Read the question.

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist

knowledge of the following topic.
There is an excessive number of cars on our roads today and this leads to many
problems. Individuals and governments should ensure that public transport plays a
more important role in modern life in order to tackle these problems.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
Time: 40 minuteswrite at least 250 words.

There is no doubt that the number of cars on the road increased rapidly and this
resulted in many problems. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement
because of these reasons.
Firstly, the environment in many big cities is suffering from exhaust fumes and this put
the citizens at higher risk of respiratory problems. Carbon dioxide relased from the
vehicles on the roads also result in the terrible level in air pollution. Moreover, many
people tend to use their own vehicles such as motorbikes, cars,… which can cause traffic
jams in rush hours, especially in big cities. This can leads to the high rate of traffic
accidents evryday because many people are in a hurry and they do not obey the traffic
rules very well.
Secondly, the Gorvenment should take actions to solve these annoying problems. Many
citizens always want to take a bus or some public transports with good contidions and
smart, convinient and faster routes; sp that, they should invest money on developing
traffic management and public transports. This can reduce the high rates of vehicles on
the road and the air pollution. Stricter rules or laws can be made to warn people to obey
the traffic rules. For example, the Gorvernment should increase taxes on acoholic
products such as beers, wines,… or impose heavy fines on drunk drivers. They should
encourage and ecudate people, especially pupils or students about the traffic rules and
punishments.
In conclusion, the gorvenment needs to take acts to resolve these problems above in
order to create good quality life conditions to the citizens.
(263 words)
Writing task 2 structure
Introductory Write general statements about the topic using an academic phrase [a
writing hook]or paraphrase it. Then give your opinion about the topic
followed by a thesis statement [ a sentence that tells your reader what
you interpret]

1 body Write one point about the topic and then support it with examples
reasons, results, additional details or contrasting ideas.
paragraph Note: don’t forget to begin writing this paragraph with an academic
phrase.
2 body Write the second point about the topic and then justify it by giving
examples, reasons etc.
paragraph
This is the most important paragraph in your essay. It shouldn’t have
another new point about the main essay topic. Here there are two things
Conclusion you can do- summarize your body paragraphs which means ‘say the
same thing briefly’. The other thing you can do is to paraphrase the topic
again using synonyms.
Useful phrases to begin your 1 body paragraph

Firstly /First of all/First and foremost/To begin with

Useful phrases to start writing your conclusion

In conclusion/ To sum up/ In summary /To conclude/ To summarise/To

recapitulate/ All things considered

Useful phrases to write your thesis statement

In this essay I shall attempt to analyse…………………..

This essay will discuss …………………………..

This essay will have a look at ……………………….

Useful phrases to start your introductory

It is a popular belief that…………/ There is no denying that/ There is popular

belief /There is a wide spread belief that / There is no doubt that
Personal feedback
Teacher: J.Tharanga
Student: Benette
Date: 4/10/22
Task achievement

Your length is appropriate. .

Each of your paragraphs should have a main point supported by examples/reasons/

evidence/additional details or contrasting ideas.

Coherence and cohesion

You should write logical paragraphs and they should have supporting details.

Use a lot of linking words to connect your ideas.

[to begin with/first and foremost/for example/ for instance/ furthermore/ however/
nevertheless etc..

Vocabulary

Do not use informal words and phrases. Do not use abbreviations.

Avoid repetitions/ informal language.

Do not use contractions in academic writing.

Don’t × do not √

Avoid using commonly used words such as ‘ bad/ good/ small/ big/ but/ and also/ things

A significant/ large/ considerable/ substantial number+ countable nouns

A significant/ large/ considerable/ substantial amount + uncountable nouns

A plethora of/ a slew of/ a host of/ a battery of

And personal pronouns [we/ they/you/ I / he etc]

Grammar

Make sure that you use a variety of sentence structures. [simple and complex
structures.
IELTS Writing Task 2 Feedback Form
Criteria Good Ok Should
work on

Task achievement
Addresses all parts of the question √
Writes at least 250 words √
A clear opinion is presented √
Write a thesis statement
Main ideas are developed and supported √
by giving relevant examples and reasons
Coherence and Cohesion
Answers are structured in logical √
paragraphs
Each para has one main idea √
Includes an introduction and conclusion √
Supports main points with an explanation √
and then an example
Use cohesive devices accurately and √
appropriately
Linking phrases are varied √
Vocabulary
Vocabulary is varied by using synonyms √
Appropriate vocabulary √
Accuracy of spelling √
Grammar
Uses a variety of sentence structures √
Accuracy and punctuation √
Your band score [5]

Here’s a sample answer.

There is an excessive number of cars on our roads today and this leads to
many problems. Individuals and governments should ensure that public
transport plays a more important role in modern life in order to tackle these
problems.

To what extent do you agree with this statement?

There is no denying that there is an increase in the number of cars on our roads due
to various reasons such as uncomfortable public transport systems and limited
number of buses and trains. As a consequence, many issues such as traffic,
pollution and accidents have been created. Therefore, both individuals and
governments have vital roles to play so as to mitigate them. This essay will have a
look at the troubles caused by cars and certain solutions that could be taken by
individuals and governments.

First and foremost, a significant number of people drive their own vehicles for
many purposes because they find the public transport inconvenient. As a result of
it, not only a slew of roads are congested with traffic, but accidents happen
frequently. Another problem is that the environment is polluted with the noxious
emissions emitted by cars.

To solve, individuals can resort to public transport as much as they could or

perhaps utilize environment friendly modes of transport such as bicycles that are
not only less harmful to the environment, but also provide physical exercise.

On the other hand, governments can ensure that a large number of people make use
of public transport by improving it to a great extent. To illustrate this, comfortable
buses and trains that could accommodate a substantial number of people could be
imported. Moreover, road systems could be developed by the government in order
to make sure that public transport is operated smoothly.

To conclude, it is my view that although there are many cars on our roads causing
various issues, solutions to them could be found by both the individuals and the
governments.