Firstly, children watch too much TV. It’s bad for their health. It can make them addicted.

They will spend too much time indoors. This can make them fat.

Firstly , children watch too much tv , which is bad for their health. This habit cause them to
become addicted , resulting them spending too much time indoors and thus getting fat.

Instead of writing

There are many issues that students have to faec at university .

Students face a multitude of issues at university

Multitude –a great number

Rewrite the sentences

 Van Gogh is a world-famous artist his paintings can be found in many museums and
art galleries.
 Van Gogh is a world-famous artist whose paintings can be found in many museums and art
galleries

 Van Gogh is a world-famous artist. His paintings can be found in many museums
and art galleries.
 Van Gogh is a world-famous artist; his paintings can be found in many museums and
art galleries.