Commented [HD1]: Incorrect title. A story.

History is a subject
A history you study. BUT I am sure you could invent a better title!

Twas the night before Christmas and all her family was in the house to Commented [HD2]: Punctuation. Twas
Commented [HD3]: Brilliant way to start with this line from the
have dinner. Even though she had a smile on her face, she was really sad, classic poem!
because her father wasnt there. Commented [HD4]: Aarrgghhhh! Infinitive or ing ? Was in the
house having dinner!!!!!!
Interesting way to open. I am curious.

Last year, Lucy came into the house and she noticed that something was Commented [HD5]: In retrospect, I think this tense is incorrect.
Consider..last year, Lucy had come into the house and had noticed
going wrong. Her parents were shouting at the kitchen, so she decided to that something was wrong. Her parents were shouting in .

walk the dog. During the dinner, all through the house was calm, her Commented [HD6]: AAAAAARRRRGGGHHHH! In the kitchen!

parents were extremely serious, and she thought that the best option was Commented [HD7]: Wrong word. You mean although?

not to say anything. Before going to bed, Lucy took a shower to relax her
body and begin to study for the exam. Suddenly, some tiers were running Commented [HD8]: Spelling . Tears

on her face, because she was sufficiently mature to understand the situation Commented [HD9]: Tears run down her face/cheeks or all over
her face.
and what was going to happen. The next day was difficult for Lucy. Her
father talked to her and he told her that he had decided to live a new life
without his family. You are completely crazy, dad!, shouted Lucy, and she
left the room.
Dramatic to the core, with a touch of pathos.

When all the family had finished theIR meal, she decided to go to her
bedroom. Her mum was following her to gave Lucy a letter. She closed the Commented [HD10]: Tricky tenses. Her mum followed her and
gave her
door to let Lucy being alone. She discovered that the letter was written by Commented [HD11]: Infinitive or ing
her father. Lucy took a book that his father had given her when she was
only a kid. She put the letter back between the pages of the old book.

This is a beautiful story! Quite touching, with a bit of soul, and told in the
manner of a great storyteller. I love the way you finished the story. One can
immediately empathise with Lucy. Lovely !!!