Task 2
Use the checklist below to evaluate each essay above. For each criterion,
put a ✔ if the essay meets the requirement, and ✘ if it does not.
These days, social networking sites, In the digital age, social networking
where you can stay in touch with your platforms such as Facebook and MSN
friends, have become one of the most have become integral to modern
popular uses of the Internet. For some communication, particularly among
people, social networking sites turn younger generations. While these
into a kind of addiction. These people platforms offer numerous benefits for
end up wasting hours and hours of staying connected, their excessive use
time online. This essay describes can lead to a variety of negative
some of the problems associated outcomes. This essay will examine
with social networking sites and the problems associated with
sets out some possible solutions. overuse of social networking sites
and propose appropriate solutions
to address them.
The problems with spending too much
time on social networking sites are One major concern is the significant
fairly obvious. The first and most amount of time spent online, which
important reason is that time reduces opportunities for face-to-face
spent online in front of a interaction with family members and
computer is time that is not spent peers. Excessive screen time
face to face with family or replaces quality social engagement,
friends.Some argue that this leading to reduced communication skills
causes people to be less sociable. and a decline in emotional connection
In addition, time wasted online within families. Additionally, valuable
distracts young people from more time is often diverted from essential
important tasks like their studies, responsibilities such as academic work,
college work, or even helping their household duties, and physical activities.
family around the home. Is it better to Over-reliance on digital interaction may
do some physical exercise or play with also contribute to a sedentary lifestyle,
your brothers or sisters, or sit in your increasing the risk of health problems
room tapping away on a computer such as obesity and low energy levels.
keypad? The answer is clear. If people Moreover, the dangers of online
neglect physical exercise, they just communication—such as
grow fat and lazy. There are other cyberbullying, data privacy
problems with social networking violations, and exposure to harmful
sites such as protecting your content—remain serious concerns
children from strangers, possible that require careful management.
invasion of privacy, bullying, and
identity theft. These problems
need to be managed.
Perhaps the first and most important In order to combat these issues, a
solution is that children and their combination of awareness, structure, and
parents need to be aware of how supervision is essential. Families can
much time is spent online on these begin by setting daily time limits for the
sites. If too much time is spent, use of social media, allowing young
families should agree on how much people to engage in other productive
time is to be spent each day on these activities. For instance, restricting
sites. If children were restricted to social media use to 30 minutes per
30 minutes a day maximum, there day could create space for study,
would be more time left for other physical activity, and offline
important activities such as interaction. It is also important for
homework and face-to-face parents to stay involved by monitoring
interaction with family. More their children’s online behavior. By
importantly, parents need to know maintaining a presence on these
what their children are doing on the platforms as connected users, guardians
sites. If parents were ‘friends’ of their can better understand the nature of their
children on these sites, they would be children's online interactions and guide
able to monitor who is online and what them accordingly. Most importantly,
is being said. The most important young users must develop a sense of
outcome is that young people personal responsibility regarding their
themselves need to learn responsible online habits in order to benefit from
use of these sites. these platforms without becoming
dependent on them.
In conclusion, the overuse of social
In conclusion, it is clear that problems networking sites can negatively affect
such as time wasted, distraction from academic performance, health, and
studies, and loss of time spent face to social development. To prevent these
face with family and friends mean that outcomes, families and educators
people have to be wise in their use of should promote responsible usage
social networking sites. In my view, if through time limits, guidance, and
reasonable time limits are set, open communication. Future research
proper monitoring takes place, and policy could also focus on how digital
and people learn to be literacy programs might further equip
responsible in their use of these users to navigate social media in a
applications, then the worst healthier and more productive way.
problems of social networking
sites can be avoided.
Criteria Essay Essay
1 2
Word count: 250–300
Stays on topic
Hook / background in introduction
Clear thesis (problems + solutions)
Uses at least 5 linking words
One topic sentence per paragraph
Uses explanation, example, or
evidence
Names problems and explains causes
Explains consequences
Solution explains how it solves the
problem
Mentions risks or limitations
Summarises without repeating
Has a call to action or forward
suggestion
5+ compound/complex sentences
Avoids phrasal verbs and idioms
Uses advanced vocabulary
Avoids abbreviations
Avoids personal pronouns
Correct grammar and spelling
Balanced sentence structure
