Pro.&Sol. C13T4.

"In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many

people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What
can be done about this problem?"
Cause – biện pháp triệt để giải quyết nguyên căn của vấn đề
Prb – biện pháp giải quyết hậu quả

BÀI VIẾT LẦN 5

Despite agriculture development’s remarkable progress, hunger remains a
persistent issue affecting people worldwide. This essay will suggest that the main
reason is that these advances are inaccessible for many countries, and propose a
solution that there should be humanitarian aid programs that assist the adoption
of these programs.
To begin with, the main reason for this is the unavailability and
inaccessibility of these agricultural advances for many countries around the
world, especially those nations that have limited financial resources, poor farming
infrastructure and lack of agricultural knowledge. The situation struggled these
nations to access or implement advanced technologies in agricultural, leading to
ongoing hunger despite significant progress. For example, in 2022, world hunger
rate increased by nearly 10% since many countries found it hard to keep up with
new modern agricultural advances.
The most practical solution is to provide humanitarian programs that
support the adoption of agricultural advances. International humanitarian
organizations should fund struggling countries to build better farms, offer
agricultural development-related courses and send qualified agricultural
professionals as trainers. For example, in 2015, a countryside in Kenya has
overcome hunger as after receiving funds and educational supports from UNICEF,
they were able to successfully customize a windmill to power their irrigation
canals.
In conclusion, the unavailability and inaccessibility off modern agricultural
technologies are the primary reasons for the ongoing situation of worldwide
despite agricultural development’s process. Hence, there should be humanitarian
aid programs to assist agricultural advances adoption in these nations.

(LINK UNDERDEVELOPED VÀ DEVELOPING VỚI AROUND THE WORLD)

Bài viết lần 4

Despite agriculture development’s remarkable progress, there are still
many people worldwide suffering from hunger daily. The essay will suggest that
the main reason is that these advances are inaccessible for developing and
underdeveloped countries, and propose a solution that there should be
humanitarian aid programs targeted at helping to bring and implement those new
technologies in agriculture to these groups of countries.
To begin with, the main reason is that these agricultural advances are
unavailable or inaccessible in developing and underdeveloped countries as they
are likely to have limited financial resources, poor farming infrastructure and lack
of agricultural knowledge, hence struggling to access or implement advanced
technologies. (bị đói?) For example, Angola – one of the world’s poorest countries
has difficulties in implementing the UN’s modern agricultural development
guidelines due to the lack of funding, and hunger therefore persisted.
The most practical solution is to provide humanitarian programs that
support the adoption of agricultural advances in the aforementioned group of
countries. International humanitarian organizations should fund these countries
to build better farms, provide courses relating to agricultural development, and
send qualified professionals as trainers in agricultural field. For example, in 2015,
a village in Kenya has overcome hunger as after receiving funds and educational
supports from UNICEF, they were able to successfully customize a windmill to
power an entire village's irrigation canals.
In conclusion, the main reason of the ongoing situation of hunger
worldwide is that developed and underdeveloped countries have not yet been
able to access and implement modern agricultural advances. Hence, there should
be humanitarian aid programs to assist agricultural advances adoption in
developing and underdeveloped nations. (paraphrase câu hỏi)

chỉ còn vài lỗi dùng từ, cần chọn từ cho sát mạch ý hơn. Ý OK.
Ví dụ customise, indifferently.

Bài viết lần 3

Despite agriculture development’s remarkable progress, there are still
many people worldwide suffering from hunger daily. The essay will suggest that
the main reason is that these advances are inaccessible for developing and
underdeveloped countries, and propose a solution that there should be
humanitarian aid programs targeted at helping to bring and implement those new
technologies in agriculture to these groups of countries.
To begin with, the main reason is that these agricultural advances are
unavailable or inaccessible in developing and underdeveloped countries as they
are likely to have limited financial resources, poor farming infrastructure and lack
of agricultural knowledge, hence struggling to access or implement advanced
technologies. For example, Angola – one of the world’s poorest countries has
difficulties in implementing the UN’s modern agricultural development guidelines
due to the lack of funding, and hunger therefore persisted.
The most practical solution is to provide humanitarian programs that
support the adoption of agricultural advances in the aforementioned group of
countries. International humanitarian organizations should fund these countries
to build better farms, provide courses relating to agricultural development, and
send qualified professionals as trainers in agricultural field. For example, in 2015,
a village in Kenya has overcome hunger ever since as after receiving funds and
educational supports from UNICEF, they were able to successfully customize a
windmill from old bicycle parts to power an entire village's irrigation canals.
 In conclusion, the continuation of this problem is related to the fact
technological progress in agricultural continues to advance indifferently in
developed and developing countries, and the solution is to have humanitarian aid
programs to assist agricultural advances adoption in developing and
underdeveloped nations.

Ví dụ khổ 1: Phần chuyên gia nên sửa chút thành đào tạo. Khổ 2: Ví dụ và mạch ý
nên theo hướng nhận hỗ trợ để tiếp cận được các tiến bộ hiện nay, chứ không phải
tạo ra tiến bộ hoàn toàn mới (lệch với phân tích ở trên là không tiếp cận được)

BÀI VIẾT LẦN 2

Despite the remarkable progress in agriculture development, there are
many people worldwide suffering from hunger daily. The essay will suggest that
the main reason is that these advances are inaccessible for developing and
underdeveloped countries, and propose a solution that there should be
humanitarian aid programs targeted at helping to bring and implement those new
technologies in agriculture to these groups of countries.
To begin with, the main reason is that these agricultural advances are
unavailable or inaccessible in developing and underdeveloped countries as they
are likely to have limited financial resources, poor farming infrastructure and lack
of agricultural knowledge, hence struggling to access or implement advanced
technologies. For example, Angola – one of the world’s poorest countries has
difficulties in implementing the UN’s modern agricultural development guidelines
due to the lack of funding, and hunger therefore persisted.
The most practical solution is to provide humanitarian programs that
support the adoption of agricultural advances in the aforementioned group of
countries. International humanitarian organizations should fund these countries
to build better farms, provide more modern equipment, and send qualified
professionals to support in agricultural field. For example, in 2015, three students
in Kenya, after receiving funds and educational supports from UNICEF,
successfully built a windmill from old bicycle parts to power an entire village's
irrigation canals, allowing villagers to overcome hunger ever since.
In conclusion, the continuation of this problem is related to the fact
technological progress in agricultural continues to advance indifferently in
developed and developing countries, and the solution is to have humanitarian aid
programs to assist agricultural advances adoption in developing and
underdeveloped nations.

Outline

With the great development of science and new technologies in farming, agriculture all over the world
has made remarkable progress. Despite the case, there are still countless people in the world who still
suffer from hunger every day. (paraphrase đề bài)

The essay will suggest that the main reason for these problems is that these advances and innovations
are excluded in poor and developing countries, and propose solutions that there should be
humanitarian aid programs targeted at these groups of countries.

BODY

Para1:

To begin with, the main problem of (…) is that advances and innovations are excluded in poor and
developing countries

 Meaning these countries are having trouble implementing these methods

There are a number of reasons for this, ranging from limited financial resources to poor existing
infrastructure to political instability.

EG: Sudan – 100-year civil war  destabilized the entire country. Universities where students learn
about changes in agriculture are frequently closed or demolished meaning that young people who will
become agricultural scientists end up being soldiers or victims of the war  no access to agricultural
progress and famine persisted

These problems are present to varying degrees in countries around the world and offer a possible
explanation for the continuing hunger.
Para 2:

The most practical is to redirect humanitarian funds formerly focused on food aid to agricultural and
educational infrastructure.

Food aid is only an immediate solution. However, there would be better long-term effects if
international organizations and governments channeled that money into helping build better farms,
providing more modern equipment and sending qualified professionals to train those in need.

This is the long-term solution that should be aimed at.

Eg: In 2015, three young men in Kenya, after receiving international aid, successfully built their own
windmill from old bicycle parts that helped power the irrigation canals of an entire village, helping
everyone in the region overcame hunger since.

In conclusion,

the continuation of this problem is related to the widening gap between developed and
underdeveloped countries while technological progress continues to advance indifferently, and the
solution is to programs of humanitarian assistance to the strengthening and renewal of agricultural
infrastructures and especially to the training of people with knowledge of agriculture, helping society to
solve problems related to hunger.

Bài quá dài. Nhiều phân tích không cần thiết (food aid). Nguyên
nhân và giải pháp đang không liên quan đến nhau. Cấu trúc ngữ
pháp quá phức tạp và độ dễ đọc quá thấp.

BÀI VIẾT LẦN 1

With the great development of science and technologies in farming, agriculture all over the world has
made remarkable progress. Despite the case, there are still countless people in the world suffering from
hunger every day. The essay will suggest that the main reason for these problems is that these advances
and innovations are excluded in poor and developing countries, and propose solutions that there should
be humanitarian aid programs targeted at agricultural and educational infrastructure instead of food aid
in these groups of countries.

To begin with, the main problem of the ongoing situation of hunger around the world regardless of
agricultural advances is that these advances and innovations are not available in developing and
underdeveloped countries. Many countries have difficulty accessing or implementing these advanced
agricultural methods. There are a number of reasons for this, ranging from limited financial resources to
poor existing infrastructure to political instability. For example, Sudan's 100-year civil war has
destabilized the entire country, causing universities where students learn about agricultural changes to
be frequently closed or demolished, resulting in young people who will become agricultural scientists
becoming soldiers or victims of the war. This led to no access to agricultural progress and therefore,
famished persisted. These issues also exist to varying degrees in many countries around the world and
may explain why there is still hunger.

The most practical solution is to redirect humanitarian funds that were previously allocated to food aid
to agricultural and educational infrastructure. Food aid is only a temporary solution. However, the long-
term effects would be better if international organizations and governments used that money to help
build better farms, provide more modern equipment, and send qualified professionals to train those in
need. For example, in 2015, three young men in Kenya successfully built their own windmill from old
bicycle parts, which helped power an entire village's irrigation canals, allowing everyone in the region to
overcome hunger ever since.

In conclusion, the continuation of this problem is related to the widening gap between developed and
underdeveloped countries while technological progress continues to advance indifferently, and the
solution is to have humanitarian aid programs to strengthen and renew agricultural infrastructures and
especially provide people with knowledge of agriculture, helping society to solve problems related to
hunger.