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Essay A has an excellent coherence of the whole essay.

The article seemingly follows a process


and every step connects to each other naturally. The first part briefly but detailedly introduces
the main issue, the topic, which provides enough background information. It even indicates what
the best treatment is and the opposite is.
The second paragraph further introduces specific condition of each program and states the
current dilemma, which makes a great preparation for the later analysis of reasons. Many
statistics are applied in this part to show that the program truly suffered from many problems,
which leads us to the next important part—— analyzing those reasons behind this fact. Reasons
are also listed unequivocally by summarizing each reason with some core terms, like policies and
strategies. Then the logical analysis connects with factual work, which finally comes to a very
reasonable conclusion, like so what kind of measure cannot be adopted.
For next reason, transition word like additionally is used to move to another new reason. After
describing the fact, the natural conclusion is made again. Those two reasons are more focusing
on analyzing status quo, which paved the way for the following part—— putting forward
constructive criticism and contributing to innovative plans.
The ways it suggests are also written in a very informative way, specified clearly and concisely.
Using gerund as the subject is a clever way to emphasize the action, thus making the ensuing
derivation more perceptible.
The last paragraph reinforces the current situation of the country and infers the future trend
objectively, which leaves us much room for further reflection.
Such causal essay is truly meaningful and enlighting.
Essay B is more like an introduction essay than causal essay, which narrates and analyzes many
facts regarding the topic but not logically deduces it.
Essay C is also a little bit like an introduction about handshake, but one that traces back to its
historical roots. Then this kind of behavior is also analyzed from phychological way, which fulfills
the function of passing on knowledge.

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