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Ermando Pati Raja Sipayung

Yudhistira Arif
Muhammad Rafi Nashih
 Positive and Negative Effects of Electronic
Devices on People's Lives

Electronic devices are used all throughout the world; it’s hard to find someone who
doesn’t own one or several. Nowadays it seems like we can’t take our eyes off them. We are
constantly getting notifications, texts, playing games, watching YouTube videos, or checking
social media to see if someone liked the picture we just posted. We’re all guilty of it. These
devices can be both a curse and a blessing at the same time. They are distracting, yet they have
also proved to be extremely helpful in gaining insightful information. Although, there comes a
point when we have to step away from it all. We can’t be living our lives behind a screen.
Some might say that the benefits of having any electronic devices far exceed the perceived
risks; however, I believe that to be false when it comes to texting and driving .
 There are different types of distractions while on the road, the three major ones being visual,
manual, and cognitive. The first one is the most common amongst drivers, people can easily get visually
distracted when driving. This could be because they need to adjust their mirrors, seats, change the radio
station, or they’re looking outside because of something that’s happening on the side of the road. Manual
distractions are when the drivers take their hands off the wheel. Examples of this would be when we’re
eating food, taking care of our appearance, or returning calls and texts. Lastly, cognitive distractions are
when your mind isn’t focused on driving. This might be from emotional stress, personal problems, or
when we’re talking with someone else in the car. This isn’t as dangerous, because the passengers we’re
riding with can also see what’s going on and warn the driver if needed. It has been found that texting
while driving has the highest potential for distraction as it involves all three of these. In an article
published by The Science Teacher Magazine journalist Michael Bratsis explains that “sending or reading
a text takes a driver’s eyes off the road for an average of 4.6 seconds. At 55 mph, that’s like driving the
length of a football field blindfolded.”
The government has recognized this has become problematic and is doing what they can to fix it.
They want to make it better, but they’re having trouble enforcing laws against people that text while on
the road. They have no way of knowing if someone was distracted because of their phones or something
else entirely. According to the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, “texting while driving is
banned in 46 states and the District of Columbia. Two additional states ban texting while driving only for
new drivers.” Depending on which state they’re in, if people are caught texting while on the road they
have to pay charges ranging from 20 to 750 dollars and even spend time in jail. Obviously none of us
want to go through any of this, though we all need to be more aware of the consequences of our actions.
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Paragraph 1 Electronic device are used allthroughout the world.

Paragraph 2 They want to make it better, but they’re having trouble enforcing laws againstpeople that text while on
the road

Paragraph 2 They have no way of knowing if someone was distracted because of their phones or something else
entirely
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Paragraph 1 sentence 5 "These" refers to electronic devices.

Paragraph 1 sentence 7 "Although" refers to opposition about electronic devices

Paragraph 1 last sentence "However" refers to effect electronic device

Paragraph 3 According to the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention, “texting while driving is banned in 46
states and the District of Columbia. Two additional states ban texting while driving only for new drivers.”

Paragraph 3 Depending on which state they’re in, if people are caught texting while on the road they have to pay
charges ranging from 20 to 750 dollars and even spend time in jail

Paragraph 3 Obviously none of us want to go through any of this, though we all need to be more aware of the
consequences of our actions.