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Fall 2005

Paragraphs: Clarity, Cohesion, and Coherence
Paragraphs make promises. As we start reading a paragraph, we develop a certain expectation of what topic is going to be addressed or proven. We then expect the subsequent sentences to deliver on that promise. When we talk about clarity, we mean that what we are reading is clear and understandable. However, in order for an entire passage to seem clear, readers need more than individually clear sentences. They need the passage to be both cohesive and coherent.

The First Principle of Cohesion: Old-to-New
A paragraph is cohesive when all of the sentences “go together” in a logical sequence. We feel one sentence is cohesive with the next when we see at the beginning of a second sentence information that appeared toward the end of the previous one. That’s what creates our experience of “flow.” For example: Some astonishing questions about the nature of the universe have been raised by scientists studying black holes in space. A black hole is created by the collapse of a dead star into a point perhaps no larger than a marble. So much matter compressed into so little volume changes the fabric of space around it in puzzling ways. In other words you should: 1. Begin sentences with information familiar to your readers. That information can either come from a sentence or two before (as in the above), or it can be general information that your reader brings to the subject. 2. End sentences with information the reader cannot anticipate. Whatever is familiar and simple is easier to understand than what is new and complicated, and readers always prefer to read what is easy before they read what is hard.

Coherence: A Sense of the Whole
It’s easy to confuse these words, because they sound so much alike: • • Think of cohesion as the experience of seeing pairs of sentences fit neatly together, the way two Lego pieces do. Think of coherence as the experience of recognizing what all of the sentences in a piece of writing add up to, the way lots of Lego pieces add up to a building, bridge, or boat.

Adapted from “Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace” by Joseph Williams

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