To: Nancy Myers

From: Max Rozvodovskiy

Date: Jan 25, 2022
Subject: Chapter 5 – Achieving Audience Involvement-

ACHIEVING AUDIENCE INVOLVEMENT

1. Revise the following by adding pronouns and names.
a. The company will require further information before processing this request.
Larry, we will ask you to provide the new scheduling information before processing your
request.
b. The foremen met to discuss techniques for handling union grievances.
Josh has came to discuss his techniques for handling the union grievances.
c. The department supervisor wants to extend heartfelt thanks for the fine efforts expended.
Mark the department supervisor, wants to extend his heartfelt thanks for the fine efforts
everyone has expended.
d. The president of the corporation, a women, met with her sales staff.
Karen who is the president of the corporation, met with her sales staff Katrina.
e. Throughout the history of mankind, each scientist has tried to make his mark with a discovery
of significant intellectual worth.
Larry explained to the others that throughout the history of mankind, each scientist has tried to
make their mark with discovering a significant intellectual worth.

2. Revise the following using positive words and pronouns.

a. We cannot lay your cable until you sign the attached wavier
When the wavier is signed, we will lay down your cable for you.
b. John, don’t purchase the wrong program. If we continue to keep inefficient records, our
costumers will continue to complain.
John, please purchase the correct program. If we continue to keep the efficient records, our
costumers will be very happy.
c. You have not paid your bill yet. Failure to do so will result in termination of services.
We will continue to give services once the bill has been paid.
d. If you incorrectly quote and paraphrase, you will receive an F on the assignment.
The assignment will be an A because you have placed the correct quote and paraphrase.
e. Your team has lost 6 of their 12 games.
Your team has won 6 of their 12 games.