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WRITING LESSON 04
DISCUSSION ESSAYS – ADVANTAGES & DISADVANTAGES
TOPIC 09: EDUCATION / TRAINING
TOPIC 10: WORK / EMPLOYMENT
Writing Task 02 – In-class Topic:
In many countries, university students live at home with family while study, whereas
in other countries, students attend in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away
from home while study outweigh the disadvantages?
Ideas and vocabulary brainstorming
Key words of the question above
Benefits
+ IDEA 01: independence => learn how to live
independently => foster skills critical to independent
living [explain/example] cooking / money management
skills / solve problems => problem-solving skills => be
more resilient
+ IDEA 02: freedom to enjoy their own pursuits / able to
experience new things / explore….. => enrich life
experiences + build self-confidence + understand
personal strengths and weaknesses / identify fields of
interest => realize their potential
In some countries, prestigious universities are usually
located in major cities, compelling students to live far away
from their hometowns. Despite several difficulties facing
young college students, I believe that living away from
parents would allow them to prepare for a successful
independent adulthood.
On the other hand, I believe that the benefits are weightier
the downsides. Living away from parents would help
Disadvantages
+ IDEA 01: incur more expenses [lẽ ra ko có
if living with parents] => face financial
constraints, especially for students with a low
income => spend time doing part-time jobs
=> fail to concentrate on their study / lead to
exhaustion=fatigue
+ IDEA 02: in certain situations such as
sicknesses => MISS OUT ON family support
=> struggle
+ IDEA 03: family-oriented / be emotionally
unstable => MISS OUT ON family support /
less interaction with family members =>
depression / homesickness
On the one hand, students relocating to other
cities for college might face several difficulties.
For those who have financial constraints,
especially students with low income, additional
expenses for food and accommodation, which
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students learn how to live independently. University students could have been saved if living with parents,
could foster some skills to independent living such as might be a burden on themselves and their
cooking, money management skills or problem-solving family. They have to spend time doing part-
skills, which could help them be more resilient to deal with time jobs, which might lead to exhaustion and
life problems. Moreover, by living alone, students would fail to concentrate on study. For those who are
have more freedom to experience new things and enjoy their emotionally unstable, might struggle to
own pursuits. The positive outcomes of this overcome the loneliness and homesickness
+ Living away from parents would help students enrich which adverse affect their mental wellbeing.
their knowledge, which leads them to realize their
potential [SAI GR!!!]
ORIGINAL WRITING CORRECTED VERSION
On the other hand, living independentlyce could give university
students not only sucessfful independent adulthood
thoughoutthroughout university life but also a satisfactory life
in the future. Independent life can can allow them to effectively
foster skills critical to young studentstheir well-rounded For example, students can have chances to
development. For example: cooking, money management and exercise important skills such as cooking,
problem-solving skills which can enable them to be an resilient
person => weak TA ko rõ muốn nói gì [FRAGMENT]. problem-solving skills that they rarely have
Living away from parents gives students more freedom to enjoy chances to do under parental protection.
their own pursuits so they are able to open their eyes to the
world as well as enrich their life experiences. As a result, they
could understand their strengths and weaknesses, allowing
fields of interest to be identified and their potentials to be
realized, which helps them build self-confidence.

On the one hand, living apart from parents may lead to several
drawbacks. Firstly, university students have to incur more
expenses, which are not their responsibilities => which can
be saved if they live with their parents, as a result, some
students may face financial constraints, especially for students
with a low-income. To tackle this issue, students have to spend
time doing part-time jobs, thereby, they easily feel exhausted
and fail to concentrate on their study. Moreover, some certain
situations probably appear such as sicknesses. Not living Moreover, young people living alone might
close to their parents, they will miss out on family support. struggle in certain unexpected and difficult
Hence, these students have to struggle with the difficulties on situations, such as accidents or sicknesses,
their own. In addition, one more reason about missing out and miss out on family support. This would
on family support because they are family-oriented or seriously affect the young who are emotionally
emotionally unstable. This will cause depression, which unstable, leading

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might affect dangerously to college students.

On the another hand, living independently also takes => to a sense of depression and ….
would lead to / result in some significant drawbacks. For
students with a low income, they will face financial constraints
because of incurring more expenses on accommodation and
food. As a result of that, they need to spend time doing part-
time jobs which leads them to their failure to concentrateing
on their study. For those who are emotionally unstable or
family-oriented, they will be effortless in receiving any support
[diễn đạt], which can make them be depressiob as well as
homesickness [sai diễn đạt!] => missing out on family
support and less interaction with family members might
result in increased depression and homesickness that some
cannot overcome. Another main point in this case is that
students can be lack of [gr!] => might lack their parentals
support in certain situations such as sickness, which makes
them become dismotivated => demotivated in their study and
controlling their life.

In many countries, students tends to live away from family

when entering college. Despite possible downsides facing
young students, I believe that living away from parents would
prepare for a more successful independent adulthood.
Firstly, it fosters skills to indepentdent living such as cooking
skills, time and money management skills,... so that they will
become more resilient. Secondly, living far from home allows
students to enrich their knowledge, which enables them to
realize their potential and understand their strengths and
weaknesses. [UNDER-DEVELOPPED – IDEAS ARE NOT
FULLY SUPPORTED]

Thesis statement
1. introduction
+ INTRODUCE THE TOPIC:
+ THESIS STATEMENT: I would argue that the benefits brought to students living away from their
parents ECLIPSE / SURPASS the downsides.
+THESIS STATEMENT: Despite several difficulties facing young college students, I believe that living
away from parents would allow them to prepare for a more successful independent adulthood.

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+ CONCLUSION: In conclusion, I believe living independently can give college students more chances to
become autonomous and self-reliant individuals, which could contribute greater to their personal
development and life fulfillment and surpass the downsides.
Writing Task 02 – Homework Topic:
Unemployment is one of the most serious problems facing developed nations today.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of reducing the working week to thirty-five
hours?
Benefits Drawbacks
+ employees / workers: more free time for + companies: higher budget for staff salary + incur
family / to enjoy their own pursuits => larger social charges /company taxes => a reduction
achieve a better work-life balance / lead a in profit margins for companies => [increase the
more fulfilling life / avoid overworking / price of products => higher competition / higher
avoid stress / depression => improve their living expenses]
mental wellbeing  KHI BỊ BÍ IDEAS – dùng phản biện:
+ companies: create a better work However, such problems can be
environment => a higher employee retention solved/mitigated if companies focus on
rate maximizing employee efficiency => ensure
+ on a larger scale, increase the number of productivity without having ……
employees => reduce unemployment rate

READING MATERIAL - PROS AND CONS OF A 35-HOUR WORK

WEEK
Let's take a look at the pros and cons for both employees and employers of reducing the
standard work week to 30 hours per week.
Pros
 More work-life balance appeals to millennials.
 Parents of young children appreciate the extra family time.
 Employees are less likely to suffer burnout.
 Work schedules can be more flexible.
Cons
 Employees would be paid less.
 Employers may need to increase staff sizes.
 Full benefits for fewer hours could increase costs for employers.
 Workaholic employees may struggle to adjust.

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