De Aundria Scott

Dr. Mitchell

UWRT 1104

November 2, 2017

Peer Evaluation Letter

Dear Carmen,

I felt that your research essay had a compelling hook. It draws your readers in with a

personal experience. Although you are not exactly a scholar at your topic, the fact that you pulled

in a personal experience regarding your topic makes your readers view you as more credible and

relatable. You have sound coherence, being able to move from topic to topic without blips. You

had a few sentences where it was hard to pinpoint exactly what you were talking about. It would

be good for you to write as if your reader has no knowledge of this topic what so ever. Adding

more evidence to your paper would give your illustrations more credibility and back up. The real

life examples you used like the story with your sister and the UNC Charlotte student is very good

to relate to and keep the reader interested but to hold the readers interest I think you should begin

to add in your evidence. Evidence from credible sources will allow you to branch off with your

illustrations yet continue to stay credible. Also remember to keep your transitions flowing and

going. You had good transition in the beginning but just keep and mind and be sure that the

ending sentence for the paragraph above will flow directly into the beginning sentence for the

paragraph above.

Sincerely,

De Aundria Scott