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Using the techniques practised during our workshop session(s), write a paraphrase of the following two
parargraphs.
- Use of synonyms
- Modifying parts of speech (nouns to verbs, verbs to nouns etc)
- Changing the order of the information
- Changing the structure of the sentences
PARAGRAPH 1
Of the more than 1000 bicycling deaths each year, three-fourths are caused by head injuries. Half of those
killed are school-age children. One study concluded that wearing a bike helmet can reduce the risk of head
injury by 85 percent. In an accident, a bike helmet absorbs the shock and cushions the head.
PARAGRAPH 2
While the Sears Tower is arguably the greatest achievement in skyscraper engineering so far, it's unlikely
that architects and engineers have abandoned the quest for the world's tallest building. The question is: Just
how high can a building go? Structural engineer William LeMessurier has designed a skyscraper nearly one-
half mile high, twice as tall as the Sears Tower. And architect Robert Sobel claims that existing technology
could produce a 500-story building.
Source: Ron Bachman, "Reaching for the Sky." Dial (May 1990): 15.
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Read the rubric carefully to see how the work will be evaluated.
Accuracy Paraphrase accurately Paraphrase mostly Paraphrase partially Paraphrase inaccurately Paraphrase does not
captures the meaning of the captures the meaning of captures the meaning represents the meaning demonstrate an
original text and maintains the original text with of the original text, of the original text, understanding of the
the same level of detail and minor errors or but there are resulting in a loss of original text.
complexity. omissions. significant errors or clarity or coherence
omissions.
Paraphrase demonstrates a Paraphrase shows Paraphrase includes Paraphrase contains Paraphrase contains
strong command of proficiency in vocabulary noticeable errors in frequent errors in severe errors in
vocabulary and grammar, and grammar, with vocabulary or vocabulary or grammar, vocabulary and
Language using appropriate synonyms some minor errors or grammar, affecting hindering grammar, making it
Usage and sentence structures. awkward phrasing. clarity and coherence. comprehension. incomprehensible.
Paraphrase demonstrates a
high level of originality, Paraphrase lacks
incorporating unique word Paraphrase shows some originality and relies Paraphrase shows little
choices and sentence originality, but relies primarily on the to no originality, closely Paraphrase is an exact
structures while maintaining heavily on the structure structure and replicating the structure copy or minimally
the essence of the original and wording of the wording of the and wording of the altered version of the
Originality text. original text. original text. original text. original text.
Paraphrase is mostly
clear and Paraphrase has some
Paraphrase is clear and easily understandable, but clarity issues, Paraphrase lacks clarity
understandable, maintaining may have some resulting in occasional and coherence, making it Paraphrase is incoherent
the logical flow and structure instances of confusion confusion or lack of difficult to understand and fails to convey any
Clarity of the original text. or lack of coherence. coherence. the intended meaning. clear meaning.
PART TWO
Academic writing: style and tone
OBJECTIVES:
To apply techniques introduced, explained and practised during synchronised sessions in order to write a
paragraph in an appropriate academic style
To analyse and identify issues with a paragraph with reference to best practice of academic writing
ACTIVITY
Use the techniques we practiced in the workshop sessions to first analyse and then re-write this paragraph to make it
sound more academic.
This paragraph is taken from an undergraduate’s dissertation about a research project carried out in London, UK.
Identify a minimum of 5 DIFFERENT issues with this paragraph and explain why it is an issue (10 points per issue)
I wanted to do a quantitative study to find out about people’s ideas of the importance of having an improved
information centre at Stratford train station. A quantitative study would definitely be best as it shows people’s
objective views rather than their subjective views and as I wanted to get the ideas of as many people as possible an
objective approach was best. A subjective, qualitative approach wouldn’t let me get as many views and this is what I
wanted for this study. I chose to use a survey as this meant I could get many views without taking too much time
and I didn’t have much time to carry out the study. I did this survey online and in the street face to face near
Re-write the paragraph to make it more academic in tone and closer to an acceptable style for a research project.
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Consider: passive voice, nominalization, use of first person “I”, less formal / more academic vocabulary, use of
contractions, connecting words / conjunctions etc.
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