MUS7800

Dr. Isbell

LITERATURE REVIEW: PEER FEEDBACK

Author Name: Veronica Perez Espinosa

Reviewer Name: Johan Pepper

For each criteria, score 1-10 (1=absent/not effective; 10= very effective), then provide a
few remarks.

1. Offers a broad and comprehensive (as possible) overview of the main concepts
involved in your study

RATE: 10
COMMENTS:

This literature review offers a clear overview of the concepts that this study will deal
with.

2. Is organized by topic area, rather than as a 'data dump' list of studies that you
have encountered

RATE: 10
COMMENTS:

The information used in this document is very well used to support all the arguments
and allow a clear understanding of the elements that make up this research.

3. Is of formatted correctly: length, word count, double spaced, 12 pt font.

RATE: 9
COMMENTS:

In general, the document meets all the required parameters. Still there are some minor
things to fix in the citation format and the bibliography at the end. I put some comments
in the document about this which might help with formatting.

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 4. Establishes a need for/significance of the study

RATE: 8
COMMENTS:

This is one of the points where this document can be improved. Despite reading this
proposal, I feel that the argument about why this study is being done is not as strong as
the points to be studied. Maybe you could explain why in children of the sixth grade
class? Do these children have any special characteristics by which these methods reflect
their benefits or disadvantages better than children of other classes?

5. Is written in a way that it can be understood by readers from a variety of

backgrounds (avoid jargon, all technical terms are defined)

RATE: 10
COMMENTS:

Yes, this document is written so people of different backgrounds can understand it.

6. Concludes with a clearly articulated purpose statement and, if necessary,

relevant research questions. 

RATE: 9
COMMENTS:

As in point 4, I feel that despite having the questions of the review very clear and the
argument for which this study is carried out may have a little more development.

7. Citations are included when and wherever appropriate. Bibliography is

included.

RATE: 10
COMMENTS:

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Yes, the citations are correct and appropriate. The bibliography is also included in this
document.

8. Do you have any additional comments about this literature review?

In general terms it looks very good, most of the concepts are very well explained and
organized. The citations are applied correctly, and the formatting is mostly fine. There
are only two things that I feel could improve the document:
1. Fix the bibliography format.
2. Work on the need for/significance of the study. I think this is the only point that
needs a stronger argument. Throughout the entire document it was very clear to me
where the idea of doing this study came from, also with your questions I got an idea of
how you are going to do it but I still do not feel convinced for the reason that this study
should be done
.
Your topic is very interesting and I would love to read your final research paper.