Northgate High School

Senior Project Mentor/Expert Critique

Dear Mentor/Expert,

Thank you for agreeing to critique this paper for Neil Suvarna . With this form, the student should
provide the most recent draft of his/her Senior Project paper. Please read the paper for content,
keeping in mind it will be revised. The English teacher will critique the paper for requirements,
appropriate style, and mechanics. You are to read to ensure that the facts and research are accurate
and sufficient.

Please make comments on the margins of the draft, answer the questions on this sheet, and feel free to
add any additional comments on the back. This paper is a requirement for the student’s graduation, so
your help is appreciated.

1. Is there any misinformation or has the writer made any factual errors? yes no
Comments:

2. Can you suggest sources for additional research for this topic, such as materials to read or watch
and persons to interview?

3. What information can you give to help the student improve the content of the paper (including
your own knowledge of the topic)?

Neil covers many of the ways in which we can decrease our carbon footprint. I suggested he also discuss green building
with wood since that is a way to have long-term carbon storage. In addition working at home can help decrease one's
carbon footprint, but it depends upon a number of factors.

4. I have read this paper and discussed my comments with the student. yes no

Mentor’s name and qualifications: Greg Biging, Phd. Emeritus Professor, Department of
Environmental Science, Policy & Management, UC Berkeley
Mentor’s signature:
Phone number: 510 6852830
Mentor’s Email Address: biging@berkeley.edu
Additional comments: