ACT 1 CAST 2 NOTES

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NOTE TIME STAMP

The very first transition feels 0:44-0:45
sharp and jolty
Is a closer shot of Emily talking ∼ 1:20 - 1:46
better? (after house is introduced)
Switch to other camera angle as 2:45 - 2:48
soon as mother enters
Zoom in scene as Ralphie is old time: 5:25
leaving room suggested time:
5:11
Switch to shot that includes old time: 10:02
emily and isaac earlier suggested time:
9:33
Wait to switch after lights fade on 11:35/36
the house? Or go directly to
emily already in light
→ close up on emily
Wider shot of the desperados ∼ 13:10 - 13:17
running away?
Cut to family faster after Ralph 14:10 - 14:14
talks about the gun (there's a
weird pause)
Perhaps have ralph as a unseen 14:15 - 15:41
narrator during the family in the
kitchen scene (the very quick
snaps back-forth and wide shot
feel weird)
Closer shot of Emily as she talks 16:50 - 16:55
about the car & 17:02 - 17:17
Possible close shot up of Scut as ∼ 19:49 - 19:55
they enter?
Cut straight to the lights as they 21:07 - 21:16
come up (skip long transition into
pole scene)
Get rid of transition into 23:07 - 23:35
classroom (very long)
Have emily in the shot? 25:14 - 25:37
Pan camera outwards earlier (on 26:57
‘Monday’)
Close up on Emily talking about 27:23 - 27:28
wednesday and the old man’s
holiday anxiety
→ then traintion to house with
darkness is already there
Transition shot faster (after tree 30:58 - 30:59
lot scene, weird pause)
Close up on emily after ‘almost’ 35:23
→ then transition to house as → 35:42
lights are fading up
Is it possible to use the soap ∼ 37:08-09
scene from the first show? The
lights cut off weirdly in the
middle in this recording
OKAY. SOAP FANTASY 38:04 - 39:29
→ either use ALL from the first
show hat appearing
→ or include picture falling specifically:
38:39
Currently Ralphie walks in with
no hat and then suddenly has a
hat and that's weird.
Cut classroom transition time 41:31 - 41:53
Perhaps used the Helen and Ester 41:53 - 42:31
Jane scene from show 1?
→ love gay Helen but Ester Jane
has no coat and that's weird.
Weird camera movement as the 42:32
boys enter
Cut pause between ralph talking 43:25 - 43:30
and ralphie enter spot light
Switch to the side camera faster? old time: 46:22
→ right as Ralph says “in all suggested time:
directions” 46:21
Switch to wide shot earlier (as 48:29
soon as house lights fade)
Transition back into house after 49:28
“wednesday” is odd
Switch to wide shot earlier (as 52:04
soon as family exists)
Traintion directly into house as 52:43
lights come up with fragile box
Maybe show Ralphie writing his Anytime
theme as Ralph talks? between: 57:16
(also avoid the desk coming on) - 57:32

BONUS NOTES:

➔ GASP. YOU INCLUDED F-U-C-K!!!

➔ AMAZING transitional work for black bart

➔ Close ups on Ralph feel really nice

➔ CAR SCENE LOOKS GREAT!!

➔ Poor flick.