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HSNS370- Submission to the

Royal Commission.docx
by Suhanya Sundaran

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good demonstration of researching
about a submission!
is this where you transition to making
recommendations? you should make this
clearer

your
recommendations
are a little under
developed - there is
nothing proposed
that is related to the
issue itself
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

26
Instructor

hi Suhanya,

/30 Overall very strong submission - however your

recommendations needed some work as these were a
little general and did not seem to be connected to the
other ideas presented within the case. See intext
comments and marking criteria.

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Text Comment. good demonstration of researching about a submission!

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Comment 1
focus on one issue - you will spread your attention to much trying to cover multiple issues

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Strikethrough.

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Text Comment. is this where you transition to making recommendations? you should make this
clearer

Text Comment. your recommendations are a little under developed - there is nothing proposed
that is related to the issue itself

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CRITERION 1 8/8
Frame your argument within a rights- based approach to aged care

ABOVE STANDARD Analyses the rights based approach to aged care and creates an argument based on
(8) these rights. Thoroughly explains importance of each right as part of Nursing Care.

ABOVE STANDARD Analyses the rights based approach to aged care and creates an argument based on
(6) these rights. Thoroughly explains importance of each right as part of Nursing Care.

AT STANDARD Identifies the rights based approach to aged care and creates an argument based on
(5) these rights. Provides explanation of importance of each right as part of Nursing Care.

AT STANDARD Identifies the rights based approach to aged care and creates an argument based on
(4) these rights. Provides explanation of importance of each right as part of Nursing Care.

BELOW STANDARD Identifies the rights based approach to aged care and with limited argument based on
(2) these rights. Minimal explanation of importance of each right as part of Nursing Care.

CRITERION 2 8/8
Describe the issue and explain why it needs to be addressed

ABOVE STANDARD Analyses nominated issue. Provides thorough argument of importance of addressing
(8) issue.

ABOVE STANDARD Analyses nominated issue. Provides thorough argument of importance of addressing
(6) issue.

AT STANDARD Provides a detailed description of the issue. Justifies importance of issue and provides
(5) rationale signifying importance of why issues should be addressed.

AT STANDARD Provides a detailed description of the issue. Justifies importance of issue and provides
(4) rationale signifying importance of why issues should be addressed.

BELOW STANDARD Is able to identify issue without providing sufficient description of the issue. Lacks
(2) justification of importance of issue and unable to signify importance of why issues should
be addressed.

CRITERION 3 5/8
Propose a clear, relevant and achievable solution to address the issue

ABOVE STANDARD Identifies and provides an in-depth explanation of appropriate and relevant resolutions to
(8) address nominated issue. Demonstrates evidence of achievability of solution with
supporting literature.

ABOVE STANDARD Identifies and provides an in-depth explanation of appropriate and relevant resolutions to
(6) address nominated issue. Demonstrates evidence of achievability of solution with
supporting literature.
AT STANDARD Identifies and clearly proposes appropriate and relevant resolutions of nominated issue.
(5) Supports achievability of solution with supporting evidence.

AT STANDARD Identifies and clearly proposes appropriate and relevant resolutions of nominated issue.
(4) Supports achievability of solution with supporting evidence.

BELOW STANDARD Identifies possible solution. Limited explanation, of effectiveness of solution. Argument
(2) lacks clarity and no relevant information of achievability of issue.

CRITERION 4 5/6
Use of literature

ABOVE STANDARD A sufficient number of references to the readings and other literature so as to
(6) demonstrate a scholarly understanding of the evidence and its relevance to the issue.

ABOVE STANDARD A sufficient number of references to the readings and other literature so as to
(5) demonstrate a scholarly understanding of the evidence and its relevance to the issue.

AT STANDARD A sufficient number of references to the readings used to demonstrate understanding of

(4) the readings and their relevance to the issues.

AT STANDARD A sufficient number of references to the readings used to demonstrate understanding of

(3) the readings and their relevance to the issues.

BELOW STANDARD Insufficient reference to the readings

(1)