Professional Documents
Culture Documents
Game
changers
At the end of this unit you will be able to:
write an expository essay containing a series of
coherent and cohesive paragraphs;
give a talk that is interesting as well as informative;
use features of connected speech to enhance the
effectiveness of your speaking;
understand and use words and phrases that are
commonly used in academic contexts.
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Unit Overview 52
Task Cycle 1: A 19th century game changer
Task – Part 1 Discuss a past game changer 55
Task – Part 2 Write a well-structured paragraph about this game changer 57
Academic What is academic writing? 58
Literacy Focus Writing an expository paragraph (1) – The topic sentence 60
Language Focus Academic writing – Nominalisation 64
Academic writing – Coherence and cohesion (1) 69
Follow-up Task Rewrite your paragraph 71
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Assessment Overview
The Assessed Writing Tasks
Look to the past and write about an idea or discovery in Science and Technology,
Business or Humanities and Social Science which has profoundly changed our
lives – not necessarily for the better.
You will be required to complete important steps in your Essay Writing Process.
Your instructor will tell you when different steps should be completed. If you have
not already, you should sign up for the library workshop now. You can do this
through the link on canvas.
Your Assessed Writing Task is a five-paragraph essay, which you will submit to
Turnitin by the end of Week 11.
You will find more information about these two assessed tasks on canvas.
You will find more information about this assessed task on canvas.
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Pre-Task Activities
Watch the following short video about oil’s many uses and
derivative products.
Then, with a small group, discuss the ways the discovery of oil
transformed the world.
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Note: People in China were drilling shallow oil wells using bamboo poles in the
3rd Century AD. They burned the oil to speed the evaporation of sea water in
order to extract salt.
Based on the list of products your group made on the last page,
can you speculate how other developments made oil a game
changer?
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4. When you talk and write about game changers, you may find that these two words
are useful: ‘enable’, ‘ensure’. They are particularly useful in academic writing as
they enable writers to express complex ideas more concisely. Notice how they are
used:
(d) The fast food industry’s rapid growth had a boost when
an abundant number of teenagers of the baby-boom era
began to enter the workforce and were willing to accept
low wages to earn some money.
The abundance of baby-boom teenagers …
When you rephrased the sentences using one of these verbs, you probably
created a number of noun phrases. Underline them. You will consider this process
of nominalisation in the Language Focus of this task cycle.
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In this task you are going to talk about a past game changer.
There are videos on canvas about different aspects of the oil
industry. These should help you think about the game-
changing impacts of oil.
Passage A
Oil was just another fuel resource. It was quite dirty when burnt. Why did it
become useful? Simply put, it was a few discoveries in refining processes which
changed crude oil into kerosene. Kerosene was used in the past as fuel for
lighting streets and for heating buildings, but production methods were not
efficient and were reliant on limited oil sources. People would collect oil which was
seeping out from cracks and fissures on rocky surfaces or from tar pits. The
process to refine kerosene was slow and time-consuming. In 1853, Ignacy
Łukasiewicz discovered an efficient and cost-effective way to produce kerosene
from crude oil. This led to a boom because public utilities began installing more
kerosene lights and heating systems in cities, and consumer demand rose
exponentially. The profits generated by these companies had a multiplier effect
with more utility companies spreading around the world.
Passage B
Oil was not an accessible resource and most supplies were limited prior to 1858.
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Drilling through thick bedrock was almost impossible. Col. Drake, of Pennsylvania,
USA, pioneered the machinery and engineering techniques needed to drill through
hard bedrock into deep oil deposits. The cost of the process was relatively
inexpensive compared to the costs of oil. Without these economically efficient
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Passage C
Crude oil was abundant but it was still difficult to purify and refine. Large capacity
fractional distillation made it simpler to separate crude oil into usable components –
all in one process. This process made it faster and more cost-effective to break down
crude oil into its separate components in one cycle. Before this development, crude
oil was refined but in a complex and expensive process and in limited quantities.
There was residual waste material, a lot of smoke was produced and the odours were
harmful. Industrial distillation provided an efficient way to remove the impurities and
heavy pollutants from crude oil and to obtain all the useful components of oil. The
result of this process was that gasoline needed for automobiles was simpler to refine
and readily accessible. Also many other petroleum based by-products were now
available for different processes, such as bunker oil for electrical and nautical engines
and petrochemicals for synthetic rubbers and plastics.
Passage D
Petrochemicals
The (e.g., 2
Task – Part ethylene, propylene, benzene) are the by-products of crude oil
refineries. Chemists from DuPont Corporation used these by-products to invent
neoprene, the rubber-like, synthetic polymer that was used as an alternative to
natural rubber. The market for rubber products grew exponentially because, previous
to the invention in 1930, rubber material had been limited to sap harvested from
trees. The new rubber material could be synthesised quickly and easily shaped for
various industrial uses. In 1938, Du Pont invented nylon, which provided a durable
and pliable fabric which was an inexpensive alternative to silk, linen, cotton and other
natural fabrics. Again, there was an exponential growth in the market for the
alternative fabric. Many chemical companies began research and development into
various types of polymers. Eventually, more petrochemical polymers were invented
to create other synthetic polymers for use in many different ways, from hard plastics
to flexible rubber for medical uses.
After discussing the passages on the previous pages, would you be able to write an
answer to any of the following questions?
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It is linear. It starts at the beginning and proceeds logically to the end, with
every part contributing to the main line of argument. There are no digressions
or repetitions.
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Read a brief explanation of these features here, and then, with a partner, do the two
exercises on the next page.
Exercises
1. In “Spoken and Written Language”, published in 1989, the
linguist M.A.K. Halliday took a sentence from a spoken text:
You can control the trains this way and if you do that you can be quite
sure that they'll be able to run more safely and more quickly than they
would otherwise, no matter how bad the weather gets.
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1st part:
2nd part:
3rd part (optional):
For example –
The controlling idea tells us the aspect of the topic which the
paragraph will focus on. In this paragraph it will be ‘change’.
The controlling idea often also tells us how the paragraph will
be organised. Here, it indicates that the paragraph will
discuss three ways in which the topic changed the world.
(a) In the case of this topic sentence about oil, we also know
which of the three key questions the paragraph will
answer. Which is it?
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Topic:
Controlling idea:
Organisational pattern:
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Topic:
Controlling idea:
Organisational pattern:
Topic:
Controlling idea:
Organisational pattern:
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Language Focus
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Which of the following two sentences expresses its point in a more academic style?
Can you explain why?
The use of a large number of nouns and noun phrases instead of verbs is a
noticeable feature of all academic writing. This means that instead of writing:
The new equipment enables us to replicate the experiment.
We would write:
The new equipment enables the replication of the experiment.
As you now know, the key sentence in an expository paragraph is the topic
sentence. The more academic the style of writing is, the more likely it will be that the
topic and the controlling idea – and other parts of the paragraph – will be expressed
using noun phrases. Here is an example of a topic sentence:
Graduating from university has become a minimum requirement for many jobs.
There are five steps involved in writing a topic sentence like this:
For example: 1 – D
Now match the other topics to the controlling ideas.
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Step 2: Express the topic and the controlling idea as nouns or noun phrases –
nominalisation
A noun phrase is a group of words that functions like a noun. It can be a long string
of words where the whole unit (the phrase) behaves like a noun. A gerund is a
‘verbal noun’ created by adding ‘-ing’ to a verb.
In theory, you could lengthen a noun phrase, and it would still function like a single
noun.
To sum up:
Subject (a noun or gerund or noun phrase) Verb Object
The textbook
The instructor
Learning
causes frustration
Learning through memorisation
Learning through mere memorisation without any
interaction with any of your classmates
When the subject is not a single noun, you may have to change it through the
process called nominalisation.
Nominalisation can involve changing a verb to its noun form, or to its gerund form (by
adding ‘-ing’).
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Therefore:
‘Graduate from university’ ‘Graduating from university’
‘Many jobs require at least this’ ‘a minimum requirement for many jobs’
Now change the topics and the controlling ideas which you matched in Step 1 to
noun phrases, where necessary:
As you know from the Academic Literacy Focus, there are five common ways of
organising an expository paragraph, and the structure is set up in the topic sentence.
1 – D Significance
Note that what you have chosen in Step 3 will affect the language features you need
in Step 4.
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Hence:
Now choose an appropriate verb/sentence pattern for the rest of the phrases.
Step 5: Choose the right tense/type of modality and make sure it agrees with the
subject
Graduating from university has become a minimum requirement for many jobs.
Now construct topic sentences out of the other four pairs of topics and controlling
ideas.
1. Graduating from university has become a minimum requirement for many jobs.
2.
3.
4.
5.
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Practice
Follow the 5 steps to write a topic sentence to begin the following paragraph. The
topic and a choice of controlling ideas have been given to you below.
1. Logical order
In an expository paragraph, the topic sentence is developed with
sentences which support the controlling idea. The paragraph is
coherent if the ideas it presents are presented in the order which
best shows the relationships between them.
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are jumbled. Identify the topic sentence, which indicates the way
in which the paragraph will be structured, then arrange the
others in a logical order. Decide what kind of order this is.
1 Although the battery in an electric car is able to store enough electricity to equal the
. energy in a tank of liquid fuel, it is big, heavy, and prohibitively expensive.
For both of these reasons, it is clear that hybrid cars would be the better option for
2 HKUST.
.
Hybrid cars are a better choice than electric vehicles for HKUST for two main reasons:
their energy efficiency and their cost.
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. Electric cars are not as energy efficient as they seem.
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2. Using nouns which refer back to, and sum up, previous
ideas
When we develop an idea we need to refer back to it in some
way. If it is a long and complex idea, it is difficult to do this, but
we can use a noun to summarise it and replace it. By showing
connections, nouns like these help the sentences in the
paragraph to flow. There are many nouns which can be used for
this purpose, and they are often paired with ‘this’ or ‘these’.
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(b) Three nouns are used in this way in the paragraph below
about the Haber-Bosch process. Underline the information
which each refers back to.
1 The Haber-Bosch process provided a solution to the problem of natural limitations on crop
production, and for this reason was one of the transformative inventions of the twentieth
century. Though nitrogen is abundant as gas in the atmosphere, it had to be fixed into
solid or liquid form in order to be used for agricultural crop production. Before the
5 discovery of the Haber-Bosch process in the early 20 th century, fixed nitrogen either came
from mining Chile saltpetre (NaNO3) or from harvesting guano. Both these methods
required time and energy and were limited by natural processes. To speed the production
of fixed nitrogen, Fritz Haber and Carl Bosch developed their process and the equipment
necessary to combine atmospheric hydrogen and nitrogen under high temperatures and
10 very high pressure to produce ammonia. The resulting ammonia was used to produce
fertiliser which could then be fed to plants in larger quantities and this resulted in huge
increases in agricultural yields. With increasing crop yields, more parts of the world could
be fed with agricultural products and countries could reduce famine and starvation. The
14 effects of this invention on crop production and population growth have been dramatic.
Follow-up Task
Apply what you have learned from the Academic Literacy Focus
and the Language Focus to improve your paragraph. Make it
easier to read and perhaps more academic in style.
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Out-of-Class Work
1. Paragraphing
Being able to write an expository paragraph is essential to
successful writing at university, and in LANG 1002 and 1003.
We recommend you watch the videos on Writing Structured
Paragraphs. There are links to the videos on canvas, under
‘Out-of-Class Work’.
You should submit your essay topic proposal soon after you
have attended the library workshop and by end of Week 8 at
latest.
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Pre-Task Activities
In this Task you are going to (A) discuss how to answer the three key questions in
the case of two game changers; and then (B) write a paragraph about a third game
changer, in which you answer one of those questions.
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[Introduction…]
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[Conclusion…]
Follow-up Task
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Remember to use a more academic style of writing by using noun phrases where
you can, as in this example:
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Under your topic sentence jot down facts and ideas which you
think might support your controlling idea.
Choose the items from your list which directly support the
controlling idea and write sentences for them. (Primary support)
Identify the items which will further develop this direct support
with additional information. They might provide details, or
explanations, or examples. In this way they indirectly support the
controlling idea. (Secondary support)
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Language Focus
1. Logical order
2. Using nouns which refer to, and sum up, previous ideas
Exercise
In the Task (Part 2) you identified the answers which the three
paragraphs about the iPhone provide to the three key questions.
Now analyse why the verbs in those answers were used in the
way they were.
What do the A single past A past event A distant past A past ability A current habit
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The verbs
The answers
to which key
question(s)
would be
likely to
feature these
tenses?
Can you also state which of the three key questions the
tenses could be used to answer? In other words, what
tense(s) can you use when answering each of the questions
for your Second Assessed Writing Task?
Question Tense(s)
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Apple ____________ (establish; already) a customer base with its iPod and the
iTunes music store. These customers ____________ (like) that the new device
____________ (synchronise) seamlessly with software and services they
____________ (use; already). For new customers, it ____________ (be) Apple’s
retail spaces that ____________ (be) the big attraction. Being able to experience
the product before buying it, many ____________ (be) persuaded to buy.
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Out-of-Class Work
You should submit your essay topic proposal soon after you
have attended the library workshop and by end of Week 8 at
latest.
2. If you have not already taken the library workshop, you MUST
sign up now.
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Pre-Task Activities
The Task
In this task, you are going to analyse the introduction and the
conclusion from the essay on the iPhone as a 21 st century game
changer (page 76).
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Introduction or
conclusion?
Which sentence
order?
A. At that time, Nokia was the mogul of the smartphone world and had a significant
proportion of the market, while Blackberry, Palm and Windows CE held the
remainder of the market share. In 2008 the iPhone still did not have much of a
presence, but by 2009 it had captured the largest portion of the mobile internet
browser market.
B. This essay will discuss the impact the iPhone has had in transforming the
smartphone, the market factors in place that made it a success, and the new
industry created by the iPhone.
E. In 2007, Steve Jobs introduced to the world a smartphone that was quite
different from its competitors.
F. The future is undoubtedly positive for the iPhone and the markets it has created.
G. This growth shows that the iPhone was a tool people wanted to use. The current
wave of smartphones on the market all had their origins in the touchscreen
design and interface of the iPhone, and this is testament to its game-changing
nature.
H. After what seemed like a long wait, consumers had a revolutionary device that
made it easy to access communications functions alongside entertainment
functions.
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Exercise
The diagram on the next page shows the structure of an essay.
The box on the following page contains a list of the most
important elements of an introduction and a conclusion. Can you
identify the elements in the sample introduction and conclusion
about the iPhone? How about in the mystery paragraph you
looked at earlier?
Note:
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General
↓
The
Introduction
Specific
Body paragraph 1
Body paragraph 2
Body paragraph 3
Specific
↓
The
Conclusion
General
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INTRODUCTION:
A. Some brief background or contextual information that provides a focus for
your essay. This shows the reader how you understand the topic.
C. An overview of how you will support your argument, with a clear preview of the
order in which you will proceed. This process can be indicated by such phrases as
“In order to explore these issues, this essay will first...” or “This will be followed
by ...” or “The essay will conclude with...”.
CONCLUSION:
A. A reference to the question and your thesis statement, perhaps saying what the
significance of your findings, or the implications of your conclusion, are.
C. A summary of key points made in reaching your position (i.e. in reaching your
answer).
D. How your topic links to a wider context (the ‘bigger picture’) – i.e. a final
comment on the topic.
[Optional] A statement about whether there are other factors which need to be
looked at, but which were outside the scope of the essay.
Language Focus
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Show how certain you are about your statement (often with the use of modal verbs
like can, may, might, and expressions like generally, probably, seem to, be likely
to). This should make your statement sound less absolute, and more convincing.
Exercise: How could you show your certainty about the following statements?
Avoid vague expressions (such as good, bad), narrow the scope of what you are
referring to (by using most, many, some) and give specific reasons. This should
help your statement sound less like a generalisation, and hence, more credible.
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Exercise: How could you make the following statements more specific?
Provide the source of your information, to increase credibility. This allows the
reader to see that the statement has been made by someone else – ideally an
authority on the subject – but not you. In academic writing, this should be done in
the form of a citation.
Exercise: How could you include the sources of information in the following
statements? (The sources are provided in parentheses.)
Driverless cars will reshape the world in ten ways. (Sparkes, 2014)
Specify conditions
The two e-core courses will help you improve your English.
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Indicate relativity
This framework has been adapted, with kind permission of the author, from the work on ‘linguistic delicacy’ of Nigel Bruce of the
University of Hong Kong.
Exercise
In a seminar on the debate about whether the younger generation are ‘digital
natives’, this question was put to students:
To what extent is it possible to say that digital technologies have given rise to a new generation of
students who require new approaches to education?
“ The Millennials are ‘digital natives’, who have high level technical skills. Universities must
change! They must adapt to the skills of this generation, and to the new ways that they learn.
”
Later, the student read the following comments in the British Journal of Educational
Technology, and became less confident about his opinion:
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Look at the examples below of the language writers use to express themselves
cautiously (‘hedge’). Then discuss ways in which the student might express his
opinion more cautiously.
“ The Millennials have been called ‘digital natives’ because many of them have high level
technical skills. It is claimed that they have new skills and learn in different ways from past
”
generations. If this is true, universities may need to change.
What did the student do to express himself more cautiously? What is the effect?
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Inter-paragraph cohesion
When writing a sequence of paragraphs, it is important to link
one paragraph with another so that they fit together well. You
may:
End a paragraph with a sentence that leads forward to the
next paragraph;
Start the new paragraph in a way which links back to the
previous paragraph; or
Repeat certain key words and phrases, or near equivalents
in closely related paragraphs.
You can also use expressions which make reference to a
point already mentioned or indicate that you are about to
consider something new.
These signposts look backwards These signposts look forwards () towards
( ) at a point already raised: issues that are going to be raised:
This suggestion ... An equally significant aspect of …
These ideas ... Another significant factor in …
Despite this... Before considering X, it is important to note Y
This brief outline suggests ... Having considered X, it is also reasonable to
Such proposals ... look at …
As we have seen, … There is also, however, a further point to be
considered.
Out-of-Class Work
On canvas there are activities to support your learning and development out of
class. Your instructor might ask you to do some or all of these activities.
1. The HKUST Library has put together a guide and a quiz to help you find sources
of information and cite them in your essay.
Read the Library Citation Guide. This will help you to write a Bibliography for
your essay, and to review in-text citations. The library has E-learning
videos which will also help you.
After you have read the guide, take the Online Quiz to see how well you
understood what you read.
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Pre-Task Activities
With a partner, agree upon a list of three such people (or groups
of people). Be ready to explain to the class in what way they
were (or have been) influential. You could explain their influence
briefly in the following way:
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Paraphrasing (2)
Paraphrasing is a useful alternative to using direct quotations,
especially where the original idea is relevant to your needs, but
the words which express it are not remarkable in any way.
Paraphrasing involves:
Listening to/reading and understanding a passage
Making sure that you really know its meaning
Restating the original in your own words (in your own
“voice”), by rewording and rephrasing and restructuring it.
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To avoid plagiarism, you need to use your own words and acknowledge the
source
Look at the following example. APA citation style is used.
1.
2.
3.
What is the secret to the skill of paraphrasing?
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In both cases, the idea should remain the same, but the specific detail should be
different. A good paraphrase will usually involve changes to both the words and the
grammar.
Look at this example and study the two strategies which follow:
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Practice
Now try paraphrasing these excerpts from an academic text:
1. “Misunderstandings about plagiarism can occur due to cultural and language issues.”
2. “In some cultures there is little need to acknowledge the source of information.”
4. “In some cases, students see paraphrasing the source as a strange thing to do
when the source itself makes the point better than they can reword it.”
Original text quoted from Yang, M., & Lin, S. (2009, September). The perception of referencing and
plagiarism amongst students coming from Confucian heritage cultures. Paper presented at the 4th Asia
Pacific Conference on Educational Integrity. Retrieved from http://ro.uow.edu.au/cgi/viewcontent.cgi?
article=1011&context=apcei (slightly adapted).
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Follow-up Task
Apply what you have learned from the Academic Literacy Focus
to make the paragraph about the iPhone more credible, by
supporting a point with a well-paraphrased citation.
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Out-of-Class Work
Your essay
1. Check out this excellent writing resource for help with both
paragraphing and paraphrasing skills.
Purdue University’s online writing lab (the OWL).
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Pre-Task Activities
Many experts in urban development and city planning agree that one past game-
changing innovation made city life possible.
If you are interested, you can watch a video from the History Channel about modern
inventions that changed society. The link is on canvas.
The Task
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Step 2: Identify the main idea of the paragraph and the ways
this main point is developed. You may use the
graphic organiser on page 108 to help you describe
the development.
Many experts believe that the invention of indoor plumbing provided the foundations for the
development of urban societies as they exist today. Although the ancient Roman Empire had some form
of plumbing and sewage systems, they were limited in scope and the Romans lacked the materials to
produce quality systems. By the Middle Ages, most people spent a lot of time and energy bringing water
inside their homes. Transporting wastewater out of the home was also a chore, not to mention an
unpleasant and potentially toxic task. The invention of indoor plumbing changed all of this. The
implementation of more efficient water distribution systems and centralised sewage systems helped
promote the use of indoor plumbing, and as people became more aware of hygiene and disease control,
the growth of indoor plumbing continued. This essay will show that indoor plumbing greatly changed the
way people live by allowing them to live in cities.
Indoor plumbing made activities such as washing and waste disposal extremely convenient, and
made life generally easier and more pleasant. Previously, people had been required to fetch their own
water or move to places with a fresh water supply nearby, such as near rivers or lakes. Also, people had
to use outhouses or external areas for waste disposal. In cases where they used an indoor commode,
the waste collected from chamber pots had to be carried to cesspools or external waste collection areas
for disposal. On top of all this, the smell of sewage opening up into the street made life difficult for
residents living nearby (Ogle, 1996). Indoor plumbing eliminated the extra effort required and made city
life more agreeable. Residents could access water conveniently from a faucet inside their own home. In
addition, disposing of wastewater was simplified with the use of the plumbing systems and flush toilets.
Though these conveniences were at first limited to rich people, the increasing popularity of indoor
plumbing enabled it to be implemented in the homes of ordinary people with modest incomes.
The development of public water distribution systems and underground sewage systems in cities
allowed indoor plumbing to spread. For indoor plumbing to work, there needed to be a continuous
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supply of water flowing through the pipes. Without this supply of water, the indoor plumbing fixtures
within the house would not be effective. As with all water systems, what flows in must flow out.
Underground sewage systems connected to pipes became the disposal and collection points for
wastewater flowing out of residential buildings. Buildings simply needed to connect their outflow pipes to
the sewage collection points flowing underground. With the convenience of indoor plumbing, cities
began construction of taller and larger structures because there was a way to transport water in and out
of the buildings. In 1829, the Tremont Hotel in Boston, USA, was the first hotel to have indoor plumbing
and running water in each of its rooms (Ogle, 1996). This was a luxury at the time because only rich
families could afford to build homes with indoor plumbing. The earliest large-scale residential projects
using indoor plumbing were in New York City in the 1930s. These projects used public water works in
combination with water towers on top of buildings to provide all the bathrooms in the buildings with
sufficient water pressure (Ogle, 1996). All these developments combined to ensure the continuing use
and spread of indoor plumbing.
The lasting impact of indoor plumbing was the elimination of the open waste collection areas
mentioned above that were breeding grounds for bacteria and other disease-causing germs. Before
indoor plumbing, diseases spread quickly and were difficult to control within cities because of a lack of
appropriate ways to dispose of human waste. For example, in 1849, cholera spread throughout London
killing 14,137 residents because at that time there was no sewer system that isolated wastewater from
fresh water. Sewage contaminated the fresh water well at which people used a manual water pump to
draw drinking water for their homes (Snow, 1855). With indoor plumbing, these areas where drinking
water and wastewater mixed, resulting in fertile ground for the breeding of germs, were eliminated.
Water supply systems were separated from sewage systems removing the risk of contamination. More
and more people wanted to have enclosed plumbing systems to reduce the risk of disease and indoor
plumbing became part of normal government regulations for buildings. This happened because of its
ability to remove the cause of disease from areas where people were living.
Indoor plumbing enabled the development of cities. Taller structures could be built because there
was a method of transporting water into all the rooms of the building as well as a way to transport
wastewater away from the building. This coincided with the development of public water works and
sewage systems. In addition to the convenience of being able to transport water, pools of waste in
which diseases bred were eliminated. With diseases under control, people moved to cities, and cities
prospered and developed into the metropolises of today.
References:
Ogle, M. (1996). All the modern conveniences: American household plumbing, 1840-1890. Baltimore, MD: Johns
Hopkins University Press.
Snow, J. (1855). On the mode of communication of cholera. London: John Churchill. Retrieved June 22, 2017 from
http://www.ph.ucla.edu/epi/snow/snowbook.html
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Language Focus
Note that a long sentence is helpful only when its length and structure clarify the
relationships among the ideas it is connecting. Too many long sentences can be
just as difficult to read as too many short ones.
Example: The sentences on the following page are taken from a draft of the
student’s essay on indoor plumbing. With a partner, first analyse the relationships
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between the ideas in each of the first three reconstructed sentences in the table.
Are the reconstructed sentences more effective? Why/ why not?
Next, identify the main clauses and dependent clauses of the remaining sentences
(10 – 15). Then write your own sentence for numbers 16-18.
Original sentences changed to… Possible reconstructed
sentence
1. Water had to be fetched from a (dependent Because people needed to
natural water source and carried clause) fetch water from a natural
into the house. water source and carry this
2. This was not convenient. (main into the house, transporting
clause) water into houses was not
convenient and quite time
3. This was time consuming. (phrase) consuming.
10. Public water works provided some Use was made of public
water. water works in combination
11. Water towers were on top of with the water towers on
buildings. top of buildings, so all the
12. Bathrooms need sufficient water bathrooms in the buildings
pressure to work. had sufficient water
13. Water pressure is needed to flush pressure to effectively flush
waste. waste.
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Task Cycle 6
This task cycle will help you to craft a talk about your
past game changer that will grab and hold your
audience’s attention.
Pre-Task Activities
A. The iPhone revolutionised the smartphone. Almost no one could imagine anything
different from the old-style keyboard design and function. Apple did it. And Apple
succeeded, because it had a name -- a cool name -- and a huge customer base --
fanatical customers ready to accept any product it made.
B. The iPhone transformed the smartphone in terms of both design and function, and
its success was determined at least partly by market factors already in place.
And these? Can you identify which one is spoken and which one is written?
Oil was not an accessible resource and most supplies were limited prior to 1858. Drilling through thick bedrock
was almost impossible. Col. Drake, of Pennsylvania, USA, pioneered the machinery and engineering techniques
needed to drill through hard bedrock into deep oil deposits. The cost of the process was relatively inexpensive
compared to the costs of oil. Without these economically efficient processes, large deposits of oil were largely
inaccessible and businesses relied on inefficient methods to collect oil from shallow oil deposits. With Drake’s
techniques, extracting oil from deep underground deposits spread throughout North America, Eastern Europe,
and Asia. Crude oil had become accessible and relatively inexpensive to extract and distribute. The demand for
oil increased and it became a currency for international trade. One effect was that those who controlled the oil
deposits gained economic power and political clout.
When and how did oil become more available? Large underground oil deposits were not accessible before 1858.
There was not enough technology and machinery. Drilling holes through thick bedrock to reach deep oil
deposits was almost impossible. No one had done it successfully. Holes in the bedrock would collapse quickly.
Those collapses sealed the holes again keeping oil under the bedrock. This was a huge problem. One engineer,
Edwin Drake, was determined to solve this problem. First thing he needed was money for equipment and for
experimenting with different techniques. He convinced the Seneca Oil Company to give him funds and support.
But Drake had great difficulties getting the right drills, the right pipes and machinery. Many months passed and
nothing he tried was successful. He then tried something different. He used a drill pipe filled with sea water to
drill through the rock. The water gave support and volume to the pipe and kept it from collapsing. His investors
had given up and stopped giving funds. This could have stopped the whole process. But Drake had faith in his
work. He continued using his own money and in August of 1858, he hit the oil deposit and crude oil came
bubbling out of the pipe. All his hard work and sacrifice had finally paid off. With Drake’s technology, crude
oil became accessible and engineering companies in oil-rich places around the world began drilling and
extracting oil. Oil was on its way to becoming a powerful currency. Those with it became very rich.
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Language Focus
(a) In your talk, you will want to explain why your game changer succeeded or had a
lasting impact. This means that you will want to use signposts indicating a cause-
effect relationship. Some of these signposts are: ‘for this reason’ / ‘that is why’ /
‘The reason that…’, ‘therefore’, ‘as a result’.
Exercise
In the London Olympics in 2012, Nathan Adrian’s 100-metre freestyle swim won him
a gold medal. A couple of New York Times writers wondered how he would do
against every medalist in this event who had ever swum it. They made a video-article
and called it “Racing Against History”. Watch it.
This table shows a few of the key medal-winning swims in the Men’s 100-metre
event. Can you suggest reasons for the dramatic improvements in swimming times
over time?
(b) In your talk you will need to make it easy for your listeners to follow you. There
are also transition words and phrases which you can use to lead the audience
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through your talk. Your instructor will help you to make a list of these useful
signposts.
Follow-up Task
VERY IMPORTANT
When you give a talk, you are communicating with people.
You do not want to sound like a robot reading/reciting a
passage. That means you should remember your main
points only. Below is a bullet point form of the talk about oil
drilling.
Think also about how you will use signposts to show the
relationships between your ideas and help your listener follow
your talk.
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This task cycle will help you to make your talk more
interesting by choosing the right content and
structuring it appropriately, and using your voice in a
more effective way.
Pre-Task Activities
“The Story of Bottled Water” is about how big business and soft
drink manufacturers changed the way people think about
drinking water and created a new industry – bottled water. It is
also about the problems that are a result of this change in
thinking.
In the Task, you are going to watch a video from “The Story of
Stuff” website, entitled “The Story of Bottled Water”. After your
instructor plays the first 30 seconds of the video, discuss the
following questions:
The Task
In this task you will analyse and react to a talk. Write down the main issues and the
actions that Annie Leonard mentions to inform the audience how big industry
changed the way consumers think.
Notice how she uses language structures to capture your attention. What words
does she use? Listen to how she makes her points into stories. Check her use of her
voice, and in particular, stress and pausing.
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Step 2: (a) for half the group, (b) for half the group
In this part, you will learn more about how companies
manufacture demand. Your instructor will assign a part to you
to watch. You will share what you watch with your other group
members later. Take notes as you watch.
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“Is it cleaner?”
“Sometimes, sometimes not: in many ways, bottled water
is less regulated than tap.”
“It isn’t always cleaner as sometimes bottled water is less
regulated than tap.”
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Here are some elements that you could include in that talk.
What would be a possible sequence for these elements?
Including a story
Read the extract below from Annie Leonard’s talk. Can you
identify where she uses a story to bring her point to life? Look
back at Unit 1 for more ideas on how to tell a good story and
how to integrate it into a talk or speech.
What happens to all these bottles when we’re done? Eighty percent
end up in landfills, where they will sit for thousands of years, or in
incinerators, where they are burned, releasing toxic pollution. The rest
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gets collected for recycling. I was curious about where the plastic
bottles that I put in recycling bins go. I found out that shiploads were
being sent to India. So, I went there. I’ll never forget riding over a hill
outside Madras where I came face to face with a mountain of plastic
bottles from California. Real recycling would turn these bottles back
into bottles. But that wasn’t what was happening here.
Language Focus
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When you and your partner are ready, read your passages to
each other. After each reading, the listener should comment on
the effectiveness of the speaker’s rhythm.
Extract 1
Extract 2
Next, you hide the reality of your product behind images of pure
fantasy. Have you ever noticed how bottled water tries to
seduce us with pictures of mountains streams and pristine
nature? But guess where a third of all bottled water in the U.S.
actually comes from? The tap! Pepsi’s Aquafina and Coke’s
Dasani are two of the many brands that are really filtered tap
water.
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