In this writing, you will have to describe a person.

Follow this guideline:

*DESCRIBE YOUR ROLE MODEL.

*Think of a title.

*Remember to use 4/5 paragraphs, and each paragraph has to have its own topic sentence.

*Include as much vocabulary as you can.

*You have to write between 180-200 words (you may write up to 230, not more than that).

My mom, my friend and my Role

Model.
My mother is an (ww) amazing woman, her name is Guillermina, (run-on) she is 35
years old and she works as a teacher.

Physically my mother looks younger (rephrase) than the age she actually has, (run-on)
she is short but (rephrase) her height is on the average (run-on) she is strong and
muscular, a thing that I love is her massive thin and blonde hair with an appreciable
length make her even more beautiful, (run-on) her sparkling honey eyes (expression)
show her friendliness and her sense of humour, (run-on) her skin always look (vt)
tanned and match (vt) perfectly with her oval face and her full lips. (If you have a look
at this piece… it is only ONE SENTENCE from beginning to end. It is full of
commas. You cannot separate one sentence from the other with only a comma.
You must revise the idea of what a sentence is, which is a basic concept for any
writing)

As for her personality My (punct) mother´s most striking characteristic is her

generosity and her happiness, (run-on) she is so patient (that) she (rephrase) takes
time and care with everything that she does, (run-on) she always has time to listen and
to help others. She hardly gets annoyed about anything, (run-on) I can’t understand
how she manage (vt) that, (run-on) sometimes she can be a bit reserved at first, but
when you know her (comma missing) you can understand and see her showing her
feelings.

(connector mising) She is my role model because she is a strong and independent
woman, (run-on) she knew (vt) how to went (pattern) through the obstacles, (run-on)
she could be (vt) a bit stubborn, (run-on) once she made (vt) a decision (comma
missing) nothing could change (comma missing) her mind. For me she is perfect (run-
on) she brings the patience that we need at home, and make (vt) every moment a funny
and enjoyable one, (run-on) she is kind with everyone and her good-natured (wf)
makes her special.