Peer Review for First Draft of Problem Solution Essay

Eng 5—Professor Monterrey

Author: Wendy Ramirez Title: Free Healthcare for All

Reviewer: Montserrat Pintor

Read your peer’s paper once in its entirety. Read the paper again and answer the
following questions:

1. Read the essay once through without marking the paper. You can briefly skim this, looking
for main ideas.

2. What is your overall impression of the essay?

I think Wendy did a good job on her essay. I really like how she formatted her paper by stating a
problem, the solution to that problem, stating another problem, and the solution to that problem.
That format made it easy to read all the way through.

3. Read the essay again and annotate each paragraph, looking for the main idea.

I added text boxes with the main ideas at the end of each paragraph.

4. What is the major problem or issue the writer addressed? State this problem in your own
words.

The lack of free health care in the US is unfortunately leading to deaths and untreatable illnesses,
which could all be prevented if only people felt comfortable with attending the doctors and didn't
have to worry about being able to afford it or not.

5. Analyze each of the proposed solutions. What does each solution promise? What are some
limitations of each solution? If the author does not mention a possible limitation, suggest one.

Wendy provides three main solutions for her issue. The first solution is virtual healthcare which
will allow low income residents to still visit their doctor, at the fraction of the price. The biggest
issue I see with this solution is that maybe low income residents can’t afford an electronic device
either. That would not be beneficial to them. The second solution is free healthcare for all
workers, provided by the company. If workers get free healthcare from their job, it will convince
them to stay committed and not become unemployed. The last solution Wendy provided was
having free healthcare because it’s a basic human right. The government shouldn’t even be
allowed to take that away from you as a human being.
6. Highlight all quotes in yellow. Do the quotes support the author’s message? If they do not
support the content of the essay, why? Lastly, does the author comment on the quote, or does the
author simply state the quote without any further commentary?

The first quote does support the content of the essay. It talks about the number of people who die
because of untreatable illnesses. Wendy does a good job of commenting on the quote
afterwards. She mentioned that lives could be saved if healthcare were free. The second quote
also supports the content of the essay. It gives a direct meaning. She correctly gives added
commentary after the quote is used.

7. What questions arise about the piece (questions that you had as you read and areas that you
felt needed elaboration, etc.)?

I didn’t find myself having questions as I read. She overall did a good job on carrying the essay
all the way through.

8. How does the essay prompt you to think differently?

I never thought about the idea of having virtual checkups. When she mentioned it in her essay, I
was delighted by her thinking.

9. Highlight in green any details that seem unrelated.

There were none.

10. Are the paragraphs coherent? Does the essay seem organized in a specific order? If not, what
do you recommend?

Yes, the essay is coherent. Like I mentioned prior, her organization is on point. I really like how
she mentions a problem and the solution back to back.

11. Does the writer use transitions? Mark any places where transitions are needed.

She does use transitions.

12. Mark any spelling, punctuation, or grammar areas that you believe should be revised before
submitting the document. You don’t need to make corrections—just highlight in blue.

Not too many.