Teacher Recruitment Writing Assessment

Below is a short passage written by a Grade 2 student named Agus. He

wrote about his recent trip to the zoo with his parents.

Read it very carefully, paying attention to the grammar errors - especially

tenses and punctuation, as well as spelling and sentence structure! Then
re-write the passage correctly in the space provided.

On the following page please give written feedback about the strengths
and weaknesses of his writing.

*Please take care with this assessment as we will be using it to measure

both your written English skill level and also your ability to correct
students’ work and give relevant feedback.

last week I and my parents go to the zoo to saw some animals. the first

we visit are the lions and tigres they look like cats but only scaryier i

almost faint when one of they come near me with only a fense beetwen

us

the next animal we visit are the birds they look so beuatiful and colourful

my mother tell me that their are some birds witch cant fly but for me it

don’t matter they all look amazing with theyre attractive wings and

fethers.

Weve seen other animals such as girraffes hippos monkeys and even

crocodiles but my most favorite is the elephants they are huge but very

gentle they can dance and play with a balls one of they even toossed a

ball to me
it is one of the most unforgetable experience I ever have

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Writing Feedback

Student’s Name: Agus

Content and Development (Are the ideas and supporting details well written?)

Organization (Does it have a clear beginning, middle and end? Does it flow well?)

Sentence Structure (Does it make sense? Is it complete?)

Style and Mechanics (Vocabulary, Grammar and Punctuation)