3UNIT 09

Personal Care and Appearance

Task: PARAGRAPH

Imagine you open your Facebook and find this message from a friend: “Hi friend! Hope
you are ok. I’m in a dilemma and I need advice. Last week, Karl asked me to marry
him. The wedding will be in four months and it is like a dream come true for me.
However, I don’t feel confident about my appearance. First, I think I look older than I
am. My face has wrinkles and sun damage. Besides, I am overweight. Several years of
eating junk food have turn me into a very obese person. Do you think my appearance
can be improved? How? Please, give me some advice.

Linda
Reply to your friend Linda with a paragraph telling her how she can improve her
appearance. Suggest different treatments or procedures she can use to overcome her
“problems”.
Start the paragraph with “Dear Linda”

FIRST DRAFT

Student’s name: Diana Carmen Matos Novoa Date: 12-10-2020

Teacher’s name: Katherine Gurreonero

1. BRAINSTORMING

Wrinkles and sun damage

Use a special sunscreen

Chemical peel removes the skin

Face-lift a surgical procedure

Overweight

Don’t eat junk food

Drink a lot of water

Avoid sweets and chocolates

2. PLANNING.

TOPIC SENTENCE There are different solutions for problems with

wrinkles and sun damage and overweight.

What is the first problem? For wrinkles and sun damage, you can use a special
What are the possible solutions? sunscreen such as eucerin every time you go out.
SOLUTION 1
What are the possible solutions? You can also visit a dermatologist for chemical peel;
SOLUTION 2 it works by removing the top layer of your skin so
your skin will look more radiant.
What are the possible solutions? A surgical procedure recommended a facelift, but
SOLUTION 3 this is dangerous and takes time to recover.

What is the second problem? For overweight, you should drink a lot of water
What are the possible solutions? because this will balance the ph of your body.
SOLUTION 1

What are the possible solutions? You can also avoid sweets and chocolates for
SOLUTION 2 reducing the calories.
What are the possible solutions? Don’t you eat junk food in this time may you can eat
SOLUTION 3 a healthy diet.
To conclude It is no difficult to find the right solution for each
problem; it all depends of you.

Dear Linda:

There are different solutions for problems with wrinkles and sun damage and
overweight. First, for wrinkles and sun damage, you can use a special sunscreen such as
eucerin every time you go out. You can also visit a dermatologist for chemical peel; it works by
removing the top layer of your skin so your skin will look more radiant. However, a surgical
procedure recommended a facelift, but this is dangerous and takes time to recover. Next, for
overweight, you should drink a lot of water because this will balance the ph of your body. You
can also avoid sweets and chocolates for reducing the calories. Besides, don’t you eat junk
food in this time may you can eat a healthy diet. Finally, it is no difficult to find the right
solution for each problem; it all depends of you.

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Dear Linda:

There are different solutions for problems with wrinkles and sun damage and
overweight. First, for wrinkles and sun damage, you can use a special sunscreen such as
eucerin every time you go out. You can also visit a dermatologist for ^chemical peel; it works
by removing the top layer of your skin so your skin will look more radiant. However, a face-lift
is a surgical procedure recommended by a lot of surgeons but this is dangerous and takes time
to recover. Next, for overweight, you should drink a lot of water because this will balance the
ph of your body. You can also avoid sweets and chocolates for reducing the calories. Besides,
don’t you eat junk food in this time may you can eat a healthy diet. Finally, it is no difficult to
find the right solution for each problem; it all depends of you.

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Dear Linda:

There are different solutions for problems with wrinkles and sun damage and
overweight. First, for wrinkles and sun damage, you can wear a special sunscreen such as
eucerin every time you go out. You can also visit a dermatologist for a chemical peel; it works
by removing the top layer of your skin so your skin will look more radiant. However, a face-lift
is a surgical procedure recommended by a lot of surgeons but this is dangerous and takes time
to recover. Next, for overweight, you should drink a lot of water because this will balance the
ph of your body. You can also avoid sweets and chocolates to reducing the calories. Besides,
don’t you eat junk food during four months may you can eat a healthy diet. Finally, it is no
difficult to find the right solution for each problem; it all depends of you.