Question 2

The world today is turning more to electronic communications such as e-mail, Facebook and messaging apps. What is your opinion of this growing trend?
Discuss. You should write at least 350 words. [60 marks]

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As time goes by, the world is changing rapidly; so are its people and the technology itself. The student introduces technology as a whole,
Technology brings about a lot of changes to people’s lives. It is getting more advanced from day to looking at its history, from how it has grown from
day especially when it comes to information technology or in this case; electronic communication. a simple form of communication through letters to
Previously, mail was seemingly one of the most vital ways of communicating especially over long today’s extensive choice of communication
distances. In contrast, nowadays people are more able to communicate in easier ways; by using through electronic gadgets. This is a great way to
their electronic accounts on their computers or through their iPads and sending short messages from start your introduction. Based on the question,
their iPhones or Huaweis. Why is it so? In my opinion, this growing trend is very dominant in explain what the issue is and give a brief
today’s life, which is helping people to save their time and money, create borderless communication background of its past and present. State your
and make it easy for people to gain prominent information. opinion as to why such situation arises.

First and foremost, the world today is turning more to electronic communications like e-mail, State, Explain and then Illustrate. First, state the
Facebook and instant messaging, and other electronic communications because they will prevent topic that’s been mentioned. In this case, it’s the
people from wasting their time and money. How do these work? As we all know, sending a letter to rise of electronic communications. Then explain.
someone will involve a lot of processes and will eventually take a long time and waste a lot of Explain what electronic communications entail.
money. On the contrary, electronic communications entail only the tip of our fingers and an Next, illustrate. This means give examples based
electronic device to work with. Then, what is left for us to do is just, typing. Has that not taken a on your explanation. The student illustrates by
much less time and money? For instance, an e-mail only requires us to turn on our laptops, open giving a scenario of the use of emails.
our accounts on the website and then, you can start writing your letter and sending them through e-
mail. In short, with the very unstable economy nowadays, having these kinds of communications will
ease everyone’s burden especially with their daily expenses and also their valuable time will not be
wasted.
 Secondly, the growing trend of electronic communication is making it possible for borderless Structure your subsequent paragraphs like the
communication which is vital these days. Why is it vital? A lot of things require borderless first one. Add a new point in the second
communication; in the education field, businesse and even daily activities, especially when border paragraph and repeat the State-Explain-Illustrate
are involved. For example, when trading with people from different countries, in order to format. It’s important to have a mind map of your
communicate with each other, they need Skype as a medium to interact and be able to trade at a points before you start writing.
faster rate as compared to using ‘snail mail’ with regular letters. Skype is the perfect example of
electronic communication which will cut the boundary that has separated each country and make
communication between two different countries from around the world possible. In brief, it is crucial
to have these electronic communications in today’s age of globalisation as they make it easier for
people around the world to connect with each other.

Last but not least, the dominance of these electronic communications is that people could Structure your subsequent paragraphs like the
gain prominent information more efficiently than before. As there are fewer borders between first and second ones. Discuss a new point in the
countries, the efficiency of getting much more relevant and prominent information is higher. People third paragraph and repeat the State-Explain-
will have the ability to provide and gain information effectively through Facebook or Twitter. For Illustrate format. It’s important to have a mind
example, international artists who have planned to do a world concert can inform their fans about it map of your points before you start writing.
through their Facebook account. Likewise, the fans also can ask just about anything to their
favourite artists regarding the concert. Hence, this explains why people make these electronic
communications a huge trend these days and in order to keep the trend going, each person has the
responsibility to adapt with the technology itself.

In a nutshell, the growing trend of using electronic communications is inevitably vital in people’s To indicate that your essay is coming to an end,
lives as it gives out a lot of benefits as stated in above paragraphs. Thus, to avoid ourselves from not use a concluding word like ‘in a nutshell’ to wrap
getting the chance of keeping up with the changing trends, we have to try our best to adapt ourselves up. Summarise your opinion based on all your
with the rapid changes. From my point of view, I believe that the electronic communication trend is a previous paragraphs and emphasise your point
trend which is very important to be followed as the world is getting more advanced day by day. through words like ‘I believe that’.