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FINAL GRADE : 90
In the history of humankind, we had never consumed meat in these immense quantities.
Meat has many important vitamins and nutrients that we need for repairing our bodies but
because we eat meat so much it causes this big environmental impact that becomes a
problem for everyone, daily we make about 60 tons of garbage, equal to 15 big trucks filled
with pollutants, that is a lot!
As I mentioned in the past (avoid such parasite expressions): Consuming meat is a
significant part of our daily plate it has essential vitamins and nutrients vital for our bodies,
however with all the benefits, it possesses it causes harm too. Let's recognize why! – I could
not figure out where your Topic Sentence was.
PLEASE NOTE:
1) Whenever you include any statistics or facts, make sure you cite the sources.
2) You have no Topic Sentence: Cancer and water consumption are the key ideas/points in
the paragraph, so it would be correct if you had a Topic Sentence that includes these two
ideas after which you could present each point as Generalization 1 and Generalization 2
separately with their Details.
3) On Nov 13 you will have an opportunity to correct your paragraph, thus also your grade,
during our lesson. Make sure you have this paragraph at hand.
Narek Davtyan: Writing skills, 1st module