Student 1

2/22/2017

Argumentative essay

Are cell phone in class a good thing or a bad thing ? Commented [SC1]: Make sure we are capitalizing the
right words

Should cell phones be banned in school? Most schools have banned cell phone but it

can help with kids online work. Most students have music on there phone so you dont have to Commented [SC2]: Give another sentence of background
knowledge that is like this one!
buy music. Although we dont want student on games or social media in class, cell phone Commented [SC3]: This will be one of you reasons, dont
include this here
should be allowed because they can be used as a resources, for listening to music, and it also

help with improves grades.

An the article state 40 used of phones "that can make videos, videos can be used to Commented [SC4]: Follow MEAL PLAN. You are missing a
main statement (topic sentence) and link.
record experiments and later include them in projects." Cell phone in class can help with

experiment like videos online. In the article 40 used of phone for smart phone in school it states

that, "there are a multitude of dictionary applications that allow you to check the meaning of a

world instantly." Student are able to find the definitions of word easier and faster then using a

regular dictionary.

If they use their phones , they wont have to wait for it to log on. cell phone should be

used ads resins because they are faster then logging into computer ,witch will save class time. Commented [SC5]: Is this one of your reasoning?

Secondly, Ccell phone should be allowed in class to listen to music.The author of

"student thoughts listing to music in school" states, " music is shown to help kids with Commented [SC6]: If this is an article it needs to be
capitalized
ADD/ADHD to concentrate better on there work in front of them and keeping their mind od
distractions." listing Listing to music most kids have music on there phones.The author of listing Commented [SC7]: Reword. Explain your quote a little
further
to music says "statics shown the 79 percent of students /workers listen to music while they are Commented [SC8]: Is this the actual title of the article? F
it is it needs to be capitalized
doing jobs so that they can productivity by keeping them focus on their jobs." This shows thatW Commented [SC9]: Use transition words like these to
help the flow of your paper
when student can listen to music they can get more work done. Listen to music can in prove

improve a lot when get to listen to there music.

Lastly, Hhaving cell phone in class can improve grades. The article kids wireless use facts Commented [SC10]: Intext citation?
-Be sure to include the author or article title along with
quotations
68 percent of students agree that mobile and apps can teach reading. 67 percent think they can
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help teach math."I can help improve their reading grades . "62 percent believe mobile dives

benefit students learning". Over haft of the parents believed that cell phone should be allowed

in the class.schools should be allow cell phone because they improve grades. Commented [SC11]: Revise this paragraph. I think you
were rushing and there are a lot of errors. Im confused on
whats a quote, article, and your analysis
Clearly I understand that cell phone should not be used in school because students

maybe on social media. They can be also on games. hHowever, students logout social media

and the school can also block it.Students may have games on there phone but a loptop.cyber

bullying wont they not be doing with cell phone. Commented [SC12]: Fix these last two sentences. They
are a little confusing.
I think I know what you are trying to say but just be more
clear.

Schools can blocked. Although they cant can not block games and on the laptop they have games to so Commented [SC13]: Is this supposed to be here?
Commented [SC14]: Reorganize this paragraph
it will be on them. There no cyber bullying because social media will be blocked.thre parents can sign a -Start off by stating your topic
oEx: schools should allow call phones in class even
through they can be distraction
paper for them to use them. Student should be allowed to have cell phone in class.it cheaper then a
-Then restate your three main reasons and briefly explain
them
laptop ,most kids have them.90 percent kids have cell phone in class. -Lastly, leave the reader with something to think about
 Works cited

Flannigan, Danielle. "Student's Thoughts on Listening to Music in School." Daily Herald. N.p., 01 Apr.
2015. Web. 16 Feb. 2017.

Graham, Edward. "Using Smartphones in the Classroom." NEA. N.p., n.d. Web. 16 Feb. 2017.

"Growingwireless.com." Growingwireless.com. N.p., n.d. Web. 16 Feb. 2017.

"Kids Wireless Use Facts." Kids Wireless Use Facts. Growing Wireless, n.d. Web. 22 Feb. 2017.

Leyden, Andrea. "40 Uses For Smartphones in School." ExamTime. N.p., 19 Feb. 2015. Web. 16 Feb. 201