An animal that, through much research, has proven to be an intelligent creature with high

levels of cognitive abilities is the elephant.<<revise this to make the research the subject: In the
last decade<< or whatever historical time marker you should put there, scientists have conducted
several studies to determine the level of elephant intelligence. There are many accounts in which
elephants have shown their intelligence through their behaviors in many social settings and
situations. <<good comment<< In this essay, I shall review examples of research into elephant
behavior that indicates the consciousness and high intelligence of African and Asian elephants.
Here I will discuss different scientific studies and accounts of elephant cognition.<<this sentence
can be deletedit repeats and doesnt add anything To begin, I <<its okay to use I oncebut
dont overuse it or else the spotlight is on you instead of on the researchthe spotlight
throughout your review should be on the scientists and their studies<< will talk about Atiya Y.
Hakeems study on the brain of the African elephant, based on his book, Brain of the African
elephant (Loxodonta Africana): Neuroanatomy from magnetic resonance images. This review of
the elephant brain is to provide a background into the intellect of the elephant so that there is a
better understanding of what this creature is capable of. I will also refer to the online journal
Comparative Cognition & Behavior Reviews by three researchers the journal isnt by 3
researchersyou may be reviewing an article that appeared in this journalyou need to be
precise and accurate in how you describe the sources. Also the titles of journals should be put
into italics. Titles of articles go into quotation marks. to show that the various behaviors of
elephants demonstrate specific cognitive abilities.<<this is pretty vague and something youve
already said so try to make the introduction of this article more specific to what they did I
<revise to remove Iwill follow up my discussion on elephant cognition with elephant
communication. This final selection deals with how elephants interact with each other using
different cues to exude different intentions.

Comment [1]: Since you're lacking on the

"historical" aspect of this paper, this would be a
good spot to include the time period in which
many accounts were made.