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House Fang
Tymoteusz Chajdas
Writing 2
Pouring Roof
“Daddy, where are you going?” said Charlie to his father as they were sitting in front of
“Out to work, baby” Replied by Mr. Goodman, who is the captain of the 10th
Reconnaissance Troop.
“But today is rainy, dad.” said Charlie with his little polar bear toy on his hand, “
“Oh, Charlie.” Mr. Goodman replied and gently pitched Charlie’s little face, “I really
“But I have to fight with bad guys, you know it.” Mr. Goodman put his military emblem
“How about this, Charlie. We split this candy paper.” Mr. Goodman grabbed a red candy
from the entry table, andtable and peeled it. He put the candy into little Charlie’s mouth, and tore
“You and I both have half of it .Iit. I will keep it into my pocket, and you can keep it into
your piggy bank. When your piggy bank is filled, I will be back. Okay?” Mr. Goodman patted
Charlie’s head.
“But you just bought me a new piggy bank last week!” Charlie was yelling, while a
The rain was heavier and heavier, but Charlie couldn’t stop himself from crying.
Mr. Goodman took a glance at his watch, it was already 7 o’clock, he really had to go.
“Okay, how about this.” Mr.GoodmanMr. Goodman said, “When I come back, I give you
a revolver as a gift.”
“You have my word.” Mr. Goodman finally put his boots on. “Remember to protect your
“You bet!” Charlie smiled and put the candy paper into his little pocket carefully.
Mr. Goodman finally left with his big Jeep, while little Charlie climbed on the window
It had been a month since Mr. Goodman left, and Charlie sent a letter to him every week,
but he never received one from Mr. Goodman. Actually, Mr. Goodman did send one letter back
when he arrived at the combat location, but Charlie’s mom couldn't read it to little Charlie. The
content of the letter makes Mrs. Goodman terribly worried, since her husband never write a letter
I hope everything at home is going great. We are having a very hard time. The
enemy is using gas last night, half of the soldiers in the camp are dead. I was outside the
camp for checking landscapes of this island, but the other captain of us is dead. We sent
an emergency alarm to the trooptroop, but they haven’t responded to us yet. The living
conditions here are terrible, some of us get malaria. I guess the water and mosquitos here
are toxic. The moist air rotted our food and firearms, and most of the soldiers are
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homesick. One of them even suicided yesterday. People here only want to be home. I
If Charlie asks you about me, you can’t tell him anything about this letter. This
damn place is rainy all day and night, and the candy paper is wetted by the stink rains and
stuck in my pocket.
Emily, my heart, I love you and Charlie so much. If you can’t receive my letter in
a few weeks, you can assume I am dead. Please, move on with Charlie. Find a nice guy
who likes Charlie and loves you. I have to go back to my people now. God bless us.
Noah
Goodman
Charlie felt lonely everydayevery day, since mother started to work during the afternoon.
He had to eat dinner by himself sometimes. While he was alone, he always recalled the day his
dad left.
“How nice if my dad is a businessman, justbusinessman, just like David’s dad.” Charlie talked
to himself while he was eating a marinara pasta by himself. “Then he can stay at home when it is
rainy. David told me that if the weather is bad, his daddy will stay at home and play with David
all day.”
While he was thinking, Mrs. Goodman got home with wet hair.
“Mommy, why are your hairs wet? Did you take a shower outside?” said Charlie while he
“Nope, baby. It is rainy outside.” Mrs. Goodman was wiping her wet hair while speaking
“Why did dad and mom always leave me while it was raining! I hate rainy days!” Little
“Baby, people have to work no matter what weather it is, you know?”
Mrs.GoodmanMrs. Goodman took off her wet shoes and walked to her son. “Why do you think
that daddy and mommy don’t need to work when it’s rainy?” Mrs.GoodmanMrs. Goodman
“David told me that his dad won’t go to work when it is raining. Because his dad said it
“That’s because David’s dad is the manager of an amusement park. People don’t go to an
amusement park when it is raining, since most facilities are outside.” Mrs. Goodman hugged
little Charlie tightly.“Whentightly. “When your dad comes back, we will go to play carousel
together. Don’t cry, my poor baby.” Mrs. Goodman was comforting her boy, while she also
worried about whether her husband could come back to them. The rain wouldn’t stop, with the
wind yelling outside and knocking on the door. She never felt so desperate since she got the
letter. She always had the faith that her husband would finally get back to them. But at this
moment, she was so afraid that she was losing her husband.
Another month had passed, Mrs.GoodmanMrs. Goodman still had to work every
afternoon, while Charlie was staying at home. Charlie got one dollar for candy everydayevery
day, but he didn’t buy even one candy after his dad left, and he saved every penny to fill the
piggy bank. It was finally full, just as Charlie expected, but he started to feel scared about
opening it. Since a few weeks ago, his little friend David told him that his grandma dieddied, and
that death means someone will never come back to you. He also told Charlie that people in the
army died everydayevery day. Charlie didn’t know about death, but he could not imagine if his
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dad would never come back to him. SoSo, he punched David and ran away. He told himself that
David is a liar for at least a hundred times, but he was still worried.
Finally, Charlie decided to break the piggy bank with his mom, andmom and hoped that
his dad would show up at the moment that the piggy bank broke, just like Superman. While he
was thinking, he heard the door was opened, and there were sounds of footsteps of a man!
“Hi, Charlie.” A man’s voice responds to him, but it is not from his dad. Mrs. Goodman
was standing next to this man, and her eyes looked like two red peaches.
“ Who“Who are you! I want my dad! I want my dad!” Charlie brayed and pushed this tall
“Listen, Charlie. I am so sorry that you have to hear this: Your dad is the most
bravebravest man I have ever seen, and he was doing so great that he will be with god forever.”
The man was speaking in a solemn voice, just like he was at a funeral.
“No! You are lying! My dad never broke his promise!” Charlie shouted, “My dad will be
Charlie ran back to his room and smashed his piggy bank hard on the floor. It was broken
into very small pieces with a huge sound. Charlie closed his eyes, and waited for the miracle, for
his Superman, but no one showed up. The black clouds covered his house and started pouring…
After that day, little Charlie never used a piggy bank to save his money. Ten years has
passed, He gradually grew up to be a tall and strong young man and he was used to life without
his father. After he finished his college, he decided to create a company by himself which had a
special rule: people don’t need to work when it is rainy. The first year was tough, but he never
thought about giving up. One of his friends once asked him why he was so persistent about
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having his own company, and the answer was always: “I don’t want to work on rainy days!”
Charlies’ friends all thought that Charlie just wanted to be his own boss, but no one knew that
“Maybe it is not the fact that people feel sad when it comes to rainy days, just because it
reminds me the day my dad left.” Sometimes, Charlie thought about this in his mind, “I am just
trying to make people feel better during bad weather, even if it is not that necessary for them, it
Reflective essay
I always felt that the weather is related to people’s mood. As an international student, it is
pretty hard for me to come to a new foreign country and study professional topics using a non-
native language. I believe that the sunshine, beaches and the good climate in California can
release the pressure of my academic life, so I chose to attend UCSB. The article that I translated,
“Does the weather make us sad? Meteorological determinants of mood and depression in the
general population”, is a research article from the book Psychiatry Research written by Marcus
J.H.Huiber and other co-authors. This article talks about the possibility of bad weather
influencing people’s mood, especially depression, which is exactly what I am wondering about
According to the article, the researchers set up the experiment by collecting data from a
large-scale screening programmeprogrammers for a depression treatment study. The result of all
studies demonstrates that there is no direct association between bad weather and low temperature
with depressive disorder (Huibers et al., 2010, 143-146). The authors analyze the data by chi-
square tests and logistic regression analysis, so it should be a quantitative research. And during
this process, the authors construct graphs and tables to show the possible relationship between
weather and mood. They also consider the different varieties like Meteorological factors,
clarification of seasons, age, gender, education and marital status to keep authority of the study.
I translated this article into a short fiction and named it as “Pouring Roof”. The main idea
of my story is how bad weather influences a boy’s mood by connecting the death of his father
with rain, which conveys an idea that people tend to think weather is related to their mood, but
they don’t actually have direct connections. The main character of this story is a boy named
Charlie Goodman and the story is unfolded by the left of his father. In my story, Charlie’s father
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is a captain of a military troop, and he left Charlie and his mom because of the war and never
returned back. The overt plot of the story is the death of Charlie’s father and the covert plot of it
is the rain. In fact, all bad events that happened in the fiction are accompanied with a rainy day.
The purpose of this is to demonstrate why Charlie connected bad weather with terrible events,
which finally leads to a negative attitude of Charlie when it comes to rainy days.
analyzed the conventions of both genres and found that there are some major differences
between them. First of all, the structure of them differs majorly. The organization of the paper
that I translated has a typical structure of an academic article. It contains elements including
abstract, key words, introduction, method, result, discussion, and conclusion. Each piece of
writing is clearly classified to approach the goal of the sub-topic, and then all contribute to the
major argument, which is to determine whether bad weather is related to depression. On the
other hand, the organization of the short fiction that I translated into has more freedom in
organization. As long as it is appropriate to depict the plots, the background, personality and
actions of the characters, it is considered as good fiction. To change structures, I just abandoned
the whole organized paragraphs of the academic paper, extracted the main argument of it, and
created a free write describing my story that contains no regular patterns of organization.
The second difference between the original text and my translation is the choice of word,
and this part is crucial since it partially forms makes a fiction as a fiction in the translation
process. For the purpose ofIn order to translateing a formal and professional text into a casual
and enjoyable fiction, I have to delete all complicated terminologies, numbers, analysis, and
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reference. And to replace them with gripping vocabularies to delineate plots of the story. At the
start of the fiction, I used a lot of detailed dialogues to show the close relationship between
Charlie and his father. And in these dialogues, I carefully chose the word to make the expression
of a loving father and a son who has a worship of his father. For example, I used “daddy” instead
of “dad” and “baby” instead of “son”. I also add a lot of detailed actions between them, like
“gently pitched Charlie’s little face” and “ patted“patted his little head” to display the great
rapport of a father and a son, which sets the stage of Charlie’s sorrow after his father’s death.
The third difference between these two texts is the discourse communities. The academic
paper has packed information, dedicated method of experiments, precise analysis of results, and
authoritative resources. It is not easy for people who haven't accepted high school education to
read or understand it. In addition, Itsits disciplines are psychology and statistics, which means
researchers, readers, and students in these fields of study will pay more attention to this article.
Instead of having professional readers, the audience of the fiction I translated to is more
comprehensive. From people who have low to high education levels, and from people who like
fiction to bored people who randomly read stories, all of them can be my readers. With the aim
of having more readers, I used a lot of easy words, and a very apparent line of the story. The first
part of it is Charlie’s father left on a rainy day in the first part of the story. Then his father
encountered an awful war in the rain, andrain and died. The last part is about Charlie knowing
the death of his father on a rainy day and his future life after he experienced all incidents. By
setting a clear timeline, I encouraged my readers to understand my story better and made them
feel comfy when they are reading since they don’t need to think about complex concepts or
terminologies.
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draw my audience attention. Because my writing work is a short novel, it is hard for me to use
logos or ethos. Therefore, I chose pathos as my major strategy. For example, when Charlie and
his father said goodbye, his father splitted a red candy paper with Charlie and promised to return
home with it. During the war, the climate is so bad that his father’s candy paper is wet and stuck
in his pocket. On the other side, little Charlie put the paper in his piggy bank, and hoped for the
day of breaking it, which is also the day that his father would be back as he promised. All those
promises make my audience feel sorry about little Charlie and his mother. Another example is
his father’s letter from the war site. In the letter, his father wrote that “Emily, my heart, I love
you and Charlie so much. If you can’t receive my letter in a few weeks, you can assume I am
dead.” From these sentences, my readers can feel about the horror scene of the war, a man’s
homesickness, desperation and promises, which all contributed to moving them and keeping
At the end of my reflection, I want to talk about one of the concerns about my translation,
which is the length of it. I want to keep the personalities of my characters intact and rich, so I add
a transitional part between the leave and the death of his father. However, the part between them
looks a little bit longer than what I am looking for, but if I make it shorter, it may make my story
line rushed. After carefully reading through my story, I finally revised some sentences of the
Bibliography
Huibers, M., De Graaf, L., Peeters, F., & Arntz, A. (2010). Does the weather make us sad?