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First paragraph:
The purpose of this paper is to explore the assumption that technology is making us careless in
writing. I wanted to research this because I am a student that uses technology every day and
wanted to know how it affects our writing form using spell check apps, speech-text-dictation, and
getting our information from the internet for our assignments. What do we have to learn and
improve when computers write for us, and websites check our grammar? With our technology
advancing so rapidly, it is almost impossible for us to live without it. As a result of the way we
communicate, we use texting apps to communicate with our friends and family, writing short
sentences that are shortened and abbreviated. Students and people, in general, fail to recognize and
differentiate between texting and writing as (Bronowicki, K. A.,2014, p.33) says becoming
relievable on technology, is doing our students a disservice, as they cannot distinguish informal
writing from formal writing and, consequently, combine the two as one. This is true because I have
seen my classmates use abbreviations in their writing as they do in texting. They cannot see the
difference between that informal writing such as the one that we use in the text the formal writing
expected from us in school. Students are creating a new style of English writing where they
combine both forms without caring for formal grammar. I believe that there should be a balance
between these two types of writing styles. Learning the moments where each of them should be
used could help to preserve the original style that we know now so that it will not disappear over
the years. If properly instructed, the writing language can not only be preserved but also evolve
into a fresh style that is even more effective with technology. In their study (Lenhart, A., Arafeh,
S., & Smith, A. 2008, p.4), students felt that they would benefit their writing from additional
My research has shown both advantages and disadvantages of using technology. After reading
multiple scholarly journals and books, I believe that technology has made us careless in writing.
Not only is the technology at fault, but also the students who are lazy to do their work.
Additionally, some teachers think that by putting instructions online, the students will
automatically know how to complete them without an actual lesson. The fact is that writing
students need constant feedback. When they are not receiving any feedback, they rely on
technology to provide a second opinion that could fix their problems or make them sound perfect.
The use of technology such as texting as a form of communication has an indirect way of making
us careless in writing. This is because we abbreviate words when texting, and we fail to
differentiate when to use them, in texting or on a school paper. Technology is a big database
connecting us with so many tools that we can use. I am not saying to use them. Instead, I am
saying to balance the usage of technology and the effort that we put into every single paper that we
write. We need to put attention to what we are communicating and reflecting the world. I believe
that we all want people to see the best of our writing abilities.
Revision plan:
Firsts paragraphs:
The purpose of this paper is to explore the assumption that technology is making us
careless in writing. I wanted to research this because I am a student that uses technology every day
and wanted to know how it affects our writing form using spell check apps, speech-text-dictation,
and getting our information from the internet for our assignments. What do we have to learn and
improve when computers write for us, and websites check our grammar? With our technology
advancing so rapidly, it is almost impossible for us to live without it. As a result of the way we
communicate, we use texting apps to communicate with our friends and family, writing short
I had to learn English as my second language. Since I didn't know the grammar, my
classmates introduced me to apps that could check my grammar. Though these apps were a great
way to revise my work, at the same time, I realized that technology wouldn't help me when I was
required to write a long essay for a state exam, and I couldn't receive any help. I realized I needed
to know a little bit of grammar in order to pursue an education. I also realized that being dependent
on technology wasn't helping me grow. Therefore, I wanted to know whether technology is causing
us to be careless.
Students and people, in general, fail to recognize and differentiate between texting and
writing. Bronowicki states that we are becoming relievable on technology, which is doing our
students a disservice, as they cannot distinguish informal writing from formal writing and,
consequently, combine the two as one (33). This is true because I have seen my classmates use
abbreviations in their writing as they do in texting. As a result, they cannot distinguish between
that informal writing, such as the one we use in the text, and the formal writing we would use in
school. Students are creating a new style of English writing where they combine both forms
I believe that there should be a balance between these two types of writing styles. Learning
the moments where each of them should be used could help to preserve the original style that we
know now so that it will not disappear over the years. When properly instructed, the writing
language can not only be preserved but can also evolve into a style that is even more effective with
the help of technology. The study by Lenhart, Arafeh, and Smith states that students feel that they
would benefit their writing from additional writing instruction in their schools (4).
Second Paragraphs:
I believe that technology has made us careless in writing. Not only is the technology at
fault, but also the students who are lazy to do their work. Additionally, some teachers think that by
putting instructions online, the students will automatically know how to complete them without an
actual lesson. The fact is that writing students need constant feedback. When they are not receiving
any feedback, they rely on technology to provide a second opinion that could fix their problems or
The use of technology such as texting as a form of communication has an indirect way of
making us careless in writing. This is because we abbreviate words when texting, and we fail to
differentiate when to use them, in texting or on a school paper. Technology is a big database
connecting us with so many tools that we can take advantage of. I am not saying that we shouldn't
use them. Instead, we should balance the use of technology with the effort we put into every paper
we write. We need to put attention to what we are communicating and reflecting on the world. I
believe that we all want people to see the best of our writing abilities.
Revision analysis:
As a writer, I feel that I achieve to create a good structure for my paragraphs by indicating where
one idea begins, and where it ends. Due to the fact that I now use smaller and simpler paragraphs,
the reader can clearly see all of my ideas, resulting in less confusion. I also accomplish to indent
my paragraphs to give a more professional look according to the MLA format. Additionally, I
accomplish including proper in-text citations according to MLA format to give credit to my
sources. Also, I was able to add a little more to my experience writing. This made me realize that
technology is making us careless, as it did not help me when I was learning the language.
Furthermore, I was able to remove some sentences that I had written about the research I
conducted. The difference between the before and after is that the after looks more professional
and has a more organized structure and more details. I think that the after version is better because
I can see how my ideas flow between the paragraphs. It also gives less confusion to the readers,
and it also gives more details on how it relates to the author's opinion, in this case, mine. I think
this revision was a success, but if I receive more feedback, I might make it better than the current
version. In my next step, I will send my research paper to the writing center for feedback so that I
can improve it.