PROJECT-1

Project Title : Deconstruct Essay Structure

Project Description : This project aims at internalizing the essay structure, unity and
coherence. The students in pairs evaluate the assigned essay.

Output : A video recorded of presenting evaluation results, that is

published on Youtube. Then the link is linked to LMS
unram.ac.id. The analysis results with this template should be
submitted after completing the analysis.

Time : 10-16 March 2023

TASK#1 : Analyze the essay structure with the following template. This template can be
modified to adjust the essay structure. The procedures are retyping the text
(make sure it looks like the original text), and give the number of each
sentence.

Book Title : Bahasa Inggris: Work in Progress untuk SMA/SMK/MA Kelas X

Grade : 2E
Genre : Education Book
Page : 34-36
Group : The Second Group:
1. M. Zidan Al Farizi
2. Muhammad Ra’if Dzakir
3. Muhammad Surya Shodiqin

Introductory paragraph Sentences in the essay

1. Hook I like football, whether it is played between two
international teams or local teams, as long as the teams
give their best on the field.
2. Background Info -
3. Thesis Statement The sporting event that I would like to talk about was a
national club football tournament in my country that
takes place every year.
Main Body Paragraphs
1. Main point_1 Anyway, the football match took place about 5 years
ago, when two of the best football clubs of my country
played against each other in a final match of the
national football tournament.
a. Supporting The two arch-rival teams had already clashed against
point_1.1 each other in the past, and their number of wins was
pretty much the same throughout the history of their
clash, especially, in this tournament. So, essentially,
 nobody really knew which team was favourite to win
the final.
2. Main point_2 But, when the game actually started, all the supporters
of both the teams were screaming and encouraging
their respective team as if they were bound to win. As
a supporter, I also wanted my team to win at all costs.
a. Supporting_2.1 As a supporter, I also wanted my team to win at all
costs. Anyway, both teams were playing very “rough
and tough” football that led to some unwanted “fouls”
and some unfortunate “fistfight”.
3. Main point_3 The game continued scoreless up until the half time
interval, but as the second half of the game started,
the intensity of the game increased.
a. Supporting_3.1 In the meanwhile, I was getting nervous in the
stadium because my team wasn’t exactly playing up to
our expectation. Then, suddenly, the ball was passed
to the main “striker” of my favourite team from
nowhere, and a goal was scored by my team, leaving
the supporters of my team completely ecstatic and
crazy with the feeling of a possible victory. And, in the
end, we were indeed the victorious team.
b. Supporting_3.2 In fact, my team was lucky to survive a few scoring
chances from the opponent team.
c. Supporting_3.3 Then, suddenly, the ball was passed to the main
“striker” of my favourite team from nowhere, and a
goal was scored by my team, leaving the supporters of
my team completely ecstatic and crazy with the feeling
of a possible victory.
Concluding Paragraph
1. Summary Anyway, I consider this sporting event to be interesting
because we never know which team is going to win.
Besides, I consider this sporting event exciting also
because it attracts supporters from all over my country.
Finally, it is interesting also because no other sporting
event makes us as emotional as this one.
2. Restatement of Finally, it is interesting also because no other sporting
thesis statement event makes us as emotional as this one.
3. Prediction in Anyway, I consider this sporting event to be interesting
future/suggestion because we never know which team is going to win.
TASK#2: Evaluate the unity and coherence of the assigned essay with the following
criteria and template!

ii) Explain whether all the sentences within the paragraphs are connected or
not.
iii) If they are connected, what makes all the sentences connected (cohesive
devices: signal words, pronoun, repetition, deletion)
Introductory SENTENCES Remark Cohesive Arguments
Paragraph Devices
Sentences 1 & 2 I like football, Connected Repetition Because, the first
whether it is played sentence tells
between two about the author
international teams who likes football
or local teams, as and the second
long as the teams sentence tells
give their best in the about the
field. The sporting national club
event, I would like to football
talk about, was a tournament of
national club the author’s
football tournament country.
of my country that
takes place every
year.
Main Body
Paragraphs
PARAGRAPH 1
Sentences 1 & 2 Anyway, the football Connected Repetition The second
match took place sentence explains
about 5 years ago, about the clash
when two of the between two of
best football clubs of the best football
my country clashed clubs of the
against each other in author’s country
a final match of the that previously
national football mentioned in the
tournament. The first sentence.
two arch-rival teams
had already clashed
against each other in
the past, and their
number of wins was
pretty much the
same throughout
the history of their
clash, especially, in
this tournament.
Sentences 2 & 3 The two arch-rival Connected Signal Because, the
teams had already word, and second sentence
clashed against each repetition. explains that two
other in the past, arch-rival teams
and their number of had pretty much
wins was pretty number of wins
much the same in the history of
throughout the their clash. So,
history of their clash, the third
especially, in this sentence tells
tournament. So, that because of
essentially, nobody it, no one really
really knew which knew which team
team was favourite was expected to
to win the final. win the final.
PARAGRAPH 2
Sentences 1 & 2 But, when the game Connected Repetition The second
actually started, all sentence tells
the supporters of that the author’s
both the teams were has the same
screaming and feeling as other
encouraging their supporters which
respective team as if want to support
they were bound to their team to win
win. As a supporter, at all costs.
I also wanted my
team to win at all
costs.
Sentences 2 & 3 As a supporter, I also Connected Repetition, The sentences
wanted my team to and signal explain that not
win at all costs. word. only the author
Anyway, both teams (as a supporter)
were playing very that wanted his
“rough and tough” team to win at all
football that led to costs. Even both
some unwanted teams also were
“fouls” and some playing rough and
unfortunate tough to win the
“fistfight”. match.
PARAGRAPH 3
Sentences 1 & 2 The game continued Connected Signal The Author was
scoreless up until word getting nervous
the half time because his team
interval, but as the wasn’t playing up
second half of the to his expectation
game started, the while the
intensity of the intensity of the
 game increased. In second half of the
the meanwhile, I game increased
was getting nervous because the first
in the stadium half of the game
because my team was scoreless.
wasn’t exactly
playing up to our
expectation.
Sentences 2 & 3 In the meanwhile, I Connected Repetition, The author’s
was getting nervous and signal team wasn’t
in the stadium word. playing good as
because my team his expectation.
wasn’t exactly But, his team was
playing up to our lucky to survive a
expectation. In fact, few scoring
my team was lucky chances from the
to survive a few opponent team.
scoring chances
from the opponent
team.
Sentences 3 & 4 In fact, my team was Connected Signal The third
lucky to survive a word, and sentence tells
few scoring chances repetition. that the author’s
from the opponent team was lucky to
team. Then, survive a few
suddenly, the ball scoring chances
was passed to the from the
main “striker” of my opponent. Then
favourite team from the fourth
nowhere, and a goal sentence tells
was scored by my how the striker of
team, leaving the his team got the
supporters of my ball and scored a
team completely goal that caused
ecstatic and crazy the supporters
with the feeling of a became ecstatic
possible victory. and crazy.
Sentences 4 & 5 Then, suddenly, the Connected Repetition, The fourth
ball was passed to pronoun, sentence tells
the main “striker” of and signal that his favourite
my favourite team word. team scored a
from nowhere, and a goal and the
goal was scored by supporters were
my team, leaving the feeling of a
supporters of my possible victory.
team completely Then, the fifth
ecstatic and crazy sentence tells
 with the feeling of a that their team
possible victory. were won the
And, in the end, we match.
were indeed the
victorious team.
CONNECTION The paragraphs are
BETWEEN connected. Because,
PARAGRAPH they talk about one
topic. The first
paragraph begins
with the explanation
of the history of
both two arch-rival
teams. Then the
second paragraph
explains how the
supporters
encouraged and
wanted their team
to win the match at
all costs. The teams
also were playing
rough and tough to
win the match. And
the third paragraph
explains that the
first half of the game
was scoreless, then
in the second half
his team scored a
goal. Finally, Andi’s
favourite team
became the winner
of the match.
Concluding
Paragraph
Sentence 1&2 Anyway, I consider Connected Signal The author
this sporting event word, and explains that he
to be interesting repetition. consider football
because we never tournament to be
know which team is interesting and
going to win. exciting.
Besides, I consider
this sporting event
exciting also because
it attracts supporters
 from all over my
country.
Sentence 2&3 Besides, I consider Connected Repetition, Besides exciting,
this sporting event and signal he concluded
exciting also because word. that the football
it attracts supporters tournament is
from all over my also interesting
country. Finally, it is because it makes
interesting also him so emotional.
because no other
sporting event
makes us as
emotional as this
one.

iv) Identify the number of sentences in the paragraphs. Then classify them into
four categories (a. simple sentence; b. compound sentence; c. complex
sentence; and compound-complex sentence) by using the following table.

Introductory Simple Sentence Compound Sentence Complex Compound-

Paragraph Sentence Complex Sentence
Sentence 1 - - I like football, -
whether it is
played between
two
international
teams or local
teams, as long
as the teams
give their best
on the field.

There are one

independent
clause (I like
football), and two
dependent
clauses (whether
it is….) and (as
long as…)
Sentence 2 The sporting event - - -
that I would like to
talk about was a
national club
football
tournament in my
 country that takes
place every year.

Because, this
sentence contains
only one clause.
Main Body
Paragraphs
PARAGRAPH 1
Sentence 1 - - Anyway, the -
football match
took place
about 5 years
ago, when two
of the best
football clubs of
my country
played against
each other in a
inal match of
the national
football
tournament.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause (the
football match
took place…) and
one dependent
clause (when two
of the best…)
Sentence 2 - The two arch-rival - -
teams had already
clashed against each
other in the past, and
their number of wins
was pretty much the
same throughout the
history of their clash,
especially, in this
tournament.

Because, there are

two independent
clauses that are
connected with
coordinating
conjuction (and).
Sentence 3 - So, essentially, -
nobody really
knew which team
was favourite to
win the final.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause and one
dependent clause
(adjective clause).
PARAGRAPH 2
Sentence 1 - - - But, when the
game actually
started, all the
supporters of
both the teams
were screaming
and encouraging
their respective
team as if they
were bound to
win.

Because, there
are one
dependent clause
(when the
game…) and two
independent
clauses that are
connected by
conjunction.
Sentence 2 As a supporter, I also - - -
wanted my team to
win at all costs.

Because, there is only

one clause
(independent clause).
Sentence 3 - - Anyway, both -
teams were
playing very
“rough and
tough” football
that led to some
unwanted “fouls”
and some
 unfortunate
“fistfight”.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause (.., both
teams were…
football) and one
dependent clause
(adjective clause).
PARAGRAPH 3
Sentence 1 - The game continued - -
scoreless up until the
half time interval, but
as the second half of
the game started, the
intensity of the game
increased.

Because, there are

two independent
clauses that are
connected with
conjunction (but).
Sentence 2 - In the meanwhile, I - -
was getting nervous
in the stadium
because my team
wasn’t exactly
playing up to our
expectation.

Because, there are

two independent
clauses that are
connected with
conjunction
(because).
Sentence 3 In fact, my team was - - -
lucky to survive a few
scoring chances from
the opponent team.

Because, there is only

one clause (indepent
clause).
Sentence 4 - Then, suddenly, the - -
ball was passed to
the main “striker” of
my favourite team
from nowhere, and a
 goal was scored by
my team, leaving the
supporters of my
team completely
ecstatic and crazy
with the feeling of a
possible victory.

Because, there are

two independent
clauses that are
connected with
conjunction (and).
Sentence 5 And, in the end, we - - -
were indeed the
victorious team.

Because, there is only

one clause
(independent clause).

CONNECTION The paragraphs are

BETWEEN connected.
PARAGRAPH Because, they talk
about one topic.
The first paragraph
begin with the
explanation of the
history of both two
arch-rival teams.
Then the second
paragraph explains
how the supporters
encouraged and
wanted their team
to win the match at
all costs. The teams
also were playing
rough and tough to
win the match. And
the third paragraph
explains that the
first half of the
game was
scoreless, then in
the second half his
team scored a goal.
Finally, Andi’s
favourite team
 became the winner
of the match.
Concluding
Paragraph
Sentence 1 Anyway, I
consider this
sporting event to
be interesting
because we never
know which team
is going to win.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause (…, I
consider…
interesting) and
one dependent
clause (because
we never… win).
Sentence 2 Besides, I
consider this
sporting event
exciting also
because it
attracts
supporters from
all over my
country.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause (…, I
consider…
exciting also) and
one dependent
clause (because it
attracts… my
country).
Sentence 3 Finally, it is
interesting also
because no other
sporting event
makes us as
emotional as this
one.

Because, there
are one
independent
clause (…,it is
interesting also)
and one
dependent clause
(because no
other… emotional
as this one).