Park Ridge School of Montessori Incorporated

Camias, San Miguel, Bulacan

LEARNING KIT 1
READING AND WRITING SKILLS
Grade 11 (ABM,GAS,STEM)
Lesson: USING POST WRITING STRATEGIES
Date: MARCH, 2021

Name:________________________________________ Grade Level & Section:________________

EXPECTATION

At the end of this module, you will be able to:

1 Discuss using post writing strategies
2.apply the process of revision on your own paper
3.write the process of revision on your paper

EXPLORATION

“That’s the magic of revisions every cut is necessary, and every cur hurts, but something new will always grow”
-kelly Barnhill
1.What is the quotation being implies?
2.What is the moral lesson in the quotation?

EXPLANATION

Now, you have arrived at the final stage of the writing process: post-writing. This part entails looking over your
draft critically, paying attention to content, organization, and mechanics by using techniques like revising, editing,
and proofreading. While revising, editing, and proofreading are among the last things that you do when you finish
writing a paper, they are not always the easiest. In fact, many students may take this part for granted—they think
that once they have finished researching and writing their papers, their work is complete. That is far from the truth.
In fact, post-writing is where the hard work of adding to, deleting from, rewording, and reorganizing your essays
happens. Instead of being daunted by the task, you should take this as an opportunity to improve your essay—after
all, the post-writing stage is an opportunity for you to discover new ideas and better ways of communicating those
insights. This lesson will introduce you to the techniques that you can use for effective revision.

Defining Revision and Editing

Revision is the general process of going back through your whole draft, from start to end, and improving on or
clarifying your writing subject’s meaning. This can include adding in, taking out, moving around, and polishing
certain parts of your draft to make it much more understandable and easier for reading. Revision focuses on the
bigger picture of your draft so you can resolve any significant issues on content that may have otherwise been
hidden while you were writing.

Editing, sometimes known as proofreading, is the more meticulous process of clarifying meaning by revising
each word and line of your draft. This includes you working on grammatical principles such as subject-verb
agreement, verb tense, noun and pronoun usage, prepositions, sentence transitions, and verb tense; and
typographical matters such as punctuation, spelling, and capitalization. Note that while revision focuses .on the
bigger picture of your draft, editing focuses on its finer details, making sure every word contributes precise
meaning etc., your writing subject. Furthermore, when writers proofread, they mark their drafts by using editing
symbols, which guide them in knowing what to remove, correct, or improve on.

Always remember that revision and editing are two different activities. Isolating one from the other actually makes
the rewriting process much easier. But whether you are revising or editing, it is important for you to revisit your
work with an analytical eye so you can turn in a satisfying final draft with minimal errors. Only then will your draft
be ready to face your readers.

Steps in Revising Your Draft

Revision can be simplified in two steps. The first step is to take a bird’s eye view of your draft, to reread it as a
whole. Reviewing your draft this way lets you do two things: Check if you have attained your writing purpose (to
entertain, to enlighten, to persuade, etc.) and check if you have used the language and tone that best serve your
writing purpose. Note that at this level of revision you need not zoom in on any details yet, so you can do quick re-
readings of your draft just to see whether or not it works overall.
For instance, you just finished writing a short essay about the Chocolate Hills of Bohol. Your purpose for writing it,
was to share to other young readers how physically beautiful the hills were, and to entice them to visit the hills with
their families someday. You wanted the language for your paper to be simple yet descriptive; the tone nationalistic.
In revising your

output, first, you would need to read your draft over, even just skim through it, to see if it conformed to all of the
above. Let us say the following paragraphs make up the short essay that you wrote.

How I love the chocolate hills of Bohol! They’re my favorite tourist spot here in the Philippines. I’ve only been
there once in my whole life with my family, but I will never forget that one time we went. I was utterly captivated by
the magical beauty of the hills the moment I first laid my eyes on them. I actually wonder if those hills had magical
beginnings.

I have heard at least two origin stories from my Iola about the chocolate hills. The first tells the story of two
feuding giants who hurled rocks, boulders, and sand at each other. The fighting lasted for days, and exhausted the
two giants. In their exhaustion, they forgot about their feud and became friends, but when they left they forgot to
clean up the mess they had made during their battle, hence it became the chocolate hills.

The second origin story is a more romantic legend of a giant named Arogo who was extremely powerful and
youthful. Arogo fell in love with Aloya, who was a simple mortal. Aloya’s death caused Arogo much pain and
misery, and in his sorrow he could not stop crying. When his tears dried, the chocolate hills were formed.

For me, these two origin stories just add more to the natural beauty of the hills. I wish everyone could feel what I
feel about our country’s national treasures. I encourage all high school students and their families to go visit Bohol
now! Treat yourselves to a visual feast that you will never forget!

Did this draft achieve the writing purpose you intended, which was to talk about the physical beauty of the
Chocolate Hills? Was the language simple and descriptive enough? Did the tone that you struck evoke a sense of
nationalism? Even just from one reading you should be able to answer all those questions, and know if the whole
draft needs simple changes or a complete rewrite. Here, we see that it fails to picture the Chocolate Hills at all. The
language is simple, yes, but not descriptive. And any sense of nationalism that the draft captures is weak and
ignorable.

Since the whole draft does not serve your intended purpose, going into finer details would be a complete waste of
time. It would be better for you first to write from scratch until your draft achieved the purpose, language, and tone
that you aimed for.

Already satisfied with your overall draft? You can move on now to the second step of revision, which is reviewing
your draft portion by portion and adding in, filtering, and re-organizing content according to form and flow. This
narrower view of your draft gives you a better idea of what works and what needs work, with respect to the
structure of your draft.

What you will be keeping in mind now are the relationships between sections of the draft, the connections between
your ideas from the beginning to the end. First of all, the beginning should hook in the reader, evoke his/her interest
in your writing subject. Once he/she is interested, he/she will want to read your point-by-point discussion on the
topic. Each of your points should support and lead to the next point, while moving your meaning forward. (This is
especially true if your draft introduces new ideas previously unfamiliar to your reader.) If your draft raises any
questions or issues in the reader’s mind, these should be resolved by the time he/she reaches your conclusion.
Finally, the conclusion itself should be effective, leaving a lasting impression on your reader so he/she can continue
thinking about your subject even after he/she is done reading.

Other factors in writing may also need to be considered. Writers look at the form they have used for their drafts, for
example. If your purpose for writing is to describe a person

or a place, then you should be working on a descriptive essay. If you are shedding light on a current event, then you
should be working on an expository essay. The pace of your draft is also important. It should be fast enough that it
can hold the reader’s attention all throughout, but slow enough that the reader has time.to digest all of your points.
Then there is also proportion: sections of your draft that drag on unnecessary details should be trimmed down,
while sections that fall short of detail should be expounded on.

Let us go back to your short essay on the Chocolate Hills. Say you rewrote it from scratch and ended up with the
following draft:
I have a lot to say about the chocolate hills of Bohol. Out of all of the tourist spots to see here in our country, it was
only the chocolate hills that have amazed me. Nothing else comes quite close.
Let me tell you just how remarkable they are? imagine hills and hills and hills, spread for and wide across the
land. Want to know how many there were? 1,268 all in all. (I find that number astounding; when I first visited the
hills with my family lost year, I could only count at least two hundred from where we stood.) If you added just a few
hundred more hills, they would actually be as numerous as our country’s islands!

The most striking thing about the hills, though, is their color. When you go there in sunny weather you’ll see the
hills turn brown. Think a light, nutty brown just like Chocnut. (Or Cadbury, if you prefer milk chocolate.) On the
other hand, if you went there in rainy weather you’d have seen the hills turn a luscious leaf-green. Green like the
peaceful Pampanga countryside when you pass through North Luzon Expressway. If you ask me, those are very
pleasant colors to the eyes, you could just stare at them for hours and feel relaxed.

How tall is each hill, you ask? Each one is about 30 to 50 meters (or 100 to 160 feet) in height. That’s thrice the
height of the Rizal Monument in Luneta Park. Doesn’t that just make you shrink?

I have heard at least two origin stories from my Iola about the chocolate hills. The first tells the story of two
feuding giants who hurled rocks, boulders, and sand at each other. The fighting lasted for days, and exhausted the
two giants. In their exhaustion, they forgot about their feud and became friends, but when they left they forgot to
clean up the mess they had made during their battle, hence it became the chocolate hills.

The second origin story is a more romantic legend of a giant named Arogo who was extremely powerful and
youthful. Arogo fell in love with Aloya, who was a simple mortal. Aloya’s death caused Arogo much pain and
misery, and in his sorrow he could not stop crying. When his tears dried, the chocolate hills were formed.

The innate, natural beauty of these bilk just made me proud to be a Filipino. I hope that you find your love for our
country too by traveling around to see what our own lands can offer.

Essay Revision Checklist

Still lost on how and where to start revising? Below is a handy, constructive checklist you can refer to in the
meantime. It is likely that a lot of the questions you will see below, you have already answered in the initial writing
of your draft. This checklist is just here to help you weed out any remaining problems you may have missed out on.

1.Do I have a big idea I want to express, an important message to send out? Do I have an audience who will listen
to me? 2.Who is my audience?
3.What is my purpose for writing? Have I achieved it?
4.What language and tone do I take in my writing? What point of view and voice? Are all these appropriate to my
purpose for writing, and the audience I am speaking to?
5.Do I have enough credibility to speak on my chosen subject? Can I back up all of my discussions on the subject
with confidence and sufficient knowledge?
6.Does my draft make a central point? Have I defined the limits of my draft well, so that only essential information
is included? Is the context of my draft established?
7.What form of writing does my draft take? Is it the best venue for my ideas to be expressed?
8.Does the beginning of my draft draw the reader in? Does it introduce my subject to the reader well?
9.Do my succeeding points support my beginning statements? Does each idea connect to the next one? Do all the
sections of my draft move my discussions on the subject forward, toward the conclusion?
10.Does the conclusion make the reader think? Does it answer all the reader’s questions on my subject?
11.Is the pace of my draft just right? Is it slow enough so the reader is not left behind by my discussions? Is it fast
enough so the reader’s interest still stays with me?
12.Does the draft read smoothly and coherently overall?
13.What are the strengths of my draft? How can I make these stand out more?
14.What are the weaknesses of my draft? How can I improve on these?
 EXERCISE

General Instructions :Write capital letter (X) if the statement is correct and if not write the correct statement
________________1. Revision is the general process of going back through your whole draft, from start to end, and
improving on or clarifying your writing subject’s meaning.
________________2.This can include adding in, taking out, moving around, and polishing certain parts of your
draft to make it much more understandable and easier for reading.

________________3.Revision focuses on the bigger picture of your draft so you can resolve any significant issues
on content that may have otherwise been hidden while you were writing.

________________4.Editing, sometimes known as proofreading, is the more meticulous process of clarifying

meaning by revising each word and line of your draft.

_________________5.This includes you working on grammatical principles such as subject-verb agreement, verb
tense, noun and pronoun usage, prepositions, sentence transitions, and verb tense;

ELABORATION

Finally, remember that writers usually note errors in their drafts by marking them with editing symbols. Though
these symbols need not be used in the editing process, they are very helpful because they give the writer an idea of
how the specific error should be corrected.

EVALUATION

General Instructions :Write capital letter (X) if the statement is correct and if not write the correct statement
___________________1.the second step of revision, which is reviewing your draft portion by portion and adding
in, filtering, and re-organizing content according to form and flow.

___________________2.This narrower view of your draft gives you a better idea of what works and what needs
work, with respect to the structure of your draft.

___________________3.the beginning should hook in the reader, evoke his/her interest in your writing subject.
Once he/she is interested, he/she will want to read your point-by-point discussion on the topic.

___________________4. Each of your points should support and lead to the next point, while moving your
meaning forward. (This is especially true if your draft introduces new ideas previously unfamiliar to your reader.)

___________________5.If your draft raises any questions or issues in the reader’s mind, these should be resolved
by the time he/she reaches your conclusion. Finally, the conclusion itself should be effective, leaving a lasting
impression on your reader so he/she can continue thinking about your subject even after he/she is done reading.