To: Nancy Myers

From: Dylan Sacksteder

Date: October 10, 2022
Subject: APLED 121-Chapter 5 – Achieving Audience Involvement-Pg. 115

ACHIEVING AUDIENCE INVOLVEMENT

1. Revise the following by adding pronouns and names.
a. The company will require further information before processing this request.
John, we will ask you to provide the new scheduling information before processing your request.
b. It has been decided that a new procedure must be implemented to avoid further mechanical
failures.
The committee has decided that a new procedure must be added in to avoid further mechanical
failures.
c. The department supervisor wants to extend heartfelt thanks for the fine efforts expended.
Mr. Peters, the department supervisor wants to extend heartfelt thanks for the fine efforts
expended.
d. I think you have done a great job. I want you to know that you have surpassed this month’s
quota by 12 percent. I believe I can speak for the entire department by saying thank you.
I think you, Mr. Stanley, have done a great job by surpassing this month’s quota by 12 percent,
and I can speak for the entire department by saying thank you.
e. If the computer overloads, simultaneously press Reset and Control. Wait for the screen
command. If it reads “Data Recovered,” continue operations. If it reads “I/O Error,” call the
computer resource center.
If the computer overloads, press Reset and Control at the same time and wait for the screen
command. If it reads “Data Recovered,” continue operations, but if it reads “I/O Error,” call Mrs.
Johnson, at the computer resource center.

2. Revise the following using positive words and pronouns.

a. We cannot lay your cable until you sign the attached waiver.
When you sign the attached waiver, we will lay the cable.
b. John, don’t purchase the wrong program. If we continue to keep inefficient records, our
customers will continue to complain.
You will have satisfied customers if you purchase the right program. That will allow us to keep
efficient records.
c. You have not paid your bill yet. Failure to do so might result in termination of services.
If you pay your bill, we will continue services.
d. If you incorrectly quote and paraphrase, you will receive an F on the assignment.
You will receive an A if you correctly quote and paraphrase.
e. Your team has lost 6 of their last 12 games.
Your team has won 6 of their last 12 games.