Part 1

Hi Alex,

It’s my pleasure to me because you are my partner to collaborate with you

(hợp tác với bạn) on the science presentation.

I take a different idea with you view on the topic of our presentation. It
seems to me that we can should talk about the thunderstorm instead of rain
forest . Not only we can make a powerpoint to talk about when it happens ,
how it dangerous it is, how it affects our life lives .. , but also it has many
pictures which (Khi dùng not only và but also thì chủ ngữ 2 vế phải tương
đồng) we can use many stunning pictures of it inon the Internet.

I’m afraid that I’m busy tomorrow because I should will take an exam.
Istead tomorrow , So I highly recommend we can( sau recommend nên +
should) should do it on Saturday. It’s suitable for our us because we don’t
have to go to school so we have free time to do homework together.

In my opinion, I think we should do our homework (trong email ngta nói là

prepare presentation chứ có phải là do homework đâu e)  prepare the
presentation in the coffee shop near our school. We can order a cup of
coffee and discuss about homework thunderstorm, which is our topic of the
presentation. The coffee shop is quiet and it has fast high-speed Internet
so it is a suitable place for studying.

I think we can send our homework (cụm từ này k hợp văn cảnh, lạc đề) 
give the presentation in the afternoon, which is a better choice, because we
can check our answer again in the morning and send present it in the
afternoon.

Can’t wait to see you ,

Huyen.
Nhận xét:

E đọc kỹ lại các lỗi sai a highlight và sửa trong bài, chú ý các lỗi sai trong cách
diễn đạt

Đoạn 3 k dùng cụm từ “do homework” vì nó k sát với đề bài.

E k cần cố gắng để sử dụng các từ khác hoàn toàn với bài viết email nếu e k
tìm được 1 từ nào đồng nghĩa với từ trong email gốc. Việc e cố gắng sử dụng
những từ mới mà k sát nghĩa với đề bài thì dễ bị lạc đề lắm.

Part2 :

It seems to me that shopping plays an important role in my life.

Shopping is an amazing activity. We can look at many things in the stores

such as clothes, books ,... Besides , it’s too easily very easy to buy some
things we need in the store . You can feel over the moon if you buy
something you want . It’s so amazing ,isn’t it ?

I like shopping because it’s a good way to realease release stress. Buying
something new , I feel relaxed and it helps lift up my mood. If you go to a
shopping mall with your friend after a hard working day,it ‘ll be so
interesting. In On the other hand , going shopping make me run out of
money and sometimes, I waste money to buy something which isn’t suitable
for me . It’s so disappointed (từ này dùng để diễn tả cảm giác của con
người)  disappointing.

The shopping centre do more and more ways to attract people . They have
big sale on special day or you can become to their VIP customer with many
benefits if you use a lot money to buy their products . In my opinion , you
should answer the question : “ Does it really important to me ? “ If the
answer is “yes” ,buy it .If not , you can save your money.

Nhận xét

Đoạn cuối e bị lạc đề. Đề bài ngta hỏi là “what could shopping centers do to
attract more people?” thì e lại viết lan man ở đâu đâu, đặc biệt là câu cuối.