A funny moment:

Last month I learned that sometimes its incredible to receive a surprise. Commented [HD1]: Wrong word: Incredible is not the most
suitable word . Consider : wonderful, great, etc.

I like the attempt to write a good introduction. Keep trying!

It was my birthday and all through the house was calm. After having my Commented [HD2]: Pronoun missing. I was calm.

breakfast, I received a telephone call from my mother. She gave me a really

strange message and I realised that I was totally alone. Suddenly, I was
running around the city. I saw my sister, so I calmed down and I returned to
my house. I entered and I discovered that my family were preparing a
surprise for me. Commented [HD3]: Missing word : Surprise party.

The language is clear, but a little vague. What was the strange message.
Perhaps it might have helped to say: She gave me a really strange message
because of which I had to leave the house and rush around the city.

I passed a funny moment with them, but they should be more carefull the Commented [HD4]: First, the word funny is used incorrectly.
Funny means hahaha. Fantastic, awesome, lovely are better
next time. optionsand yes, you can have fun!
Also, you cannot PASS a funny moment. You HAVE a fantastic,
lovely time..
A good first attempt. Your choice of tenses is good, and so is the sentence
Commented [HD5]: Wrong spelling. Only two or three words
structure. Keep writing! The more you practise, the better your writing have the suffix full. All other words end with fulcareful,
beautiful, spoonful, etc.
gets!
However..
1. Consider using punctuations like exclamations, hyphens, and even
question marks to increase the quality of your writing.
2. Idioms, phrasals also add positively to your writing. Try to use at
least a few.