RECITATION:

Make the text as clear and concise as possible without altering the meaning of the original.
OR Circle the unnecessary words in the following sentences.

1. The creditor must first establish that the debtor is undoubtedly bankrupt.
2. Our main role is to raise money by way of donations in order to fund the works of these
charities.
3. Professor Smith was picked by each and every person on the committee.
4. As a matter of fact, Pleasantville has a strong position in the forestry industry.
5. The student needs to obtain high marks in science in order to study medicine.
6. The manager will, insofar as is possible, make sure that the information is exact and
accurate.
7. We will send out brochures to the general public.
8. Students should make contact with us for help with their future plans prior to the start of
semester.
9. The total population of the island is 12,046 with the future possibility of 5% growth by
2021.
10. We would like to call your attention in your office to the fact that your report is overdue
because the deadline has passed.
11. Please change the information on your employee profile to include the most recent
information.
12. We would like to offer congratulations to all the people who participated in and
completed the training program.
13. The problem was addressed at our meeting that we have every week.
14. World peace is the cause to which the president is devoting his office.
15. Because a great many of the words in this sentence are basically unnecessary, it would
really be a very good idea to edit somewhat for conciseness.
16.  In this day and age, people are under the impression that it is important to express ideas
in a concise manner.
17. The best teachers help each student become a better student both academically and
emotionally.
18. It is imperative that all night managers follow strict procedures when locking the safe.
19. Many uneducated citizens who have never attended school continue to vote for better
schools.
20. He found his neighbor who lived next door to be attractive in appearance.
21. If you go to the store, you will see that the store is closed on Sundays because the
storeowner likes to go to church.
22. We couldn’t decide if we should go skiing in our nearby park or drive to the ski resort in
Wisconsin and ski.
23. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been established for the safety of
all.
24. With his hamstring injury, Bob will not have the ability to move his leg for a week.
25. The tobacco industry is profitable, but it has rendered many individuals chemically
dependent on nicotine.
26. It is pretty important in being a fireman that one possesses the physicality as well as the
necessary technical knowledge.
27. He was really late to his English class due to the fact that he had to finish his math test.
28. It is never advisable to attempt to utilize a nail upon which there is any indication of the
presence of rust.
The rewritten sentences would be:

1. The creditor must show that the debtor is bankrupt.

2. Our main role is to raise money to fund these charities.
3. Professor Smith was chosen by each person on the committee.
4. Pleasantville has a strong position in the forestry industry.
5. The student needs high marks in science to study medicine.
6. The manager will make sure the information is accurate.
7. We will send brochures to the public.
8. Before semester starts, students should contact us for help with their plans.
9. The population of the island is 12,046 with the possibility of 5% growth by 2012.
10. We remind you that your report is overdue.
11. Please update your employee profile.
12. Congratulations to everyone who completed the training program.
13. We addressed the problem at our weekly meeting.
14. The president devotes his office for world peace.
15. Because many of the words in this sentence are unnecessary, we should edit it.
16. Today, people think it is important to express ideas concisely.
17. The best teachers help each student grow both academically and emotionally.
18. All night managers must follow strict procedures when locking the safe.
19. Many uneducated citizens continue to vote for better schools.
20. He found his neighbor attractive.
21. If you go to the store, you will see that the store is closed on Sundays because the
storeowner likes to go to church.
22. We couldn’t decide if we should go skiing in our nearby park or in Wisconsin.
23. Disobeying safety regulations causes trouble.
24. With his hamstring injury, Bob cannot move his leg for a week.
25. The tobacco industry is profitable, but it has left many individuals addicted to nicotine.
26. A fireman must possess the proper physicality as well as the necessary technical
knowledge.
27. He was late to his English class because he had to finish his math test.
28. It is not advisable to reuse a rusty nail.

INSTRUCTIONS: Follow the instructions for each section below.

USING SIMPLE WORDS

Substitute simpler and more common words for each of these words.

accelerate    deceased
endeavor minimize
ultimate lacerations
depart currently
imbibe locate
reside inquire
massive feasible
utilize stated
incarcerate obtain

AVOIDING REDUNDANT PHRASES

Do not rewrite the following phrases; simply cross off the unnecessary words.

absolutely complete honest truth

flatly rejected future plans
qualified expert awkward predicament
costs the sum of fully engulfed
small in size dead body
armed gunman calm down
brilliant genius free of charge
totally destroyed filled to capacity
blame it on crisis situation
postponed until later my personal opinion

AVOIDING WORDY PHRASES

Use a single word to replace each of these phrases.

a great deal of gave their approval of

due to the fact that arrived at a decision
in the vicinity of made a motion
is hopeful that stated the point that
take into
at this point in time
consideration
united together in holy
was in possession of
matrimony
at which time caused injuries to
proceeded to leave be acquainted with
consensus of
draw to a close
opinion
despite the fact that in the event that