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literary Translation as
Exemplified by Translations of
the Old and the Sea
(First Extract)
Hassane Darir
• This paper addresses the degrees of freedom or liberties a translator
can safely have with a text. In order to answer the question “What are
the degrees of freedom or liberties a translator can safely have with a
text”, Extracts from the novel ‘The old man and the sea’ are used in
this paper as a research sample to address the issue of fidelity and
assess the choices made by different translators to make it accessible
for a potential Arab readership.
What are the degrees of freedom or liberties a translator can have
with a text?
• The freedom of the translator can be evident in:
• a. The selection of the text to be translated. This however has nothing
to do with the translation task or translation practice itself.
• b. The specific strategies adopted in the translation of a text that is
particularly creative in its use of metaphors, idioms, word choice and
phraseology. For instance, the ST could offer different possibilities for
interpretation, which results in different translation strategies and
stylistic choices in translation. This could affect diction, attitude,
word order, and syntactical constructions.
• c. The adaptation of the text to the reader, which includes two aspects:
• (1) Linguistic adaptation which usually affects the syntactic and rhetorical
level, such as transforming a structure from the passive to the active or
vice versa; creative use of metaphors and idioms; more specificity given to
more general or abstract concepts or vice versa; more or less recourse to
artistic elaboration through the use of figures of speech; the introduction
of direct speech or dialogue in place of indirect speech or vice versa, etc.
The fact that no two translators can come up with the same translated text
proves that translation is not an automatic art and that there is a certain
degree of freedom and creativity in translation.
• (2) Cultural adaptation, which is most clear in the case of idioms but is also
evident in proverbs and metaphors. For instance, someone is said to be
green in English (i.e. young and lacking experience), but they are said to be
blue in Moroccan Arabic.
• This freedom (or creativity), under its different facets, is exercised all
the more in the translation of poetical texts, in particular, and
literature, in general, which is an issue that has been discussed at
length by many translation theorists and professionals (Bassnett-
McGuire 1980, Newmark 1988, Basil Hatim and Ian Mason 1990,
Mona Baker ed. 2001, among others). It can be stated that the more
the ST text is creative in its style, rich in figures of speech and
rhetorical devices, the more freedom the translator will be allowed
in translation and the more challenges he will face. Sometimes, this
results in TTs that could be called adaptations, but are not real
translations.
• Some translation theorists focus more on instances where translators
significantly differ in translating the same ST or on instances where a
translator is said to have mistranslated a particular text or section of a
text. Some of them jump to the conclusion that translation is
impossible or that all translations are treacherous in one way or
another. While problematic instances of translation are by no means
rare in literature, the latter is just one type of the many existing types
of texts that are translated on a regular basis. Furthermore, not all
literary translations are bad translations.
• In fact, many of the surviving classic texts of translation have only
survived in /or thanks to their translated versions. The Bible and Kalila
wa Dimna are good examples in this respect. These texts and the like
are not generally considered as distortions of the original work. In
fact, they have deservedly acquired the status of original works
because the translators were particularly meticulous in their work as
translators and not as artistic or literary creators; which must have
surely added to the difficulty and complexity of the task.
(Kalila wa Dimna is known to the West as The Fables of Bidpai or
Panchatantra.)
• Dualities in translation or towards a scale of evaluation
• Theoretically at least, choices and decisions in translation
have been presented as dichotomies or dualities.
• Such dichotomies include faithful translation vs. beautiful
translation, SL-oriented translation vs. TL / T Reader-
oriented translation, literal translation vs. free translation,
etc.
• Now, here is a new dichotomy that is suggested by the
theme of this paper: freedom of the translator vs.
enslavement to the original writer, or literalness and
faithfulness vs. freedoms and liberties in translation.
• At the basis of these dualities is a dilemma, which can be expressed
as follows: translating closely to the meanings and structures of the
ST is one thing, delivering a good translation is another. Dualities are
useful for teaching purposes but they do not help much in evaluating
particular translations, even less in producing correct translations.
Evidently, the picture of the translation process is much more
complex than any dichotomy of translation studies can account for.
• In the following section, we will introduce a five scale chart along
which specific translation works can be situated.
• For practical purposes, the translation product is
measured along a continuum according to the degree
of freedom the translator has taken with their text
and the faithfulness or bias to either SL or TL. It goes
without saying that many of the terms used in the
literature of translation are employed in the chart but
not necessarily in their strict usual meaning.
Type of translation
Interlinear Faithful Free translation
Literal translation Balanced Idiomizing Adaptation
EXTREME SL BIAS
EXTREME TL BIAS
(Beautiful)
(Communicative)
Process involved
Exoticism Compromise Equivalent effect Cultural
Cultural borrowing transplantation
Calques
Characteristics
word-for-word -preserves SL meanings, -does not -adapts idioms and -only the global
translation that -respects TL grammar, sound like a metaphors, meanings are
is usually -may sound awkward, as a translated text -sounds natural to preserved.
unacceptable ‘translated text’ native speakers, (or even only the
for translation -very often involves -is easy going TT spirit of the text)
purposes grammatical transposition reading,
-but meanings may be
lost in back-translation
• At the extreme of SL bias, i.e. lack of freedom, there is interlinear or word
for word translation, where the translator closely follows the grammatical
units of the ST and respects them scrupulously as in translating Great
Britain as عظٌم برٌطانٌا.
• Interlinear translation is normally only used for linguistic comparative
purposes or in language teaching and is an extreme form of the much more
commonly practiced literal translation, where, while grammar is respected,
the literal (or denotative, cognitive) meaning of words is taken as if straight
from a dictionary regardless of any connotations or nuances the word may
have in a particular context.
• At the opposite extreme, i.e. TL bias, there is free translation or even
adaptation, if adaptation is considered a type of translation. In the latter
case, which exemplifies the highest degree of freedom a translator can take
with their text, only global meanings are preserved. There may be various
intervening stages in between, three of which can be safely recognized,
namely literal, balanced and idiomizing translations.
• The continuum with its points can serve as a scale to measure the
degree of licenses a translator has taken with a text much like the
Richter scale, which is used for measuring how severe an earthquake
is and is named after Charles Richter (1900-1985). It is to be noted
that Dickins et al. (2006: 17, 1992, 2002: 16) in the successful series
Thinking Translation also suggested a five point scale from: literal,
faithful, balanced, idiomizing, to free (with no further details).
However, their scale, which follows Newmark (1981 : 39), ignores
both interlinear translation and adaptation and uses the term
faithful translation, which is a difficult term to define in the sense
that most -if not all- translations claim to be faithful.
• It is equally to be noted that the term ‘idiomizing translation’ is
borrowed from the same series Thinking Translation as defined, for
instance in Thinking Arabic Translation: "By an idiomizing translation,
we mean one that respects the ST message content, but prioritizes TL
'naturalness’ over faithfulness to T details; it will typically use idioms
or familiar phonic and rhythmic patterns to give an easy read, even if
this means sacrificing nuances of message or tone” (Dickins et al.
2002: 18).
Language dependent vs. Language independent
liberties
• Interestingly, some of the so-called translation liberties are dictated
by the nature of the languages involved in translation. For instance,
Arabic is primarily a VSO language; therefore the transition from VSO
to SVO while translating into English, for example, is language
dependent and the translator has no real choice about this. Many of
the so called techniques of translation as postulated by Jean-Paul
Vinay and Jean Darbelnet (1958, 1966: 46-55) in their Stylistique
comparée de l’anglais et du français (translated as Comparative
Stylistics of French and English: a Methodology for Translation) such
as literal translation, transposition, or modulation fall within this
category. For a translator to take liberties with a text is not the same
as adhering to morphological, syntactic and semantic shifts/
adjustments which are necessitated by the TL.
• Even in the case of communicative translation when, in a particular
context, a SL feature (idiom or proverb) has to be translated by a
functionally corresponding idiom or proverb) rather than by a literal
or semantic translation this cannot be considered as free translation
in the real sense since the translator has no real freedom of choice in
that context where only one equivalent is correct. On the other hand,
successful cases of compensation -when necessary- can be
considered as cases of good exercise of freedom under responsibility.
The reader will find examples in the comparative study of the six
translations below.
• Methodology
• Since the major objective of this research study is to explore and assess the
degree of freedom that a translator may take in the translation of a literary
text, the theoretical part of the article has discussed and assessed the
degree of freedom a translator is allowed in the process of producing a
particular translation of a literary text or, in other words, the liberties a
translator can safely take with the ST.
• The practical part of the research study includes a comparative study of six
Arabic translations of Heminway's novella The Old Man and the Sea
(namely Munir Baalbaki's 1961, Ziad Zakaria's 1986, Gabriel Wahba's
1994, Samir Izzat Nassar's 2002, Abdelhamid Zahid's 2007 and Ali Al-
Kasimi's 2008 translations).
• Assessment and analysis of the translations of three extracts is conducted
to evaluate first which translations faithfully reflect the spirit and essential
features of the original work and second suggest ways of overcoming the
possible translation challenges
• Appropriate qualitative content analysis of the six different
translations of the three extracts is used. The main reason for
conducting content analysis is to be able to investigate and establish,
if possible, links between the freedom degree of translation and
translation quality. When translators engage in the process of
translating a literary text, they make different decisions based on
their reading and interpretation of the ST. The usual outcome is
different translations for the same literary text.
• For a better articulation and organization of the research study, the
two following questions are used:
• Q1: What are the degrees of freedom or liberties a translator can
have with a literary text?
• Q2: To what extent can a translator be faithful to the ST?
• Presentation and discussion of results
• As stated before, in order to add a practical dimension to this paper,
six Arabic translations of three extracts from Hemingway’s The Old
Man and the Sea are used as research samples for analysis and
assessment. Analysis will focus on the instances where a translator
takes liberties with the ST, the motivations for this, and the
consequences for the issue of fidelity.
• ST: Heminway's The Old Man and the Sea
• The importance of The Old Man and the Sea, which forms the case
study, is attributable, on the one hand, to its unforgettable portrait of
the old fisherman, Santiago, and its vivid presentation of the novella's
other principal ‘characters’, namely the sea and fish and, on the other
hand, to its important themes, one of which is summarized in the
book's best-known line: "A man can be destroyed but not defeated".
The 'real' story behind the novella is a tale of an old Cuban fisherman
and a marlin (1935). Suffice it to say that the novella first appeared in
Life Magazine - New York (1952) and it was a complete success from
the morning it hit the newsstands. The plot of the novella could be
summarized as follows (Tibbetts and Welshs, 2005: 327).
• “Santiago [is] an aging Cuban fisherman who has not caught a fish in
84 days. His only friend, a young boy, continues to have faith in the
old man who taught him how to fish. The old man sets out to sea, and
after a life-threatening struggle with a huge fish, succeeds in landing
the fish, but only after the fish has dragged him far out to sea.
Santiago lashes the fish to his boat and struggles to return to shore as
sharks devour his prize fish, leaving him nothing more than a skeleton
at the end of this grueling ordeal.”
• Arabic translations of the Old Man and the Sea
• Given its importance, there are at least a dozen translations of this
novella into Arabic, some of which are listed in Ali Ben Salman As-
Suwina' (2008: 156-157), namely Salih Jawdat's, Munir Baalbaki's,
Lina Abu Salih's, Yahya Abdi Rabbuh's, Gabriel Wahba's, Adnan
Maluhi's, Ziad Zakaria's, and Fadil Habib Muhsin's translation. Other
translations are not listed in the aforementioned reference, such as:
Ali Al Kasimi's, Samir Izzat Nassar's, Abdelhamid Zahid's, and Illi
Mahna's translation. The translations that will be considered in this
article are the following: Munir Baalbaki's 1961, Ziad Zakaria's 1986,
Gabriel Wahba's 1994, Samir Izzat Nassar's 2002, Abdelhamid
Zahid's 2007and Ali Al Kasimi's 2008. Interesting in this regard is the
fact that Ali Al Kasimi's, one of the translators of the novella, attaches
to his translation a study that is devoted to the issue of retranslating
texts (pp. 111-156).
• Extracts and analysis
• The extracts that I have selected for analysis are as follows. Extract 1
is from the first opening paragraphs of the novella. They introduce
the main or, in fact, the one character in the story and set the scene.
The second extract is one of the memorable wise sayings in the
novella. The third illustrates the use of the few dialogues in the
novella.
• Extract One: opening page of the novella
• He was an old man who fished alone in a skiff in the Gulf Stream and he had gone
eighty-four days now without taking a fish. In the first forty days a boy had been
with him. But after forty days without a fish the boy's parents had told him that
the old man was now definitely and finally salao, which is the worst form of
‘unlucky’, and the boy had gone at their orders in another boat which caught
three good fish the first week. It made the boy sad to see the old man come in
each day with his skiff empty and he always went down to help him carry either
the coiled lines or the gaff and harpoon and the sail that was furled around the
mast. The sail was patched with flour sacks and, furled; it looked like the flag of
permanent defeat.
• The old man was thin and gaunt with deep wrinkles in the back of his neck. The
brown blotches of the benevolent skin cancer the sun brings from its reflection
on the tropic sea were on his cheeks. The blotches ran well down the sides of his
face and his hands had the deep-creased scars from handling heavy fish on the
cords. But none of these scars were fresh. They were as old as erosions in a
fishless desert.
• Everything about him was old except his eyes and they were the same colour as
the sea and were cheerful and undefeated. (249 words)
Version One: Munir Baalbaki 1961
1961
Version One: Munir Baalbaki 1961
• كان رجال عجوزا ٌصٌد السمن وحده فً لارب عرٌض المعر فً "تٌار الخلٌج" ،وكان لد سلخ
أربعة وثمانٌن ٌوما من غٌر أن ٌفوز بسمكة واحدة .وفً األربعٌن ٌوما األولى كان ٌصحبه غالم
صغٌر .حتى إذا لضى أربعٌن ٌوما من غٌر أن ٌوفك إلى صٌد ما ،لال أبوا الغالم البنهما أن
الشٌخ منحوس نحسا ال رٌب فٌه وال برء منه ،وسؤاله أن ٌعمل فً لارب آخر ما لبث أن فاز
بثالث سمكات رائعات فً األسبوع األول .ولمد أحزن الغالم أن ٌرى الشٌخ ٌرجع كل ٌوم خالً
المارب ،فكان ما ٌفتؤ ٌمضً للمائه وٌساعده فً حمل صنانٌره الملتفة أو محجنه وحربونه والشراع
المطوي حول السارٌة .وكان الشراع مرلعا بؤكٌاس دلٌك عتٌمة ،فهو ٌبدو ولد طوي على هذه
الشاكلة أشبه ما ٌكون براٌة الهزٌمة السرمدٌة.
• وكان الشٌخ معرولا شاحبا انتشرت فً مإخر عنمه تجاعٌد عمٌمة ،وعلت خدٌه المروح السمراء
الناشئة عن سرطان الجلد غٌر المإدي الذي هو ثمرة انعكاس الشمس على صفحة المٌاه فً
المناطك االستوائٌة .وكانت تلن المروح تغطً جانبً وجهه ،على حٌن كانت فً ٌدٌه ندوب عمٌمة
الغور خلفتها الحبال التً علمت فً أطرافها ضروب من األسمان الثمٌلة .ولكن أٌا من هذه الندوب
لم ٌكن غضا .كانت لدٌمة لدم التؤكل فً صحراء خلو من السمن.
• كان كل شًء فٌه عجوزا خال عٌنٌه ،وكان لونهما مثل لون البحر .وكانتا مبتهجتٌن باسلتٌن.
• 209 words
Commentary
• Baalbaki achieves a successful literary translation, successful not in the
sense of taking liberties with the ST, but in the sense of coming with simple
and refined style, just as the original text. In fact, Baalbaki strictly adheres
to the ST, resorting to compensation only when he thinks an element in the
ST cannot be translated or will not achieve the same effect as in translating
"the old man was now definitely and finally salao, which is the worst form
of unlucky" by الشٌخ منحوس نحسا ال رٌب فٌه وال برء منه. In terms of size, we can
say that Baalbaki's translation is slightly compacted. Apart from the use of
the term عجوزin the selected paragraphs, for which he could have used
شٌخ, which has none of he negative connotations of عجوز, Baalbaki's
translation is an accurate rendition of the ST in terms of style and tone and
reflects the latter's mastery of the Arabic language's lexical and
terminological stock and stylistic choices.
Table 2: Translation version1
عٍ ٟاٌمبعّ،ٟ
اٌؾ١خ ٚاٌجحش ،اٌشثبغ:
ِٕؾٛساد اٌضِٓ2008 ،
Version Six: Ali Al Kasimi 2008
• كان شٌخا ٌصٌد السمن وحده بمركب شراعً صغٌر فً "مجرى الخلٌج" ،ولد أمضى حتى اآلن
أربعة وثمانٌن ٌوما دون الحصول على سمة واحدة .وفً األربعٌن األولى كان معه صبً .ولكن
بعد أربعٌن ٌوما بال سمكة ،لال والدا الصبً البنهما ان الشٌخ لد أصٌب بصورة أكٌدة ونهائٌة
ب"النحس" ،وهو أردأ أنواع سوء الحظ ،فانتمل الصبً بناء على أوامرهما إلى لارب آخر اصطاد
ثالث سمكات جٌدة خالل األسبوع األول .كان الصبً ٌشعر بالحزن عندما ٌرى الشٌخ ٌعود كل
ٌوم و مركبه خال ،فكان دائما ٌسرع لٌساعده فً حمل الخٌوط الملفوفة ،أو الخطاف والحربة ،أو
الشراع المطوي حول السارٌة .وكان الشراع المرلع بؤكٌاس الطحٌن والمطوي ٌبدو مثل راٌة
هزٌمة دائمة.
• كان الشٌخ نحٌفا أعجف وله تجاعٌد عمٌمة فً لفا رلبته .وعلى خدٌه بمع بنٌة هً نوع من سرطان
الجلد الذي سببته الشمس من جراء انعكاسها على البحر فً تلن المنطمة االستوائٌة ،وانتشرت تلن
البمع على جانبً وجهه .وعلى ٌدٌه آثار جروح عمٌمة خلفها جر األسمان الثمٌلة ورفعها بالحبال.
ولكن لم ٌكن أي من آثار الجروح هذه حدٌث العهد .كانت لدٌمة لدم التآكالت فً صحراء خالٌة
من األسمان.
• كل شًء فٌه كان لدٌما ،ما عدا عٌنٌه ،فمد كان لونهما لون البحر ،فرحتٌن ال أثر للهزٌمة فٌهما.
• 192 words
Commentary
• Ali Kassimi achieves a close translation that reflects the style of
Hemingway in its simplicity and expressiveness. Using the scale of the
translator’s freedom we can describe his translation as faithful and
balanced. Nevertheless, it is difficult to see why he used وحدهrather
than وحٌداsince the first is confusing in the sense that it restricts the
fish rather than the protagonist. It is also more natural to say كان شٌخا
ً وحٌدا ٌصٌد السمن فً مركب شراعrather than ًٌصٌد السمن وحده بمركب شراع
(although Al Kassimi has something to say about this in the article
attached to his novel).
Table 7: Translation version 6