I was moved by story, how Cineli learns to live with non-perfections and chooses a

sleazy neighbor transformed into a compassionate friend as a companion to her

birthday party.

in financial plan, I found there are pending 43000, so that is what is missing? I am
guessing, only 18.000 is left for potential coproducer, but that might not be enough for
them, since in most of the countries to credit as a coproducer you should have at least
10% in the movie, which means the plan should be adjusted.

Marketing plan - good:

pointing out Vera's previous work

pointing out themes for the festival strategy

Marketing plan - missing:

strategy for accessing markets

TV/streamer strategy

run for Oscars?

Scenario - good

at once - establishing the problem Cineli has, suffocating shield.

foreshadowing - darkness following

establishing antagonist - pure evil (maybe - "ladybug breaks" should be more

detailed, visually explained)

establishing Peri, anti-hero, is very funny. I can imagine this will be popular
between teens

we are aware of the space and the neighbor situation (but maybe, it could be
used to establish the conflict? Something, like, don't touch my fence scene?)

ok, and now I am getting a bit lost. Peri seems too friendly towards her. I think
Peri could be more grumpy and cynical.

he seems like a jolly, harmless, a bit messy, but cool neighbor. It seems a bit
rude that Cineli is just rejecting him.

I feel, in general, that this could be more powerful if this is also a friendship story.
So I would expect to have them on opposite sides at the beginning. They have to
think they hate each other. The audience knows that Peri secretly wants to join
Cineli's birthday but to Cineli, he has to demonstrate that he doesn't want to
come, even if he is invited!

so we see Peri as someone who smells bed and there are others who react to it.
It almost feels like a class struggle. Either we are establishing the snob party as
antagonist agent.

so far, Cineli seems judgemental of Peri appearance, they don't have any
argument, or any reason to be unfriendly towards each other.

worldbuilding - other insects all have huge shiny shields, and they are all
struggling with different level of suffocating

Peri is alcoholic

I like a queer vibe in this him trying out the shield

I like that Peri took the assignment from Cineli's list. It is establishing his
motivation quickly.

now he tries to setup the party but he is facing his clumsiness and gives up of
shields

I like how it twists in the moment when Peri discovers that Cineli is actually
deeply insecure

two of them walking in togethe