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直播大作文第一次课课件
直播大作文第一次课课件
题型分类、利弊分析、首尾段思路技巧、主体段扩展
老徐雅思
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议论文评分标准
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议论文的题型:
A. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.
B. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
C. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
D. What are reasons, effects and solutions?
E. What? How?
搭建文章整体结构的句型
1. 从开头段过渡到主体段:
The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that … (剑 5-2)
The obvious argument in its favour is that … (剑 9-1)
不写过渡句 (剑 10-3)
The first benefit is …
To begin with, ……
First of all, ……
It is widely agreed ……
There is no doubt that ……
There is no denying that ……
2. 从好处段到弊端段的过渡:
There are, however, some disadvantages. (剑 9-1)
However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important
age. (剑 5-2)
Although ______ has quite a number of advantages, there exist some
problems.
Despite all these benefits, people should not ignore the fact that ______
also causes many problems.
However, _____has its drawbacks when it brings us all these benefits.
3. 从主体段过渡到结尾段:
Overall,
In conclusion,
To sum up,
My view is that …
Based on the points outlined above, I believe that …
From what has been discussed above, we can come to the conclusion that ….
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4. 分论点之间的递进:
In addition,
Moreover,
Furthermore,
Also,
Besides,
Another benefit is …
Another problem is…
造句技巧(具体讲解和例句可以看造句技巧福利课)
1. 常规简单句(可以用介词、动词不定式,分词把句子延长)
主语用“人”
主语用“事物”(名词或者动名词)
…… enables (allows, helps) people to do sth.
…… is a good way for people to do sth.
….. may prevent people from doing sth.
2. 形式主语、形式宾语
It is adj. for sb. to do sth.
It is adj. that 从句
People find it adj. to do sth.
… makes it adj. for sb. to do sth.
3. There be 句型
4. 并列(句子并列和句子成分并列 and,but,or,while)
4. 状语从句(条件 If,原因 as,because,since 让步 although,even though,
时间 when,after,before,结果 so,so that,方式 as)
5. 定语从句(that,which,who,where)
6. 名词性从句(主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句、同位语从句)
利弊分析类题目:
例题: People these days can buy various goods on the Internet. Do you
think the benefits of this trend outweigh its drawbacks?
写作步骤:
1. 审题,标记题目关键词,分清楚题型
2. 头脑风暴想观点(类似的观点可以合并同类项)
3. 确定总论点和个人倾向
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4. 写文章
5. 写完检查一下,修改明显的错误
背景句的写法:(不同版本)
As a result of the popularization of online shopping, a large variety of
goods are available for purchase on the web.
Consumers can buy a large variety of goods such as foods, clothes and
home appliances on the web to meet their daily demand.
写观点的套句:
I think the benefits of this trend outweigh its drawbacks.
I think this trend has both positive and negative outcomes.
This phenomenon has some benefits, but its drawbacks should not be
ignored.
Although this phenomenon has some benefits, I am also concerned about
its drawbacks.
This trend has many benefits, though there are some problems that should
not be ignored.
This pattern has some benefits, although it may lead to some problems.
把好处弊端选择性地具体化
This makes the process of shopping more convenient and enjoyable,
although it may lead to some problems.
This can make the process of shopping more convenient, but it causes a
series of problems that should not be ignored.
开头段(背景+观点)
背景句的写作技巧
1.针对题目的关键词引出话题
2.运用词汇替换和语法技巧(切换主语)
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3.增补一些句子成分
原因、结果、目的、对比、举例
从句、并列、介词短语、动词不定式
观点句的写作技巧:
1. 可以使用套句
2. 也可以把好处或者弊端具体化
主体段的写作:
1. 确定分论点的个数,每个分论点的篇幅可长可短,是否扩展取决于实际情况
2. 每个分论点有明确的中心意思,可以写出中心句
3. 扩展方法:因果论证(为什么,怎么样,结果怎样)、举例论证、对比论证
结尾段的写作:
1. 一句话或者两句话都可以
2. 直接说好处多或者坏处多
3. 有好有坏也是一种个人观点
4. 可以委婉地表达好处(这个现象会继续,很多人会做这个事情)
5. 可以委婉地表达坏处(有很多问题需要克服)
结尾段示例(强调好处更多):
版 本 1 : To sum up, online shopping is expected to grow rapidly and
continuously, as it represents the selling-buying trend in the future.
Although there are some weaknesses, they can be addressed with some
measures adopted.
版本 3:Based on the points outlined above, I think this trend has more
benefits than drawbacks.
结尾段示例(强调坏处更多):
版本 1: To sum up, although many people embrace online shopping, I am
very concerned about the problems of this mode.
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结尾段示例(有好有坏):
版本 1: In conclusion, online shopping has many benefits, although there
are some problems that need to be tackled.
完整版本范文(利大于弊)
Online shopping is becoming increasingly popular among consumers of
various age groups, with the total sales soaring every year. This makes the
process of shopping more convenient and enjoyable, although it may lead to
some problems.
The first benefit of online shopping is that consumers can buy whatever
they want conveniently. After the goods are ordered on the web, they will
be delivered to the house at a designated time, saving consumers a great
deal of time and energy. This mode can better meet the demands for
office workers and housewives, who have desire for good quality life but
may be occupied by heavy workload and household chores.
In addition, buying things on the web enables buyers to compare the price
of the goods and find bargains, without going from one store to another, as
they used to do previously. Consumers become better informed and can
make the best choice. For example, a mother can select the diaper for her
new-born child at the lowest price by sorting all brands according to their
prices.
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完整版本范文(弊大于利)
As a result of the popularization of online shopping, a large variety of
goods are available for purchase on the web. This can make the process of
shopping more convenient, but it causes a series of problems that should
not be ignored.
There is no denying that consumers can buy most products they want
conveniently. After the goods are ordered on the web, they will be
delivered to the house at a designated time, saving consumers some time
and energy. In addition, buying things on the web enables buyers to
compare the price of the goods and find bargains, without going from one
store to another, as they used to do previously.
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完整版本范文(利弊相当)
Consumers can buy a large variety of goods such as foods, clothes and
home appliances on the web to meet their daily demand. I think this trend
has both benefits and drawbacks.
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作业练习:In some countries, more and more adults choose to continue living
with their parents after they graduate and find jobs. Do you think the
benefits outweigh its drawbacks? (2015-4-30)
好处 2 条(仿写思路图)
弊端 2 条(仿写思路图)
上课写的一些开头段句子:
It is common for young people in many countries to live with their parents
after they leave school and find jobs.
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Due to the high price of housing, many young people choose to live with
their parents, even after they have found jobs.
Traditionally, young people would leave their home after graduating from
school, but now many of them choose to live with their parents.
参考范文(倾向于弊端更多):
It is common for young people in many countries to live with their parents
after they leave school and find jobs. This mode can be beneficial to
parents and children in some families, but it also leads to many problems.
Living with parents is perhaps a good way to save the cost of living. Young
people do not need to rent or buy a house by themselves and they can also
share some daily necessities and electric appliances with their parents.
Besides, when living under the same roof, parents and adult children can
take care of each other. If someone encounters difficulties in daily life,
family members can reach their hands to help.
Also, living together may cause tension between children and parents due
to the generation gap and different lifestyles. For example, some young
people stay up late at night, which conflicts with their parents’ timetables
and affect their rest. Parents and children may complain about each other
and quarrels may arise in the family.
Overall, living with parents can be a temporary choice shortly after young
people leave school. But in the long term, they should be encouraged to
move out of their parents’ house so that they can acquire more life skills
and learn to take more responsibilities.
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上课写的一些开头段句子:
Traditionally, the general public has little knowledge about the process of
criminal trials, but now many of these cases are broadcasted on TV. I think
this policy can make the judicial work fairer and more transparent, but it
also causes some problems.
The boom of mass media makes it possible for people to watch almost
various events on TV, or even the process of criminal trials.
参考范文完整版:
Traditionally, the general public has little knowledge about the process of
criminal trials, but now many of these cases are broadcasted on TV. I think
this policy can make the judicial work fairer and more transparent,
although it may cause some problems.
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如果能力强的同学,想练习这个题目,也可以仿写或者自己写
好处 2 条(仿写思路图)
弊端 3 条(仿写思路图,有些弊端没有展开)
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课程会现场录制,提供高清录屏,方便缺课的同学补课,也有利于课后复习
A 类同学:小作文课件从 qq 群文件里面下载
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