Selina Pea

Professor Doutherd
November 14,2017
English 5M
Difference Between Both
Part 1:
International Baccalaureate (IB) students are required to do a History Internal
Assessment on any topic. I specifically chose to do it on the New Deal Plan during the Great
Depression. In order to answer the question, I had to argue if whether or not the New Deal plan
was beneficial. To argue that it was beneficial, I choose reliable online sources and specifically
focussed on the Home Owners Loan Act (act from the New Deal Plan) to prove that the New
Deal Plan was beneficial. This assignment is like a research essay in which a question is formed,
and must include a table of context, plan of investigation, summary of evidence, evaluation of
sources (origin, purpose, value, limitations), analysis, and conclusion. Specifically, the question
that was answered was, to what extent did the First Deal Plan help improve the economic crisis
of the Housing and Mortgage Reform during the Great Depression in 1933.
The exigence for this essays is demonstrating skills and knowledge by analyzing and
proving that the First New Deal Plan helped improve the economy. The need for writing this
assignment is that its an IB requirement that helps determine if students get the IB Diploma.
This essay is in a historical and academic context since its purpose is demonstrating
knowledge on a historical event. The context is historical because the writing is based on a
historical event, and its academic because it was a school assignment. What gave rise to the
content is that the Great Depression has been one of United States worst economic recessions in
history. Also, since I was an IB student, doing a historical IA was a requirement which also gave
rise to the context.
Some constraints for the essay is that most of the sources focus on the Great Depression
rather than the New Deal Plan. In addition, most sources are biased because they only prove that
the New Deal was beneficial; therefore, the whole essay is one sided. Another constraint is that I
didn't use a lot of personal knowledge which led to a lack of authority. For example, since I was
basing the whole essay on outside sources, it made the research essay seem more of a summary
of the sources rather than an analysis. In the IA, since all of the sources proved that the New
Deal Plan was beneficial, I just agreed with the authors and never stated my opinion. By not
stating my actual opinion, it can be seen as a limitation because it shows a lack of knowledge on
the topic.
The audience for the research essay (IA) is the IB moderator and teachers since they were
the ones who graded it. However, since this essay is informative, anyone interested in learning
about the New Deal Plan would benefit from it. In addition, anyone refinancing their homes
would benefit from it aswell since the Home Owners Loan Act is the process of refinancing a
house.
Part 2:
Writing in the Business field is very important much as writing for a English paper. In the
business field writing is used for manuels, emails, business plans, progress reports, or
powerpoints. In this field, it's important for the writing to be clear, straightforward, and
persuasive.
The exigence (purpose) in business writing is persuading, in order to gain customers. The
context is in business where there is an individual organization, community, or particular project.
As for the audience, there are many audiences such as a salesperson, warehouse workers, or the
boss.
Clearness is one of the most important key factors in writing for the field. If a message is
unclear it can be misleading which can cause lower productivity, costly mistakes, loss of
clients, and law morale. (Writing and Researching in Business and Professional Communities,
154) For example, when writing an email for a boss or co-worker it's important for the email to
be clear in order for them to understand. Also, when doing a PowerPoint, the writing must be
clear in order for the audience to read and understand it.
In addition, being direct and straightforward in the writing is very important as well. For
example, when presenting a new plan, it's easier to describe or present it by using subheadings,
charts, or diagrams. By using these things it makes it easier for the audience to understand since
it avoids wordiness and keeps the information more organized.
Lastly, using persuasive language is very important in the business field because it helps
gain clients. If a business is capable of persuading people, they can convince them to buy a
certain product. If persuasive language is not used, it would not convince people to buy their
product decreasing the likelihood of the businesses success.

Part 3:
If the research essay from part one were turned into a person specializing in the business
field, it would not be considered a good paper. The main reason why it would not be a good
essay is because the context is different, and because the structure for the IA and in business
writing is completely different.
Since the research essay is used in a historical and academic context, compared to the
business context, it causes the IA to not be a good paper. The research paper is more informative
rather than persuasive since it is just presenting facts and proving that the New Deal Plan was
beneficial. Although it may be persuasive in convincing the audience that it was beneficial, it is
not persuasive in trying to convince the audience to take action or accept a proposal. In the
business field a purchaser mentioned that in order for them to convince people to do what they
want them to do, they have to persuade them by using persuasive and logical language. (Writing
and Researching in Business and Professional Communities, 155) If they were to use persuasive
language, they could eventually convince their boss for a new plan or a new item to be sold.
In addition, another reason why it wouldn't be a good essay is because the structure is
completely different. In the IA the purpose is to make it easy to understand by creating a table of
context, summary of evidence, evaluation of sources, and conclusion. Compared to a business
field writing concise language, clear organization, and visual aids like graphs and charts make
it easier to understand. (Writing and Researching in Business and Professional Communities,
153) Since the IA does not meet the requirements for a business writing, it would receive a low
grade by a professor specialized in the field.
Although the research essay would be a bad paper there are similar techniques that
could still be used when doing a business writing. For example, when writing in the business
field studies show that careful attention to grammar is needed[,] critical thinking, analysis,
supporting and deconstructive arguments, organizing ideas, and appealing to an audience...
(Writing and Researching in Business and Professional Communities, 155) All these things are
also important characteristics that can be used in the IA as well which helps state that although
writing for both is different, there are still some similarities. Another similarity is that for the IA
many online sources were used to prove that the New Deal was beneficial; likewise, in business
writing, online sources can be used to support a proposal. By practicing the same or similar
principles it could eventually help for future writing situations in the business field.