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If you want to succed, you should Following this process will increase
follow this process. one's chances for success.
Do not use statistics without proper reference: Do not write a percentage at least you
are pretty sure.
Use passive voice (Impersonal + Objective) e.g. “It is believed by some that
widespread use of technology in daily life is affecting the way people interact with one
another.”
Try use more academic vocabulary
Expressions:
Avoid vague language
Avoid vague expressions like ‘lots of’. Use ‘a significant/considerable number’, or give
exact amounts if you have the data. Little and big are also vague. Use small or large to
be more formal, and give the specific size if you know it.
Also avoid ‘get’ phrases such as get better/worse or get a job. Use ‘improve’ or
‘deteriorate’ and ‘find employment’.
‘Good’ and ‘bad’ are simplistic words. Use descriptive adjectives, such as ‘positive’ or
‘beneficial’ and ‘negative’ or ‘detrimental’.
Lesson Aims
There is no one correct style of academic writing and with practice you will develop your own ‘voice’.
This two-part lesson aims to show you ways to improve your academic voice by composing and
checking your written work with formality in mind.
Original Rewritten:
These days a lot of kids are starting school early. Currently, a significant percentage of children in
Before, they began at 5, but now it's normal to industrially developed societies are starting
start at 4 or younger. Why is this? One thing is school at the age of four or less, whereas a few
that mums need to get back to work. Is it good for decades ago, five was the normal age. There are
the kids? Whitebread (2013) has studied this and numerous reasons for this change. One example
says that early schooling doesn't help them get is the need for mothers to resume earning income
ahead later in life. I'm not sure this is true, in the workforce. There are various views about
considering excellent education systems in the effects of earlier schooling on the children
countries where kids start young e.g. Singapore concerned. Whitebread (2013) claims that it does
and South Korea. not lead to improved results in later schooling.
However, this is debatable considering the
impressive rates of numeracy and literacy in
countries such as Singapore and South Korea,
where children begin school at an early age.
Academic Style 2
Lesson Aims
Paraphrasing is an important aspect of academic writing. It involves expressing original ideas in your
own words, while acknowledging the source of the original ideas. This lesson will:
1. define paraphrasing and its characteristics
2. outline steps to take when paraphrasing
3. give examples of paraphrasing techniques
4. give you a chance to paraphrase a short paragraph
What is a paraphrase?
A paraphrase is when you write published information and ideas in your own words, without changing
the meaning of the original text. It is a way of including ideas from your research in your writing, as
long as your paraphrase includes an appropriate reference. You need to paraphrase so that you do not
copy (plagiarise) intellectual property and to show your understanding of ideas, rather than just
repeating them.
Characteristics of a paraphrase
A paraphrase is usually about the same length as the original text, unlike a summary, which is shorter
than the original text. It may contain details, because it should reflect the precise meaning of the original
text. An effective paraphrase will:
use different words and sentence structures to the original text
keep the same meaning at the original text
After you have recorded the key ideas in note form, avoid using the original text while writing. This
will help to prevent plagiarism.
1. Try to reconstruct the ideas using your own sentence structures, different word forms and the
synonyms in your notes.
2. Include the reference details of the information (author/s and year).
3. Compare your paraphrase with the original text. Does it accurately represent the essential
information in a new way?
4. When you practise, ask your classmates and teachers to help you compare and check if you are
not confident.
Paraphrasing techniques
You can use a variety of techniques to change an original text. Here are some examples. Original Text:
“…the increasing diversity of students now requires that all courses should be developed with a wide
variety of approaches and ways to learn if all students in the course are to be taught well” (Bates, 2015).
You can change the word order of sentences e.g. active to passive or passive to active
Bates (2015) argues that in order to teach a diverse range of students well, a number of approaches to
learning are required in the development of courses.
You can change the word forms of some words in sentences e.g. noun to adjective or verb to
noun
With a growing number of students from diverse backgrounds and situations, various methods of
teaching need to be considered in the development of effective learning materials (Bates, 2015).
Each example retains the meaning of the original text, but there are no chains or chunks of words
from the original texts. Key words, such as 'students' and 'courses' are kept. The best
paraphrasing will combine all three techniques.
Paraphrasing example
Look at the two paragraphs and consider the following questions:
1. Are the paragraphs a similar length?
2. How does the first sentence differ in each paragraph?
3. What synonyms can you find in the two paragraphs
4. Has the paraphrase organised the ideas in the same way as the original? What differences do
you see?
5. Is the meaning the same in the paraphrased text?
6. Is it appropriately referenced?
It is often believed that academic writing, particularly scientific writing, is factual. However, an
important feature of academic writing is the concept of cautious language, or hedging.
It is necessary to make decisions about the strength of the claims you are making and to demonstrate
competence in using an appropriate voice or register in your specialist area.
Examples of hedging
Compare the following pairs of sentences and note the difference in meaning and voice.
1.It appears to
establish three categories:
1.There is the first contains
1.The data possibly
experimental work to wordings generally
supports the
show that a week or 1.The results shown in 1.It is likely that agreed to be acceptable,
hypothesis, but further
ten days may not Figure 1 suggest that vinculin localises in the second wordings
sampling would need which appear to have
be long enough and a stratified sampling by low amounts at the
to be undertaken to
fortnight to three gender … basement membrane … been at some
increase the reliability time problematic but are
weeks is probably the
of the final result. now acceptable, and the
best theoretical period. third wordings which
remain inadmissible.
Look at the original text below. Note the language in bold. Rewrite the text using more cautious
approach. Use a range of hedging language. There are a number of possibilities!
Original Text:
A team of American scientists have found a way to reverse the ageing process. They fed diet
supplements, found in health food shops, to elderly rats, which were then tested for memory and
stamina. The animals displayed more active behaviour after taking the supplements, and their memory
improved. In addition, their appearance became more youthful and their appetite increased. The
researchers say that this experiment is a clear indication of how the problems of old age can
be overcome. They state that in a few years’ time everyone will be able to look forward to a long and
active retirement.
A team of American scientists appear to have found a way to reverse the ageing process. They fed diet
supplements, probably found in health food shops, to elderly rats, which were then tested for memory
and stamina. The animals seem to displayed more active behaviour after taking the supplements,
and their memory apparently improved. In addition, their appearance became more youthful and their
appetite presumably increased. The researchers believe that this experiment is a clear indication of how
the problems of old age could be overcome. They suggest that in a few years’ time perhaps everyone
would be able to look forward to a possibly long and active retirement.
Example response:
A team of American scientists may have found a way to reverse the ageing process. They fed diet
supplements, usually found in health food shops, to elderly rats, which were then tested for memory
and stamina. The animals seemed to display more active behaviour after taking the supplements,
and their memory generally improved. In addition, their appearance became more youthful and their
appetite tended to increase. The researchers believe that this experiment is a clear indication of how
the problems of old age could possibly be overcome. They estimate that in a few years’ time a large
number of people could potentially look forward to a relatively long and active retirement.