Formalejo, Dustin P.

16. Use definite, specific, concrete language.

 Dustin’s wife
 The hunter’s knife
 Jesus last meal was with his apostles
 Those are my books. They are not yours.
 My phone won’t work, can I borrow yours?
17. Omit needless words.
 January, February and March are the first quarter of the year
 One, two, three and half, four and seven
 He checked the bidding documents, looked for the requirements,
asked questions and passed the bidder.
 Pepsi, Johnson and Johnson, M & M and Hershey’s are American
corporations.
 Small, medium, large and extra-large
18. Avoid a succession of loose sentences.
 The tone of her letter, however, brought tears to Cardo’s eyes.
 But, of course, the Dean was amused.
 Dalisay, in fact, was furious.
 14 July 1981
 Some foods, sugar for example, are not good for us.
19. Express coordinate ideas in similar form.
 Sunrises are beautiful, but sunsets are prettier.
 We can go to the movies, but can’t go to the party since they are at
the same time.
 Our dinner was not amazing, and we didn’t have a horrible time.
 My car broke down, so I was late for my class.
 I ordered something from Lazada, but it took three months to get
here.
20. Keep related words together.
  My kids and I went to the zoo to watch the lions harass small tigers;
my kids hate those small tigers.
 Mr. Francisco’s arts are amazing; they are very expensive.
 Mr. Francisco’s arts are amazing. They are very expensive.
 Andres Bonifacio defended the Philippines against all enemies,
foreign and domestic; he gave his life for this Country.
 The penalty for those students who joined the rally was severe;
thus, they decided to drop out of school.
21. In summaries, keep to one tense.
 I know someone who can help you with your situation, my friend
who has done the race before.
 The band was fantastic, a group of four which gets along very well.
 I was looking so hard for the opportunity, it never came.
 The doctor was trained in the US, a man which came from humble
beginning.
 Lady was shouting, no one heard her.
22. Place the emphatic words of a sentence at the end.
 There are three types of muscles in the body: cardiac, smooth, and
skeletal.
 We have to options here: stay and fight, or run like the wind.
 A dolphin is not fish: it is a warm-blooded mammal.
 The research is conclusive: climate change is a reality.
 I have several plans for my future: First, pass the bar exams.
Second, help those in need. Third, marry a beautiful woman.