Reading Response #2 Commented [1]: Alex, good job with this response.

I
Alex Gerardo Gutierrez would have liked you to be a little more clear about
your claim section. I had to work a bit too much to pick
apart what you were trying to say in that particular
Text section. Also, when it came to the connection section,
as much as I appreciate you experimenting and moving
Donna,Ferris.What is a Multilingual Writer? English Department Pp.23-27 around the elements, I don't think it was successful this
time because of how the elements themselves were
developed. The system was designed to help you be
Summary able to see the connections between elements more
In the article, What is a Multilingual Writer?, professor Donna Ferris explained through various clearly in a linear manner. I would like to see how you
do with the linear elements as they are in the template
examples what is a multilingual writer and what characteristics they may have. In the article, although, you are welcome to try breaking the mold
professor Ferris, explains through thorough explanations how a multilingual student has trouble again next time.

writing in the format that is expected in college, regarding; the format of a paper, the content in This response has earned a 3. 10/10 points.
said format and the level of diction that is expected of a college student. As is, it explains how a
Unfortunately, your extra quote is not eligible for extra
multilingual student has a hard time keeping up with grammatical errors that should not be credit because you did not use it in your response as
shown in the Extra Credit Template on SacCT.
presented in an essay and as well has a hard time structuring sentences and writing a well
structured essay. Commented [2]: Correction, because of incorrect
MLA, your score is 9/10
Commented [3]: Good, Alex.
Claim
Commented [4]: I am not sure which option you are
If applicable, a student whom is bilingual should practice their skills and evolve their level of referring to with this claim. Next time, can you use the
diction and identify, early on, what are they lacking as a writer in order to successfully write a question as part of your answer so I know which one
you are talking about?
well written essay to the professors expectations.
Commented [5]: This sentence includes a lot of
It is necessary that a student should develop skills in grammar and basic structure specific stuff. For the purpose of these responses, you
qualifications and further improve their ability to write college level essays at college were asked to choose the one most important thing for
each of the claim options. Here I am seeing multiple
level writing. things, practice skills, evolve their level, identify what
they are lacking. That is a lot to tackle.

Data Commented [6]: who

Commented [7]: What I see in this section:
A ML student should practice, evolve and identify skills
Taking steps to improve academic reading skills may be important for college students. they lack as a writer because it is necessary that
But it is especially necessary for ML writers (26) students should do this to improve their writing ability.
The more one reads, the more one learns about the language, and the more tools are It seems like you are using both spaces to say the
available for writing(26) same thing.
. Commented [8]: You've already introduced the quote
when you said "As mentioned by..." One of them
Connection should go.
Commented [9]: This section would be much stronger
As mentioned by professor Ferris, the ability for a writer to improve their skills is necessary for without this part. Your next sentence states this in a
much more acceptable manner.
any writer as stated in the following, Taking steps to improve academic reading skills may be
important for college students. But it is especially necessary for ML writers (26).Practicing Commented [10]: I appreciate what you try to do here
with the moving of the elements. Let's see if it worked:
makes perfect; therefore, a student should take it upon themselves to develop new skills in
writing and perfect the skills that they have, as why i chose the quote to state how improvement First you introduce data (blue) stating that improving
academic reading skills is important especially for
in needed for college ML writers.If applicable, a student whom is bilingual should practice their college ML writers. Then you explain the logic
(magenta) of how this quote connects to the claim you
skills and evolve their level of diction and identify, early on, what are they lacking as a writer in haven't mentioned. Then you state the claim that
students who are bilingual should practice their skills to...
order to successfully write a well written essay to the professors expectations. It is necessary
that a student should develop skills in grammar and basic structure qualifications and further
improve their ability to write college level essays at college level writing.

Vocabulary Commented [11]: Good!

1. Contrastive; The adjective contrastive means showing the difference between two things
when you compare them; ML students who have learned to read and write in another
language may be effective by contrastive or intercultural rhetoric
2. Rhetoric; the art of effective or persuasive speaking or writing, especially the use of
figures of speech and other compositional techniques; ML students who have learned to
read and write in another language may be effective by contrastive or intercultural
rhetoric
3. Systematic; according to a fixed plan or system; methodically.;Second, ML writers
might consider studying English academic vocabulary in systematic way