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Lexical Resources: 7.0X

Sự đa dạng từ vựng: Vốn từ đủ để sử dụng linh hoạt, không lặp từX

Chọn từ hợp văn cảnh, Collocation, Văn phong: Hiếm lỗi chọn từ, collocation và ngôn
ngữ thiếu trang trọngX

Từ vựng ít phổ biến/theo chủ đề: Từ vựng ít phổ biến không cản trở nghĩa câu, hiếm
khi sử dụng không tự nhiênX

Lỗi chính tả, lỗi dạng từ: Lỗi chính tả không bao giờ cản trở ý nghĩa, một số lỗiX

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.0X

Sự đa dạng cấu trúc: Một loạt các cấu trúc được sử dụng linh hoạt và chính xácX

Chính xác: Ít lỗi, KHÔNG BAO GIỜ ảnh hưởng ý nghĩaX

Task Response: 8.0X

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: TẤT CẢ các phần của câu hỏi đã dc trả lờiX

Lập trường/Câu trả lời rõ ràng: Has a position directly answering the questionX

Phát triển ý tưởng: Phát triển và chứng minh tốtX

Coherence & Cohesion: 7.0X

Mạch văn: Các ý tưởng được liên kết một cách hoàn hảoX

Chia đoạn: Chia đoạn hiệu quảX

Referencing: Sử dụng thành thạo, không có sai sótX

Sử dụng phép nối: Sử dụng phần lớn đã chính xác và linh hoạt, không máy mócX
Vocabulary Enhancement Suggestions
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of options we face today can make life more complicated, especially when we don’t have
clear goals or good [Link], I maintain the belief that the vast number of
options confronting us today can render life more intricate, particularly in the absence
of well-defined objectives or adequate guidance.

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concur that we are presently faced with an excessive number of choices in numerous
aspects of [Link] having options is generally a good thing, the extreme variety we face
today can sometimes create confusion, stress, and even [Link] possessing options
is generally considered beneficial, the extreme variety we encounter today can
occasionally engender confusion, stress, and even regret.I think we need to learn how
to manage our choices better and focus on what really matters instead of trying to consider
every possible option all the time.I posit that we must acquire the ability to manage our
choices more effectively and concentrate on matters of genuine significance, rather
than perpetually attempting to consider every conceivable option.
Sample Essay
Currently, a significant number of individuals express the belief that contemporary life
presents an excessive array of choices. I concur with this perspective to a considerable
degree, as the proliferation of options across nearly all facets of modern society has
reached a point where it may engender feelings of being overwhelmed rather than
providing assistance.

Shopping provides a salient illustration of this phenomenon. Historically, individuals had

limited options when acquiring food, clothing, or household goods. Consumers would
typically visit the local store and select from a limited range of available options.
However, particularly with the advent of online retail, consumers now encounter a
multitude of brands, styles, and varieties, even for the most basic commodities. For
instance, selecting an item as fundamental as a bottle of water or toothpaste can
consume a disproportionate amount of time due to the extensive array of types, flavors,
and prices requiring comparison. In my estimation, this can lead individuals to expend
excessive time and energy on trivial decisions that ought to be straightforward.

Education and career trajectories offer another pertinent example. Contemporary

students have the opportunity to select from a diverse range of subjects, courses, and
universities. On the one hand, this is advantageous as it enables individuals to discover
pursuits that genuinely align with their interests and aptitudes. However, the abundance
of options may lead some students to experience confusion or feel compelled to make
the “perfect” choice, and such pressure can induce stress. I recall when I was faced with
the decision of selecting my university major; I dedicated weeks to researching
information, reconsidering my options, and experiencing anxiety about the possibility of
making an error. Ultimately, I was content with my decision, but the process proved to be
exceedingly arduous.

Moreover, the concept of an excessive number of choices also influences our daily
routines. From selecting a midday meal to determining which film to view, we are
perpetually faced with a multitude of options. Although it may appear to be a minor
matter, making an excessive number of decisions in a single day can contribute to what
some psychologists term “decision fatigue,” wherein individuals experience mental
exhaustion and encounter difficulty in making sound choices subsequently. This is a
phenomenon I have personally encountered, particularly when required to plan
numerous activities within a limited timeframe.

Nevertheless, I acknowledge the opposing viewpoint. A greater array of choices implies

that individuals are not constrained and possess the capacity to live in accordance with
their preferences. In numerous respects, this signifies both freedom and advancement.
For instance, possessing the ability to select one's career, lifestyle, or beliefs is
considerably preferable to being compelled to adhere to a singular trajectory.
Nevertheless, I maintain the belief that the vast number of options confronting us today
can render life more intricate, particularly in the absence of well-defined objectives or
adequate guidance.

In conclusion, I concur that we are presently faced with an excessive number of choices
in numerous aspects of life. While possessing options is generally considered beneficial,
the extreme variety we encounter today can occasionally engender confusion, stress,
and even regret. I posit that we must acquire the ability to manage our choices more
effectively and concentrate on matters of genuine significance, rather than perpetually
attempting to consider every conceivable option.
New Vocabulary

Word Meaning and Example

plethora (Sự phong phú) An excessive amount or number of

something. Example: In today's market, there is a _______
of options available to consumers.

overwhelm (Quá tải) To be overpowered or inundated by something.

Example: Many people feel _______ by the sheer number
of choices they have to make.

indecision (Sự do dự) The inability to make a decision quickly.

Example: The _______ caused by too many choices can
lead to stress and anxiety.

consumerism (Chủ nghĩa tiêu dùng) The preoccupation with the

acquisition of consumer goods. Example: Modern _______
often emphasizes having more choices than ever before.

autonomy (Sự tự chủ) The ability to make one's own decisions.

Example: Some argue that having more choices enhances
personal _______.

paradox (Nghịch lý) A situation that seems contradictory or illogical.

Example: The _______ of choice suggests that more
options can lead to less satisfaction.

saturation (Sự bão hòa) A state in which no more of something can

be absorbed or accepted. Example: The market is nearing
_______ with too many similar products.

discernment (Sự phân biệt) The ability to judge well. Example: Effective
_______ is necessary to navigate the vast array of choices
available today.

convenience (Sự tiện lợi) The state of being able to proceed with
something with little effort or difficulty. Example: Many
people prefer _______ over a multitude of choices.
Word Meaning and Example

dissatisfaction (Sự không hài lòng) A feeling of unhappiness or

discontent. Example: Too many choices can lead to
_______ with the final decision made.
Grammar Suggestions
Nowadays, many people believe that we have too many choices in life. I personally agree
with this opinion to a large extent because, in modern society, the number of options
available in almost every area has increased so much that it can sometimes feel
overwhelming rather than [Link] overwhelming than helpful.

One area where this is very clear is in [Link] area where this is very clear is
shopping. In the past, people didn’tdid not have many choices when buying food, clothes,
or household items. They would just go to the local store and pickchoose from a few
available options. But now, especially with the rise of online shopping, we are faced with
hundreds of brands, styles, and types of even the simplest products. For example, choosing
something as basic as a bottle of water or toothpaste can take much longer than expected
because there are so many types, flavors, and prices to compare. In my opinion, this can
cause people to waste time and energy on small decisions that should be simple.

Another example is in education and career paths. Students today can choose from a wide
variety of subjects, courses, and universities. On one hand, this is a good thing because it
allows people to find something that reallytruly fits their interests and talents. However, with
so many choices, some students might feel confused or pressured to make the “perfect”
choice, and that pressure can be stressful. I remember when I had to choose my university
major — I spent weeks reading information, changing my mind, and worrying about making
a mistake.I remember when I had to choose my university major—I spent weeks
reading information, changing my mind, and worrying about making a mistake. In the
end, I was happy with my decision, but the process was very tiring.

Furthermore, the idea of having too many choices also affects our daily routines. From what
to eat for lunch to which movie to watch, we are constantly choosing between many options.
While it may seem like a small thing, making too many decisions in one day can lead to what
some psychologists call “decision fatigue,” where people feel mentally tired and struggle to
make good choices later on. This is something I have experienced myself, especially when I
have to plan many things in a short time.

That said, I do understand the other side of the argument. Having more choices means
people are not limited and can live the way they want. In many ways, this is a sign of
freedom and progress. For example, being able to choose your career, lifestyle, or beliefs is
much better than being forced to follow a single path. However, I still believe that the huge
number of options we face today can make life more complicated, especially when we
don’tdo not have clear goals or good guidance.

All in all, I agree that we now have too many choices in many areas of life. While having
options is generally a good thing, the extreme variety we face today can sometimes create
confusion, stress, and even regret. I think we need to learn how to manage our choices
better and focus on what really matters instead of trying to consider every possible option all
the time.
Argument Enhancement
Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do
you agree or disagree?

Introduction
Nowadays, many people believe that we have too many choices in life. I personally agree
with this opinion to a large extent because, in modern society, the number of options
available in almost every area has increased so much that it can sometimes feel
overwhelming rather than helpful.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: TẤT CẢ các phần của câu hỏi đã dc trả lời

Feedback The introduction clearly states the author's position on the topic,
agreeing that having too many choices can lead to overwhelm. It addresses the
core question by outlining the main argument, but it lacks specific examples or a
broader context that would strengthen its relevance. While it touches on the key
idea, it could better reflect the "extent" of the author's agreement by
acknowledging potential counterpoints or nuances.

How to improve

Expand the introduction by briefly mentioning areas where too many choices can be
overwhelming (e.g., shopping, career paths).

Clarify the extent of agreement by acknowledging both the benefits and drawbacks of
choice.

Add a sentence that outlines the structure of the essay to guide the reader.

Câu trả lời rõ ràng / Ý kiến rõ ràng: Lập trường rõ ràng

Feedback The introduction clearly presents the author's position on the topic,
explicitly stating agreement with the idea that there are too many choices. The
stance is direct and well-defined, making the essay's purpose clear from the start.

How to improve Strengthen the opening statement by using more definitive

language (e.g., "I strongly agree" instead of "I agree to a large extent"). Ensure the
rest of the introduction briefly outlines the main supporting points to guide the
reader.

Tóm tắt ngắn: Không có tổng quan về các luận điểm chính

Feedback The introduction introduces the topic and states the author's position
but does not provide a clear overview of the main points that will be discussed in
the essay. It lacks specific mention of the key areas (e.g., shopping, education,
daily life) that the essay explores in detail.

How to improve
Mention the three main areas (shopping, education/career, daily routines) briefly in the
introduction to outline the structure.

Clarify that the essay will examine how excessive choices affect decision-making and well-
being in these areas.

Ensure the overview reflects the balance between acknowledging freedom and highlighting
the negative impacts of choice overload.

Introduction - Rewrite

Nowadays, many people believe that we have too many choices in life, and I
strongly agree with this view. While having a wide range of options can be seen as
a sign of freedom and progress, the sheer volume of choices in areas such as
shopping, education, and daily decisions often leads to confusion, stress, and
decision fatigue. This essay will explore how excessive choices can overwhelm
individuals, examine the impact on decision-making, and discuss the balance
between freedom and complexity in modern life.

Main Point 1
One area where this is very clear is in shopping. In the past, people didn't have many
choices when buying food, clothes, or household items. They would just go to the local store
and pick from a few available options. But now, especially with the rise of online shopping,
we are faced with hundreds of brands, styles, and types of even the simplest products.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Phát triển và chứng minh tốt

Feedback The segment presents a clear and logically structured argument, with
well-defined links between the idea of increased shopping options and the
resulting challenges. The reasoning is explicit, and the examples provided (e.g.,
online shopping and product variety) effectively support the point about decision-
making difficulties. The analysis is sufficiently developed for IELTS Task 2, though
it could benefit from more detailed exploration of the consequences of choice
overload.

How to improve

Strengthen the link between the abundance of choices and the specific problems it causes
(e.g., decision fatigue, stress) by adding a general knowledge-based example, such as how
too many smartphone models or app options can lead to confusion.

Expand on the impact of choice overload by briefly discussing how it affects consumer
satisfaction or time management in daily life.

Use more precise transition words (e.g., "as a result," "consequently") to improve the flow
between ideas.

Overgeneralize: Không khái quát hóa quá mức

Feedback The main point generalizes that "there are hundreds of brands, styles,
and types of even the simplest products" in online shopping, which may
overgeneralize the extent of choice available. This risks weakening the argument
by implying all products face such overwhelming options, when in reality, some
 items may still have limited or standardized choices. The claim lacks specific
examples or data to support the scale of diversity described, making it appear
exaggerated.

How to improve

Replace "hundreds of brands, styles, and types" with a more measured phrase like "a wide
variety of options" or "numerous choices."

Add a qualifier such as "for many products" to acknowledge that not all items face the same
level of choice overload.

Support the claim with a specific example, such as "such as toothpaste or water," to ground
the generalization in reality.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively addresses the essay prompt by focusing on
shopping as a clear example of how too many choices can lead to decision fatigue
and inefficiency. The contrast between past and present shopping experiences
highlights the increase in options, and the specific example of basic items like
water or toothpaste illustrates the problem. The argument is relevant, focused, and
directly supports the thesis about the negative effects of excessive choice.

How to improve

Strengthen the connection between the shopping example and the broader thesis by
explicitly stating how this example reflects the overall issue of "too many choices."

Add a sentence that links the shopping dilemma to other areas (e.g., career, education) to
show the universality of the problem.

Ensure that each paragraph clearly ties back to the main argument to maintain focus and
coherence.

Main Point - Rewrite

One area where this is very clear is in shopping. In the past, people had limited
choices when buying food, clothes, or household items, often selecting from just a
few options at a local store. However, with the rise of online shopping, consumers
are now presented with a wide variety of options, even for simple products, making
even basic decisions more time-consuming and complex.

Main Point 2
For example, choosing something as basic as a bottle of water or toothpaste can take much
longer than expected because there are so many types, flavors, and prices to compare. In
my opinion, this can cause people to waste time and energy on small decisions that should
be simple.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Phát triển và chứng minh tốt

Feedback The segment presents a clear and logical argument about how an
overabundance of choices leads to wasted time and energy on simple decisions.
 The reasoning is well-structured, with a direct connection between the availability
of options and the time spent on decision-making. The example of choosing
between multiple types of water or toothpaste effectively illustrates the point.
However, the depth of analysis could be strengthened by elaborating on how this
impacts overall productivity or mental fatigue, rather than just stating the
consequence.

How to improve

Expand on the long-term effects of making too many small decisions, such as how it can
lead to decision fatigue or reduce efficiency in other areas of life.

Use a more specific example, such as how choosing between multiple brands of coffee or
snacks can accumulate over time and affect daily productivity.

Strengthen the link between time spent on small decisions and the broader concept of
wasted energy by explaining how this can influence other aspects of life.

Overgeneralize: Không khái quát hóa quá mức

Feedback The main point contains a generalization by implying that "too many
choices always lead to wasted time and energy," which oversimplifies the
complexity of decision-making. While the example of choosing basic items is
specific, the claim lacks nuance and does not account for individual differences or
contexts where more choices can be beneficial.

How to improve

Replace "always" with "can sometimes" or "may" to introduce flexibility.

Add a qualifier like "in some cases" to acknowledge that not all choices lead to inefficiency.

Reference the balance between choice and decision-making by mentioning that while too
many options can be overwhelming, they can also offer greater personalization.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point clearly addresses the essay prompt by highlighting how
an overabundance of choices leads to decision fatigue and wasted time on simple
tasks. The example of selecting everyday items like water or toothpaste effectively
illustrates this, and the opinion that such decisions are unnecessarily time-
consuming directly supports the argument about the negative impact of excessive
options.

How to improve

Strengthen the connection between the example and the broader argument by briefly
explaining how decision fatigue affects overall productivity or satisfaction.

Use more precise vocabulary to emphasize the negative consequences of too many
choices, such as "paralysis by analysis" or "cognitive overload."

Ensure each supporting detail explicitly ties back to the thesis about the downsides of
excessive options.
 Main Point - Rewrite

For example, choosing something as basic as a bottle of water or toothpaste can

take much longer than expected because there are so many types, flavors, and
prices to compare, and in some cases, this can lead to wasted time and energy on
decisions that should be simple and straightforward.

Main Point 3
Another example is in education and career paths. Students today can choose from a wide
variety of subjects, courses, and universities. On one hand, this is a good thing because it
allows people to find something that really fits their interests and talents.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Được phát triển và chứng minh

Feedback The segment presents a clear and logical argument about the
challenges of having too many choices in education and career paths. The
reasoning is generally coherent, with examples that support the claim that more
options can lead to confusion or pressure. However, the connection between the
availability of choices and the resulting stress is somewhat implicit, and the
analysis could be deeper by exploring the broader implications of choice overload.
The use of a personal example adds relevance but lacks broader contextual
explanation.

How to improve

Strengthen the link between the availability of choices and the resulting pressure by
explaining how more options can increase decision-making difficulty (e.g., "more choices
can lead to anxiety as individuals feel the need to make the 'perfect' decision").

Provide a general example that illustrates the negative impact of choice overload, such as
how students may struggle to commit to a path due to fear of missing out on better
opportunities.

Clarify the relationship between personal experience and the broader issue to improve
logical flow and depth of analysis.

Overgeneralize: Chứa các chi tiết quá khái quát

Feedback The main point generalizes that having a wide variety of education and
career options allows people to find something that "really fits their interests and
talents," which is an overgeneralization. This statement assumes that all
individuals benefit equally from choice, without acknowledging that some may feel
overwhelmed or lack the resources to make informed decisions. Such broad
claims weaken the argument by ignoring individual differences and contextual
factors.

How to improve

Replace "allows people to find something that really fits their interests and talents" with "can
help some individuals align their choices with their interests and talents, provided they have
access to guidance and support."
Add a qualifier like "for those who have the opportunity to explore" to acknowledge that not
all students experience the same benefits from choice.

Introduce a contrast, such as "while others may feel overwhelmed by the pressure to
choose," to balance the claim and make it more nuanced.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively highlights the issue of excessive choices in
education and career paths, directly addressing the essay prompt. It provides a
clear example of how students face a wide array of options, which supports the
argument that too many choices can be overwhelming. However, the inclusion of a
positive aspect ("on one hand, this is a good thing") slightly weakens the focus on
the negative consequences of choice overload, which is central to the essay’s
thesis.

How to improve

Focus on the negative impact of excessive choices by emphasizing how the abundance of
options can lead to decision fatigue or confusion.

Clearly link the example of education and career paths to the broader argument about
choice overload.

Avoid introducing counterpoints that may dilute the main argument unless they are used to
strengthen the overall position.

Main Point - Rewrite

Another example is in education and career paths. Students today face an

overwhelming number of options when choosing subjects, courses, and
universities, which can lead to confusion and stress, even though it also offers the
potential for personalization and alignment with individual interests and talents.

Main Point 4
However, with so many choices, some students might feel confused or pressured to make
the "perfect" choice, and that pressure can be stressful. I remember when I had to choose
my university major — I spent weeks reading information, changing my mind, and worrying
about making a mistake. In the end, I was happy with my decision, but the process was very
tiring.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Phát triển và chứng minh tốt

Feedback The segment presents a clear and logical connection between the
abundance of choices and the resulting pressure on students, supported by a
personal example. The reasoning is straightforward and based on general
knowledge, showing how decision-making under pressure can be tiring. However,
the analysis lacks depth, as it does not explore the broader implications of choice
overload or provide additional examples to strengthen the argument.

How to improve
Expand on the concept of "choice overload" by linking it to common psychological
understanding (e.g., "more options often lead to decision fatigue").

Add a general example, such as how students might struggle to choose between multiple
career paths, to illustrate the broader impact.

Clarify the link between pressure and tiredness by explaining how prolonged decision-
making can drain mental energy.

Ensure each idea flows smoothly by using transition words like "as a result" or "this leads to"
to strengthen logical connections.

Overgeneralize: Không khái quát hóa quá mức

Feedback The main point contains a generalization by implying that "some

students" universally face stress due to too many choices, which could be seen as
an overgeneralization. While "some" is a qualifier, the statement still presents a
broad claim about student experiences without sufficient contextual nuance or
evidence to support the scope of the assertion.

How to improve

Replace "some students might feel confused or pressured" with "many students, especially
those facing high-stakes decisions, may experience stress" to add specificity and context.

Include a brief example or reference to research to support the claim, such as "studies show
that students in competitive environments often feel overwhelmed by choice."

Use more precise language, such as "students in certain academic or cultural settings" to
limit the scope of the generalization.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively addresses the essay prompt by highlighting
how an overload of choices, particularly in university major selection, can lead to
stress and confusion for students. The personal anecdote adds a relatable and
specific example that supports the argument about the negative consequences of
excessive options. However, the focus is narrow, and the broader implications of
too many choices in other areas of life are not explored, which could weaken the
overall argument's scope.

How to improve

Expand the discussion to include other contexts where too many choices create problems
(e.g., career paths, consumer decisions, or life choices).

Clearly link the personal experience to the broader thesis about the negative effects of
excessive options.

Use a topic sentence that explicitly connects the example to the main argument.

Main Point - Rewrite

However, with so many choices, many students, especially those facing high-
stakes decisions, may experience stress and confusion as they strive to make the
 "perfect" choice, as I experienced when selecting my university major—spending
weeks researching, changing my mind, and worrying about mistakes, which
ultimately left me mentally exhausted despite a satisfactory outcome.

Main Point 5
Furthermore, the idea of having too many choices also affects our daily routines. From what
to eat for lunch to which movie to watch, we are constantly choosing between many options.
While it may seem like a small thing, making too many decisions in one day can lead to what
some psychologists call "decision fatigue", where people feel mentally tired and struggle to
make good choices later on. This is something I have experienced myself, especially when I
have to plan many things in a short time.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Được phát triển và chứng minh

Feedback The paragraph presents a clear main idea about how too many choices
can negatively affect daily routines, supported by examples such as choosing
lunch or a movie. However, the logical connections between the points are
somewhat implicit, and the explanation of "decision fatigue" lacks depth. The
personal experience provided adds relevance but is not fully tied to the broader
argument. Overall, the reasoning is extended but could be more explicit in linking
cause and effect, and in explaining how decision fatigue impacts daily life.

How to improve

Clarify the link between "too many choices" and "constant decisions" by explaining why more
options lead to more decision-making.

Expand on the concept of "decision fatigue" by briefly explaining how it affects mental
energy and decision quality.

Connect the personal experience more directly to the main argument, showing how it
illustrates the broader impact of decision fatigue on daily life.

Use a general knowledge-based example (e.g., shopping for groceries or planning a week)
to further illustrate how too many choices can lead to mental exhaustion.

Overgeneralize: Chứa các chi tiết quá khái quát

Feedback The main point generalizes that "too many choices" in daily life lead to
decision fatigue, which oversimplifies the relationship between choice and
cognitive load. While the idea has merit, it lacks nuance by implying this effect is
universal, ignoring individual differences and contextual factors that may influence
how people handle choices.

How to improve

Replace "too many choices" with "an excessive number of choices in certain situations" to
acknowledge variability.

Add a qualifier like "some individuals" or "in certain contexts" to reflect that decision fatigue
may not apply universally.
Reference specific examples or studies (e.g., "research suggests that individuals with high
cognitive load may experience decision fatigue") to support the claim more precisely.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively addresses the essay prompt by clearly
arguing that having too many choices can negatively impact daily life, supported
by relevant examples like choosing lunch or movies, and the concept of decision
fatigue. It directly connects to the thesis by highlighting the burden of excessive
options and how they disrupt routine and decision-making.

How to improve

Strengthen the connection between examples and the broader argument by explicitly stating
how each example illustrates the negative effects of too many choices.

Clarify the role of decision fatigue in the argument to reinforce the main point.

Ensure each example directly supports the thesis and avoids vague or general statements.

Main Point - Rewrite

Furthermore, the idea of having too many choices also affects our daily routines,
as individuals are constantly faced with a wide range of options, from what to eat
for lunch to which movie to watch. While this may seem trivial, the cumulative
effect of making numerous decisions throughout the day can lead to what some
psychologists call "decision fatigue," a state where people feel mentally exhausted
and struggle to make thoughtful choices later on. This phenomenon is particularly
evident in situations where individuals have to plan multiple tasks in a short period,
as I have experienced myself, highlighting how an excessive number of options
can disrupt efficiency and cause mental strain.

Main Point 6
That said, I do understand the other side of the argument. Having more choices means
people are not limited and can live the way they want. In many ways, this is a sign of
freedom and progress. For example, being able to choose your career, lifestyle, or beliefs is
much better than being forced to follow a single path.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Phát triển chưa đầy đủ, chứa chi tiết không rõ ràng

Feedback The segment acknowledges the value of having more choices in terms
of freedom and progress, but the logical connections between the ideas are not
fully developed. The reasoning is somewhat clear, but the link between "more
choices" and "freedom and progress" is not explicitly explained. The examples
provided (career, lifestyle, beliefs) are relevant but lack deeper analysis or
explanation of how they demonstrate freedom or societal advancement. The
argument is superficial and relies on assumptions rather than thorough reasoning.

How to improve

Clarify how having more choices directly leads to freedom and progress by explaining the
relationship.
Expand on the examples by discussing how they reflect individual autonomy or societal
development.

Use more explicit logical connectors (e.g., "This implies that…", "By contrast, if people had
fewer options…") to strengthen the flow between ideas.

Add a brief explanation of why freedom and choice are considered indicators of progress in
a broader social or historical context.

Overgeneralize: Không khái quát hóa quá mức

Feedback The main point presents a general claim about "more choices" leading
to freedom and autonomy, which risks overgeneralization by implying this is
universally true without acknowledging exceptions or complexities. While the
examples (career, lifestyle, beliefs) provide some specificity, the statement still
oversimplifies the relationship between choice and personal fulfillment, potentially
weakening the argument’s nuance.

How to improve

Replace "more choices means people are not limited" with "more choices can offer greater
flexibility and autonomy, though this depends on individual circumstances."

Use qualifiers like "in many cases" or "for some individuals" to reflect that the benefits of
choice are not absolute.

Add a brief acknowledgment of potential downsides (e.g., "while excessive options can
sometimes lead to decision fatigue") to balance the claim.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively presents a balanced perspective by

acknowledging the counter-argument that more choices reflect freedom and
progress. It directly addresses the essay prompt by highlighting how choices allow
individuals to shape their lives, which is relevant to the discussion on the impact of
having too many options. The examples provided (career, lifestyle, beliefs)
strengthen the argument by illustrating the benefits of choice.

How to improve

Clarify the connection between the counter-argument and the essay’s thesis to ensure it
aligns with your overall stance.

Add a transition to smoothly introduce the counter-argument and explain how it

complements or contrasts with your main position.

Use more specific evidence or data to reinforce the claim that more choices lead to freedom
and progress.

Main Point - Rewrite

That said, I do understand the other side of the argument. While having more
choices can offer greater flexibility and autonomy, it is important to recognize that
this is not always beneficial, as excessive options can sometimes lead to
confusion and decision fatigue. In many ways, this reflects a form of freedom and
 progress, as individuals are no longer confined to a single path. For example,
being able to choose one's career, lifestyle, or beliefs allows for greater personal
expression and adaptability, which is often seen as a positive development in
modern society.

Main Point 7
However, I still believe that the huge number of options we face today can make life more
complicated, especially when we don't have clear goals or good guidance.

Logic & Chiều sâu: Phát triển và chứng minh tốt

Feedback The segment presents a clear and logically structured argument about
how an overabundance of choices can complicate life, especially without clear
goals or guidance. The reasoning is well-supported with relevant examples from
daily life, such as shopping and education, which illustrate the negative impact of
decision fatigue and time consumption. The connection between the number of
options and the resulting stress is logically explained, and the condition of lacking
goals or guidance is effectively linked to the problem. However, the analysis could
benefit from more detailed explanations of how specific examples directly relate to
the main point, and the conclusion could be more tightly tied to the overall
argument.

How to improve

Strengthen the link between examples and the main point by explicitly stating how each
example demonstrates the negative impact of too many choices.

Add a brief explanation of how clear goals or guidance can mitigate the stress of decision-
making, using a general knowledge-based example (e.g., setting priorities before shopping).

Ensure the conclusion directly reinforces the main argument by summarizing the key points
and reiterating the importance of having clear direction when faced with choices.

Overgeneralize: Không khái quát hóa quá mức

Feedback The main point contains a nuanced claim about how the number of
choices can complicate life, especially in the absence of clear goals or guidance.
While it acknowledges conditions that may lead to this outcome, the phrasing "can
make life more complicated" is slightly broad and could be more precise. The
argument is not overly generalized, but it could benefit from more specific
examples or clearer boundaries to strengthen its focus.

How to improve

Replace "can make life more complicated" with "can lead to increased stress and confusion"
to add specificity.

Clarify the conditions under which too many choices become problematic, such as "when
individuals lack decision-making skills or external support."

Introduce a qualifying phrase like "in many cases" or "for those without clear direction" to
soften the generalization.
 Chặt chẽ với đề bài: Good

Feedback The main point effectively addresses the essay prompt by clearly
stating that an excessive number of choices can complicate life, especially in the
absence of clear goals or guidance. It directly responds to the question and
supports the argument by highlighting a specific negative consequence of choice
overload, making the stance clear and relevant.

How to improve

Clarify the connection between the main point and the broader thesis to ensure it directly
reinforces the essay’s central argument.

Provide a specific example or explanation of how lacking goals or guidance leads to

complications, to strengthen the relevance and depth of the point.

Avoid vague language like “huge number of options” and replace it with a more precise term,
such as “excessive choices” or “overwhelming options,” to enhance clarity and focus.

Main Point - Rewrite

However, I still believe that the overwhelming number of choices we face today
can lead to increased stress and confusion, particularly for individuals who lack
clear goals or effective decision-making strategies.

Conclusion
All in all, I agree that we now have too many choices in many areas of life. While having
options is generally a good thing, the extreme variety we face today can sometimes create
confusion, stress, and even regret. I think we need to learn how to manage our choices
better and focus on what really matters instead of trying to consider every possible option all
the time.

Chặt chẽ với đề bài: TẤT CẢ các phần của câu hỏi đã dc trả lời

Feedback The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay's main points by

restating the thesis that having too many choices can lead to negative
consequences, such as confusion and stress. It directly addresses the essay
prompt by evaluating the extent to which the statement is valid, reinforcing the
argument with key examples from the body. However, it could better emphasize
the balance between the benefits and drawbacks of choice, as discussed in the
essay.

How to improve

Expand the conclusion to briefly acknowledge the counterargument about freedom of choice,
while reaffirming your position.

Use a stronger closing statement that highlights the broader implications of managing
choices effectively.

Ensure the restated thesis clearly reflects the nuanced stance taken in the essay, rather than
a simple agreement or disagreement.
 Câu trả lời rõ ràng / Ý kiến rõ ràng: Lập trường rõ ràng

Feedback The conclusion clearly restates the essay’s position by explicitly stating
agreement with the idea that there are too many choices, while also
acknowledging the benefits of variety. However, the connection between the
restated opinion and the main argument is somewhat indirect, leaving some
ambiguity about the central stance.

How to improve

Begin the conclusion with a strong, direct statement of your position (e.g., "In conclusion, I
firmly believe that the number of choices available today is excessive").

Summarize the key supporting points briefly to reinforce your argument.

Ensure the final sentence emphasizes your position and provides a sense of closure.

Conclusion - Rewrite

In conclusion, I believe that while having many choices reflects freedom and
progress, the sheer volume of options available today often leads to confusion,
stress, and decision fatigue. Although more choices allow people to tailor their
lives according to their preferences, the overwhelming number of options can
make it difficult to make thoughtful decisions. Therefore, it is essential to develop
better strategies for managing choices and focusing on what truly matters.
Ultimately, I agree that we now face too many choices in many aspects of life, and
learning to navigate them wisely is crucial for a more balanced and fulfilling life.
Feedback
Lexical Resources - 7.0
Sự đa dạng từ vựng: Vốn từ đủ để sử dụng linh hoạt, không lặp từ

Feedback The essay demonstrates a sufficient range of vocabulary, with appropriate

use of topic-specific terms and effective paraphrasing. However, some repetition of key
words and limited use of advanced vocabulary slightly restrict the flexibility and precision
of expression.

How to improve

Use more varied synonyms for common words like "choices" and "options" (e.g.,
"selections," "alternatives").

Incorporate less common academic terms where appropriate to enhance lexical range.

Avoid repeating the same noun phrases; use pronouns or paraphrased expressions to vary
sentence structure.

Chọn từ hợp văn cảnh, Collocation, Văn phong: Hiếm lỗi chọn từ, collocation và
ngôn ngữ thiếu trang trọng

Feedback The essay demonstrates generally appropriate word choice and collocation,
with only occasional informal or imprecise expressions. Some phrases could be more
formal or precise, and a few collocations may feel slightly awkward or redundant. The
overall style is clear but lacks consistency in tone, with some sentences leaning toward
informal or conversational language.

How to improve

Replace informal phrases like "Nowadays" with "Currently" or "In the present day" for a more
academic tone.

Avoid redundancy, such as "I personally agree" – simplify to "I agree" or "I concur."

Use more precise vocabulary where possible, e.g., "many people believe" → "a significant
number of individuals believe."

Maintain consistent formality throughout the essay.

Từ vựng ít phổ biến/theo chủ đề: Từ vựng ít phổ biến không cản trở nghĩa câu,
hiếm khi sử dụng không tự nhiên

Feedback The essay uses a few uncommon and topic-specific words like "decision
fatigue," which shows an attempt to use precise vocabulary. However, the range of
uncommon vocabulary is limited, and most words are standard. Some phrases are used
naturally, but others may feel slightly forced or overcomplicated.

How to improve
Expand vocabulary by using more varied synonyms (e.g., "options" instead of repeated
"choices").

Ensure uncommon words are used naturally and only when they enhance clarity.

Avoid overusing complex terms that may confuse the reader.

Lỗi chính tả, lỗi dạng từ: Lỗi chính tả không bao giờ cản trở ý nghĩa, một số lỗi

Feedback The essay contains a few minor word form errors, such as "On one hand"
instead of "On the one hand." These errors do not impede meaning but affect
grammatical accuracy.

How to improve Use "On the one hand" instead of "On one hand." Ensure proper article
usage in phrases like "on the one hand" and "on the other hand."

Grammatical Range & Accuracy - 7.0

Sự đa dạng cấu trúc: Một loạt các cấu trúc được sử dụng linh hoạt và chính xác

Feedback The essay demonstrates a wide range of grammatical structures, including

complex sentences with relative clauses, subordinate clauses, gerunds, and modal
verbs. These structures are used flexibly and accurately, showing a good command of
sentence variation and complexity.

How to improve

Incorporate more varied sentence openers (e.g., "Furthermore," "In contrast") to enhance
flexibility.

Practice using non-finite verbs (e.g., infinitives, participles) in different contexts.

Review the use of inversion and cleft sentences for added variety.

Chính xác: Ít lỗi, KHÔNG BAO GIỜ ảnh hưởng ý nghĩa

Feedback The essay contains a few minor grammar and punctuation errors, mostly
related to word choice, redundancy, contractions, and punctuation. These errors do not
impede overall meaning but may affect clarity in some instances.

How to improve

Avoid using contractions like "didn’t" and "don’t" in formal writing.

Replace vague words like "pick" with more precise terms like "choose."

Check for redundancy, such as "is in shopping," and simplify to "is shopping."

Use proper punctuation, such as spacing around em dashes.

Task Response - 8.0
Chặt chẽ với đề bài: TẤT CẢ các phần của câu hỏi đã dc trả lời

Feedback The essay directly addresses the prompt by clearly stating agreement with
the idea that we have too many choices. It provides relevant examples from daily life,
education, and consumer behavior to support this view, and it acknowledges the
counterargument while maintaining focus on the main topic. The conclusion restates the
position and highlights the negative effects of excessive choices, ensuring full relevance
to the question.

How to improve

Expand on the specific negative consequences of too many choices for better depth.

Clarify the balance between freedom and choice in the counterargument to strengthen
relevance.

Ensure each paragraph explicitly connects back to the main question to maintain focus.

Lập trường/Câu trả lời rõ ràng: Has a position directly answering the question

Feedback The essay clearly states the writer’s position in both the introduction and
conclusion, making the stance explicit and consistent throughout. The argument is well-
supported with examples, and the writer maintains a focused perspective on agreeing
with the idea that too many choices can be overwhelming.

How to improve

Ensure each body paragraph directly reinforces the main position, avoiding tangents.

Use transition words to link ideas and maintain focus on the central argument.

Revisit the conclusion to explicitly tie back to the introduction’s claim, reinforcing the writer’s
stance.

Phát triển ý tưởng: Phát triển và chứng minh tốt

Feedback The essay’s main idea is well-extended and supported with relevant
examples from shopping, education, daily life, and a counterargument. The reasoning is
clear, and the examples are specific and logically connected to the central claim. The
writer effectively explains how too many choices lead to stress and indecision, while also
acknowledging opposing views.

How to improve

Strengthen the conclusion by summarizing key points and reinforcing the thesis.

Add more varied evidence, such as statistics or expert opinions, to enhance credibility.

Clarify the transition between paragraphs to ensure smoother flow of ideas.

Coherence & Cohesion - 7.0
Mạch văn: Các ý tưởng được liên kết một cách hoàn hảo

Feedback The essay has a clear and logical flow, with well-connected ideas and
effective transitions that guide the reader through the argument. Each paragraph builds
on the previous one, and examples are well-integrated to support the main points. The
structure follows a logical progression from introduction to examples, counterargument,
and conclusion.

How to improve

Use more varied linking words to vary sentence structure.

Ensure each example clearly ties back to the main argument.

Avoid repeating phrases like "In my opinion" and "For example" in quick succession.

Chia đoạn: Chia đoạn hiệu quả

Feedback The essay demonstrates effective paragraphing with clear, focused

paragraphs that each serve a distinct purpose. Each body paragraph introduces a
specific idea with a topic sentence, supporting details, and examples. Transitions
between paragraphs are logical and help maintain coherence. The introduction and
conclusion are well-structured, aligning with the argument.

How to improve

Ensure each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence to reinforce its purpose.

Avoid combining multiple ideas in one paragraph; keep each focused on a single point.

Use more varied linking words to enhance the flow between ideas.

Referencing: Sử dụng thành thạo, không có sai sót

Feedback The essay uses references effectively to maintain coherence and avoid
repetition. Pronouns, demonstratives, and relative clauses are appropriately applied, with
clear antecedents. However, some instances of "this," "that," and "it" could be more
specific to enhance clarity.

How to improve Replace vague references like "this" or "that" with more specific nouns
when necessary. Ensure that all pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents. Use
paraphrasing or restating for complex ideas to improve clarity and avoid over-reliance on
pronouns.

Sử dụng phép nối: Sử dụng phần lớn đã chính xác và linh hoạt, không máy móc

Feedback The essay uses a range of cohesive devices, including conjunctions, adverbs,
and references, to link ideas effectively. However, some devices are used repetitively,
and a few transitions could be more precise for better flow.

How to improve
Vary transitional phrases (e.g., replace "however" with "nevertheless" or "conversely").

Use more specific adverbs to clarify relationships between ideas.

Ensure references (e.g., "this," "that") clearly point to the correct antecedent.