countries especially undeveloped and developing countries
because of its benefits to both volunteers and people received
help.
OK! Nhng nu l vit on th m on ny c th coi l hi
di.
Nowadays, voluntary work has become popular in almost all
country for some main reasons.
Mnh ngh bn ch cn ngn gn nh cu trn l n ri ^_^

* (1) To begin with the advantages volunteering brings to young

people, it is a way of giving back to community while developing
important social skills and gaining valuable work experience all at the
same time.
(2)Particularly,many teenagers choose doing volunteer work instead
of spending time lying and watching television to make more new
friends and contacts or to stay physically healthy/keep fit
=> Mnh thy 1 v 2 k c lin quan cho lm. Trong 1 on khi
bn a ra supporting idea th ngay sau bn nn add thm
details vo support nhng mnh li thy (1) v (2) bnh ng khng
ci no h tr cho ci no.
=> Bn b 2 i cng c.
=> C th vit 2 1 v d no c th cho vic giving back of
community

* (3)Not only is volunteering a rewarding experience but it also

increases benevolence among people

=> OK
=> Nhng support ca cu ny u? Bn phi support ti sao n li
increases lng nhn t ch?

* (4)Moreover, volunteering gives people an opportunity to change

peoples lives. including your own
(5)It gives you people the satisfaction of playing a role in someone
elses life, helping people who may not be able to help themselves
=> Mnh ngh cu ny khng cn thit, bn support lun bng cu 6
cng c m n cng sc tch hn ^_^
(6) For instance, there are many people in remote areas have
difficulty in life such as lacking of foods, fresh water or school for
children therefore they need volunteers help to improve their living
condition.
=> For instance, volunteers can help people who have difficulties in
life to improve their living condition.
=> Cu ny hi lng cng bn c th vit ngn gn nh trn.
(7). In short, people should do voluntary work within their capabiltreen
to not only help people but also achieve/salve these aforementioned
good effects. because what goes around come around
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