Nice job!

It was shorter than the usual work and it needed some rephrasing
in order to have more complex words and phrases. When you use “so”, you
cannot use “therefore” because they have the same meaning.
Here are some more ideas you can also use should you have to answer this question
in an exam situation:
Would you want to be a businessman or an employee? Why?

I’m the person who likes to take risk and I can
make clear decisions even when I’m under
pressure. So therefore I consider that the
position of a leader characterizes me and in order
to achieve something great I need to get out of
my comfort zone and I enjoy challenging things
and I like to do new things and I love to work
actually alone with my ideas and plans. I like to
know that no one can sale my ideas to a boss or
something like so I think that as for me I want to
own a business, not to be an employee.
I am a person who likes to take risks and I can
make clear decisions even when I’m under
pressure. Therefore, I believe that being a leader
suits my personality best. Moreover, am well
aware of the fact that getting out of one’s
comfort zone is absolutely necessary to achieve
something of value. What’s more, I seem to enjoy
challenges and try new things whenever I have
the chance. As for teamwork, I can say I have
mixed feelings… Actually, I prefer working alone,
developing my ideas and plans without feeling
the need to consult others or ask for help. All in
all, I guess I am made to be a leader and plan to
have my own business instead of being an
employee.