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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the
following topic: Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental
problem is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree
with this point? and make comparisons where relevant. Give reasons for your answer
and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at
least 250 words.

Question type Opinion essay with an “extent” question

Some experts suggest people a method to solve the environmental problem

Topic
is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles.

Give your opinion and support to what extent you agree/disagree that
method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the:
Real writing tasks
1. cost of fuels and
2. all vehicles.

Synonyms or related words for the keywords in the writing task:

1. Experts – professionals
2. Suggest – advise, say
3. People – persons, individuals, public
4. Method – way, technique, strategy
5. Solve – tackle, deal, resolve
6. Environmental problems - environmental issues, environmental difficulties,
environmental challenges
7. Increase the cost of fuels - oil price hike
8. vehicles - automobiles, transportation, transport
Certain experts professionals advice advise people the public that a an approach to
figure out conservation environmental issues is to enhance the cost price of fuels and
all vehicles. Some person persons who might be might agree with that; however, i I
disagreed disagreewith that, to solve the environmental problem there are has other
ways to do it,, and my reasons are as follows.

There are reasons for why increase the cost of motor vehicles and fuel are useless.
Regardless the price of petrol has always fluctuated in the world, Firstly, some people
will not be bothered by the surge in price. the car also became Cars have become a
daily tool for people in nowadays. That, which means only increases in only
increasing the price is has no effect on the environmental problem. For instance,
despite although the gasoline price has dramatically increased in China's China in
recent years, sales of fuel cars also have growth strong still witnessed a strong growth.

Therefore Secondly, I think the government ought to take several aspects of measures
to solve the environmental issues, such as limiting vehicle travel by odd and even
license plate. This must reduce the numerous cars that travel and avoid traffic
congestion, since reducing which results in reduced pollution from vehicles vehicles’
emission. In addition, car companies should generate new environmentally friendly
energy to alternate replace petrol. only if change clean energy, the vehicle is not a
problem with pollution. Only when we use clean energy in every vehicle can we no
longer have problems with pollution. For example, the company Tesla has developed
a revolutionary product - an electric vehicle. Popular in worldwide, especially in
Shanghai, a lot of numerous citizens change changed their fuel vehicles to Tesla.
These trends already change the environment problem from the emissions of vehicles
obviously addressed pollutions from car emissions. At last Finally, public
transportation is the main reason for conservation should be improved. The depth of
development of public transport can alter people in their country‘s travels way This
can alter people’s travel ways, because the cost of taking the a bus or train to travel is
much lower than driving and more convenient a private car. For example, take, just
like the subway in Beijing at during rush hour. It is not only cheap and convenient but
also can avoid traffic jams and also takes the least time on the way.

In conclusion, some specialists believe that raising the price of fuel and vehicles could
fix the problem of environmental environmental challenges. In my view, the only way
can to solve these kinds of issues is to take several limited policies and such as
encourage people everyone to use electric vehicles and let the government put the
effort into public transportation development.
Word count: 353

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Overall Positive Assessment

Writes relevant ideas addressing the task question/s, but

Task Response 6
some are unclear.

Coherence and Presents information with some organization but some

6
Cohesion connectors are missed.

Uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task with

Lexical Resource 6
some inaccuracy.

Grammatical
Makes some errors in grammar and punctuation but they
Range and 7
rarely reduce communication.
Accuracy

Overall Band
6 Competent user.
Score
TA WEAK POINT 1: Writes an essay longer than the ideal word count.

MY ADVICE: However, when candidates exceed the minimum

amounts by a very wide margin, it creates several problems so
reductions are needed. What kind of problems?

Unclear main ideas. When writing body paragraphs dear, keep in

mind that your examiner looks for the main ideas first followed by
elaboration through relevant examples, explanations, or other forms
of supporting sentences. This is commonly called as PEE model
(point, explain, example), which is preferred by many examiners.

For example, it appears to me you have two reasons why you

disagree. The second reason (there are other measures than price
increase) is clear but the first reason is not so I used: Firstly, some
people will not be bothered by the surge in price.

POSITIVE RESULT OF THE CHANGE:

Accurately and sufficiently addressed task question without the use of

verbosity – wordiness.

CC WEAK POINT 1: There are some underused cohesive devices or

linking words.

MY ADVICE: As an IELTS candidate, you should learn various

linking words (also called transitional words or connecting words),
their meaning and appropriate use in your writing. Show some
variation and not repetition. Doing so will improve your cohesion and
overall CC score.

For example, I used firstly + secondly to list down your reasons for
your disagreement, etc.

Some other cohesive devices you may use in the future are:

For comparison – also, similarly, equally, likewise, meanwhile

For contrasts – in contrast, however
For specification - In particular, To specify, To be more specific,
Specifically, that is
For exemplification – for example, to exemplify
For justification – in fact, as a matter of fact, indeed
 For giving opinions – in my opinion, in my view, personally (not “as
far as I’m concerned” or “to my mind”)
For results –consequently, therefore, thus

When listing down arguments (sequence):

To start with, Mainly, Primarily
Also
In addition

POSITIVE RESULT OF THE CHANGE:

Better and clearer transitions leading to better CC score.

LR WEAK POINT 1: Lacks some synonyms to substitute main

keywords or other repetitive words.

MY ADVICE: Always check for repetition of words or repetition of

phrases and sentences from the question. We discourage students
from using keywords. Instead, we want students to improve their
vocabulary range by use of synonyms.

For example, in the Introduction and Conclusion, I used professionals

than experts, challenges than problems, etc.

Why important? It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as

you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the
same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show
the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do
the opposite for a high band score.

POSITIVE RESULT OF THE CHANGE:

A more varied vocabulary range, reducing or avoiding any form of

repetitions or redundancies.

GR&A WEAK POINT 1: Missing/inaccurate punctuation.

MY ADVICE: Punctuations are also important in getting a good

ORGANIZATION score. For example, periods are called full-stops in
British English, which is helpful. While we don’t literally count all
the words in a sentence, gauge the number of words you use. If you
think that your sentence already exceeds, end it with a period and
start a new one.

Commas indicate a pause, generally, in a sentence, especially when

 you want to set off nonessential words, in a series, after introductory
words like For example, However, Firstly, Secondly, etc., after
clauses (those that start with WHICH or WHILE), between
compound sentences separated by coordinating conjunctions like
AND/SO/BUT, after introductory adverbs, and after prepositional
phrases.

POSITIVE RESULT OF THE CHANGE:

Accurate ends and pauses.

WEAK POINT 2: Limited complex structures.

MY ADVICE: When attempting to write a variety of complex

structures, which makes up for your grade in GRA, you should know
that the examiner does not refer to lengthy, confusing sentences.
Complex sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two
simple or more simple sentences put together with a cohesive device
like a relative clause or a conjunction, making the essay more
coherent and cohesive. You can create complex sentences by using:

 whereas and while to make comparative statements

 using although and even though to make contrast statements
 IF clauses for conditional statements
 Relative clauses with WHICH and THAT (or WHEREIN)
 conjunctions like AND, BUT, SO, OR (but not at the start of a
sentence) to join two simple sentences and form a compound
sentence
 conjunctive adverbs like “therefore, however, thus, etc.”

In your essay, I used relative clauses with WHICH.

POSITIVE RESULT OF THE CHANGE:

A variety of complex structures.

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