Original

Original Writing
Writing Coursework
Coursework
Last one!!
 Skills
• You will have to focus on your
sentence structure
• Varied punctuation to create specific
effects
• The structure of the narrative
• Varied vocabulary to create specific
effects.
 Sentence Structure

Little Skillful
variety in control in the
sentence construction
structures of varied
sentence
forms
 -ly, -ing, -ed
• I walked through the dark alley and suddenly
a hand reached out and grabbed my shoulder.
• Suddenly a hand reached out and grabbed my
shoulder as I walked down the dark alley.
• I was breathing deeply as I crept through the
deep, dark wood.
• Breathing deeply, I crept through the deep,
dark wood.
• I was trapped and could not see a way out.
• Trapped! I could see no way out.
 Vary your sentence starters
• He walked to the door. He opened it
and looked inside. He saw a large…..
How could you make this
passage more interesting
by changing the sentence
starters?? Once done-
finish of the paragraph
with two or three more
sentences.
 Sentence lengths
• Simple, Compound, Complex
• Short and long
• A short sentence can be 1 word long!
Using all 5 sentence variations: write
one paragraph about this picture
 Use of Language

Limited Extensive
vocabulary vocabulary
 Don’t even bother using!
• Walked/walk-
• Said-
• Nice/good-
• Bad-

• Never start sentences with so/and/then-

in fact- try not to use them mid sentence
if you can!
 Try
• He was unhappy.
• Carefully, he wiped away a glistening tear as he
watched her turn away and move purposely towards
the door.

• He was nice
• She was a kind person
• He was happy
• The wind blew hard
• She sat in a tree waiting for her friend
• He walked to school
• The dog barked
• It was sunny
• He was angry
Describe each of these images using powerful
adjectives and the techniques we have learned
today
 Techniques

SENSES CHOICE OF WORDS DEVICES

Sight Adjectives Metaphor
Sound Onomatopoeia
Adverbs Juxtaposition
ONOMATOPOEIA
Smell Alliteration
Vivid verbs Simile
Touch Assonance
Powerful Pathetic fallacy
Alliteration
Taste sibilance
synonyms Personification
 Poetic Techniques
• Simile- When you compare one thing to something else using
the words ‘as’ or ‘like’.
• Alliteration- When the first letter of the words are the
same.
• Personification- When make something which isn’t human
sound human.
• Onomatopoeia- A word which sounds like the noise it makes.
• Sibilance- Words characterized by, or producing a hissing
sound like that of (s) or (sh)
• Assonance- Resemblance of sound, especially of the vowel
sounds in words
• Metaphor- A comparison between essentially unlike things
without an explicitly comparative word such as like or as.
Come up with one simile, one metaphor
and one personification for each image
 Paragraphs

Broadly Skillfully
appropriate sustained
paragraphing paragraphing
 Senses and tense
• Describe - as appropriate to the scene -
what you saw, heard, tasted, smelt and
felt - that is, use 'sensory description';
• notice 'saw', 'heard': be safe and stick
to writing about a past time!
Unless you are a very sure writer - avoid writing
about 'now' - choose to write about 'then'
 Could you do it?
• 1) Pathetic fallacy is when you use
the weather to reflect what is
happening in the scene.
• 2) Juxtaposition is two random
objects/ideas/perspectives moving
in parallel, a technique intended to
stimulate creativity
• 3) Satire is to hold up human vices
and follies to ridicule or scorn. Also
can be to use wit, irony, or sarcasm
used to expose and discredit vice.
 Pathetic fallacy
• Pathetic Fallacy is very similar to personification.
However, it can also be used when the weather
reflects what is going on in the scene. Eg.
• If the weather is hot, sunny and there are
people everywhere- it usually represents a
‘happy’ story.
• If the weather is dark, cold and stormy- you can
usually guess that something bad is going to
happen.
 Objective: Can I write in different styles?
What are the effects of different writing
styles?

• Shattered! Can barely move myself anymore. The

slow process of age, chasing me my whole life, is
finally to have it’s day of victory.
• All around, ever silent, ever invisible, ever lasting.
The source of all life yet never appreciated as
the world moves by as always. Yet when I am
present, they can see, they can feel and they
cannot run.
• Yeah! This lot are well boring- seriously! Don’t
care less bout this rubbish- I wanna run!
 Example
• The window smashed, sending glass flying in all
directions. Flames burst into the room. I ducked,
keeping my body as low as I could, trying desperately to
avoid the smoke that was advancing rapidly across the
ceiling. I scanned the room for other exits and was
relieved to see a small window on the far wall. The smoke
was getting thicker and started slowly descending to the
floor. My mind shouted, ‘Move!’. Taking a deep breath of
clean air, possibly my last, I pushed away from the wall to
safety. As I struggled to open the window, I felt my heart
pounding. My lungs screamed for air. The smoke descended
and I worked blind, my eyes stinging. I pulled franticly at the
catches, felt them give and tumbled out onto the ground
below. I felt the heat escaping from the open window above
and started to crawl slowly away.
 Structure

Organization Sophisticated
of the control of the
material is text
simple structure