Keilanna campagna Commented [1]: Name: Keilanna Campagna

Topic Selection: Essay focuses on a specific challenge

faced by Latinx students.
Holly batty 5/5
Title: The title is both creative and informative.
English 101 2.5/5
Thesis: Essay states ONE specific solution to a
challenge faced by Latinx students. Counterargument
10-8-19 is also addressed.
16/20
Development/Support: Ideas are fully developed. Three
Student leniency:If only I could... reliable sources used to support your thesis.
23/30
Organization: The ideas appear in a logical order; the
paragraphs are internally organized; the paper uses
transitions to move from one idea to the next.
Although it is commonly agreed that students need to time management is an essential key to 15/20
Spelling/Grammar/Mechanics: The paper is virtually
free of spelling, grammar, or mechanical errors.
success, meany undermine the unexpected and its constant ability to interfere with our lives. 6/10
MLA Citation: The paper uses MLA style citation for
Today, we place a heavy responsibility on our youth because we expect them to succeed, but quotes, paraphrases, summaries, and a Works Cited
page.
1/5
sometimes those expectations can push kids too far. Leniency is an important trait in teachers to MLA Formatting: The paper uses MLA formatting,
including 12 point Times New Roman font, double
spacing, one inch margins, etc. (See your handbook for
help students succeed, however it‘s presence becomes scarcer as children get older in K through a sample paper.)
2/5
12 education, culminating in the expectedly low-leniency of college. Because Latinx students Page Length: The paper is 3-4 complete pages long.
Papers less than 3 COMPLETE pages will not earn a
passing grade.
have their household responsibilities,and personal troubles, the faculty needs to show more No
Total: 70.5/100
Comments: Keilanna, you have chosen a great topic!
leniency to accommodate, and should understand that there are more aspects in a student’s life Your thesis is clear, but it should also mention the
counterargument, and you need to spend some time in
they worry about aside from the academics. Showing children they are more than a machine built the body of the essay looking at this opposing view.
You could also answer the question “so what?” in the
thesis. Why is this an important matter? Your body
solely on rules will better confidence in children in the system and in turn their grades. paragraphs are lacking focus; you are not sticking to
discussing the topic sentences. Also, I think you need
to be more strategic when choosing quotes that
illustrate the point you are making. You also need to
work on making quote sandwiches. You are also
One good example of children who's usually educated without much leniency would be the bordering on plagiarism here, as you are missing in-
text citations and give no credit to your quotes. Also in
the “conclusion” paragraph (it reads more like a body
latino population. Latinx students have many at home responsibilities that can sometimes affect paragraph because you are bringing up new points and
quotes), you are missing the quotations marks on your
quote that is also a little too long. You have some MLA
their school work and studies.These responsibilities have a cultural influence, primarily focusing formatting errors to correct, including the works cited.
You hav
on the given child’s gender, with boys receiving as equally trying, but fundamentally different

from the girls. Men are given their generic “macho” expectations, while women receive a more

detailed set of expectations. Both gender’s roles are decided by their culture and is usually heavy
pressed into them, becoming just as important with the person as other aspects in their life. What

teachers and many in the educational field don’t understand is just how time and energy

consuming it is for these latino students to follow these cultural norms, and resaerch shows that

“The various girls that Valenzuela interviewed did not seem to view their support either as a

chore or as the fulfillment of sexist expectations”. By not being lenient and realizing this

particular expectation which cost our students more energy, we may be piling on too many noo

expectations and demanding their priority over cultural values too harshly.

Latinx students have responsibilities outside of school that can sometimes take over their

studies. When parents push their children harder in their home responsibilities, in the mind of an

adolescent, those chores may seem more important than school. According to Teresa M.

Nesman,“The dropout of Latino adolescents from public schools has been linked to behavioral

health issues such as delinquency and family conflict”(Nesman). In public schools, most teachers

place strict deadlines for assignments with very little “wiggle room”. When teachers do this, and

a student is unable to complete the assignment due to at home situations the students grades will

suffer in response.

With these in place, latinx students with strict at home responsibilities don’t get the needed time

to complete assignments within strict due dates and fail. All these fails add up to ultimately

causing the student to lose motivation and drop out to continue their family lifestyle and work

low income jobs and struggle to live. Without providing students early on in their careers a

concrete schedule for every aspect in their lives such as school work, it shows that it leads to

later on complications in both time management and in behavioral tenancies.

 zLatinx students are under more pressure and this can ultimately push latinx students to drop

out. With the stigma of the rising statistics behind the rates of which they drop out increasing,

more teachers tend to give up supporting them throughout their educational journey. Not only do

these students lack the support and fall behind, but new work is still constantly added, increasing

stress and the margin of which they differ from succeeding students. ... Hispanic and Black

American at-risk students and students who had dropped out, described experiences with

uncaring teachers who did not like them or did not believe in their ability to succeed in education

… These students perceived the negative teacher attitudes as related to racial prejudice but

remarked that there was "no help"for students who struggled academically thus indicating such

lack of help to be a more general phenomenon and not always related to minority status or race.”

If we wish to support these children, we must show them firsthand that support for them is what

we want to give, and the first step in this is understanding the different limitations we all face.

Leniency is not only about preventing a child from suffocating under all their responsibilities,

but rather it is to give them more leeway in hopes that it will benefit them in the long run.

Grossman, Herbert. Emotional and Behavioral Problems in the

Classroom : A Memoir. Charles C Thomas, 2000.

EBSCOhost,

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Nesman, Teresa M. “A Participatory Study of School Dropout and

Behavioral Health of Latino Adolescents.” Journal of

Behavioral Health Services & Research, vol. 34, no. 4, Oct.

2007, pp. 414–430. EBSCOhost, doi:10.1007/s11414-007-

9082-2.