Montejo 1

Darnell Montejo

Professor Batty

English 101

29 May 2019

One Way to Stay Reflection

Let’s reflect on how I revised my argument essay “One Way to Stay” and how I

improved it. This essay is on one specific group of college students and the group I chose to

focus on was first-generation Latinx students. I started by completely adding a new hook to my

introduction because I felt like it was missing one and needed a much stronger introduction.

Then, I went on to look over my organization on this essay and made sure I was talking about

one topic in each body paragraph. I had to fix a couple of grammar and spelling mistakes that I

did not catch the first time. I continued to edit the body paragraph and I moved around a quote

that didn’t really fit in the second paragraph and switched them around and it to my counter

argument because I felt like it fit there much better. I fixed a couple of citing issues I had

especially moving the works cited page to its own page. I tried to remove as many repetitive

sentences I had written before that was a big issue, I had with most of the paragraphs I would just

repeat myself instead of backing up my argument. I changed and edited my counter argument

completely; I used a much better quote and I tried to explain the counter argument and be much

clearer with that. I also tried to make my stance on the whole essay much clearer as well.